If this is still going to happen, I could be interested. If not, someone please let me know.
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The Imperial Prisoner Task Service (Forgot to mention that this is a Star Wars RP)
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8 yrs ago
Forum: Casual Roleplay
@The1Rolling1Boy
Always happy to help.
If you'd like to do a bit of independent study before this gets moving, the star wars wiki is pretty comprehensive, and a generally entertaining read. I'll drop you a link below.
starwars.wikia.com/wiki/Main_Page
Always happy to help.
If you'd like to do a bit of independent study before this gets moving, the star wars wiki is pretty comprehensive, and a generally entertaining read. I'll drop you a link below.
starwars.wikia.com/wiki/Main_Page
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8 yrs ago
Forum: Casual Roleplay
@The1Rolling1Boy
Speaking only for myself, I notice some inconstancy within your CS, but that can be excused by the fact that you weren't aware that this was going to be a Star Wars game. For example: you mention something about a cell phone at one point, and later a soda can bomb. Obviously, these tidbits don't fit within the selected 'verse, and merit a more thorough edit.
Stylistically speaking, you do get a bit wordy at times. Why say, "dusty sky blue eyes that look like they have grey clouds in them..." when "cloudy, blue-grey eyes.." gets the point across just as well and flows much better?
I'm not trying to knock you down or anything; I just wanted to try and offer my own constructive critique. I don't know that these are the same concerns that DepressedSoviet had, but it's something to consider all the same.
Speaking only for myself, I notice some inconstancy within your CS, but that can be excused by the fact that you weren't aware that this was going to be a Star Wars game. For example: you mention something about a cell phone at one point, and later a soda can bomb. Obviously, these tidbits don't fit within the selected 'verse, and merit a more thorough edit.
Stylistically speaking, you do get a bit wordy at times. Why say, "dusty sky blue eyes that look like they have grey clouds in them..." when "cloudy, blue-grey eyes.." gets the point across just as well and flows much better?
I'm not trying to knock you down or anything; I just wanted to try and offer my own constructive critique. I don't know that these are the same concerns that DepressedSoviet had, but it's something to consider all the same.
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8 yrs ago
Forum: Casual Roleplay
Name: Jarrde Holder
Age: 25
Race: Human
Gender: Male
Appearance: Jarrde is of a tall and slim, though not unmuscular build. Time in various prisons, rebel and imperial alike, has given his features a somewhat rugged and gaunt look. His brown hair is long and and generally unkempt.
Equipment & Clothing: Jarrde carries a collection of vibroblades, as well as a very cherished Verpine shatter gun. He dresses himself in a basic, but comfortable set of flight fatigues.
History: Jarrde Holder was once a junior officer of the Imperial navy. He had graduated from the academy with high marks regarding leadership and tactical proficiency. He was expected to be on the fast track, but alas, this was not the case.
Jarrde's criminal career began rather nobly by aiding the escape of a few dozen Wookie slaves. This earned him his first prison sentence with the Empire.
This didn't last long, however. By the pure chance of being in the right place at the right time, Jarrde had the good fortune to be liberated during a heroic prison-break when a Rebel strike force came to rescue some of their captured comrades. Rather than joining the cause, however, he stole one of their ships and made his way to the outer rim.
Here on the fringe of the galaxy, he fell in with a band of pirates and smugglers and found a profitable career targeting imperial and rebel convoys alike. His military training served him well in this line of work, and he grew rich plundering weak merchant vessels and under protected military supply lines. He eventually fell in love and married the gang's captain, a pirate named Salina Ginn (Seen next to him in the provided image). Things were going well.
But such is the way of life, the good times can never last. As they were attempt to seize a valuable cargo freighter, they fell into a trap set by Imperial forces. Most of the crew was captured, but Salina was killed in the preceding firefight. Only Jarrde and a couple of others managed to escape. Alone and desperate, he finally turned to the rebellion for help. But old grudges from past crimes lead to inevitable betrayal. Jarrde was quickly sold out to facilitate a prisoner exchange with the empire. At the end on the line and back in Imperial hands, this is where the story begins.
Personality: Defiant, sarcastic, and somewhat arrogant, but not especially quick to anger. Becomes much more cold blooded, however, with the recent death of his wife.
List of Crimes: Various flavors of treason against the empire, conspiracy, piracy, forgery, and dozens of confirmed counts of murder.
Age: 25
Race: Human
Gender: Male
Appearance: Jarrde is of a tall and slim, though not unmuscular build. Time in various prisons, rebel and imperial alike, has given his features a somewhat rugged and gaunt look. His brown hair is long and and generally unkempt.
Equipment & Clothing: Jarrde carries a collection of vibroblades, as well as a very cherished Verpine shatter gun. He dresses himself in a basic, but comfortable set of flight fatigues.
History: Jarrde Holder was once a junior officer of the Imperial navy. He had graduated from the academy with high marks regarding leadership and tactical proficiency. He was expected to be on the fast track, but alas, this was not the case.
Jarrde's criminal career began rather nobly by aiding the escape of a few dozen Wookie slaves. This earned him his first prison sentence with the Empire.
This didn't last long, however. By the pure chance of being in the right place at the right time, Jarrde had the good fortune to be liberated during a heroic prison-break when a Rebel strike force came to rescue some of their captured comrades. Rather than joining the cause, however, he stole one of their ships and made his way to the outer rim.
Here on the fringe of the galaxy, he fell in with a band of pirates and smugglers and found a profitable career targeting imperial and rebel convoys alike. His military training served him well in this line of work, and he grew rich plundering weak merchant vessels and under protected military supply lines. He eventually fell in love and married the gang's captain, a pirate named Salina Ginn (Seen next to him in the provided image). Things were going well.
But such is the way of life, the good times can never last. As they were attempt to seize a valuable cargo freighter, they fell into a trap set by Imperial forces. Most of the crew was captured, but Salina was killed in the preceding firefight. Only Jarrde and a couple of others managed to escape. Alone and desperate, he finally turned to the rebellion for help. But old grudges from past crimes lead to inevitable betrayal. Jarrde was quickly sold out to facilitate a prisoner exchange with the empire. At the end on the line and back in Imperial hands, this is where the story begins.
Personality: Defiant, sarcastic, and somewhat arrogant, but not especially quick to anger. Becomes much more cold blooded, however, with the recent death of his wife.
List of Crimes: Various flavors of treason against the empire, conspiracy, piracy, forgery, and dozens of confirmed counts of murder.
In
The Imperial Prisoner Task Service (Forgot to mention that this is a Star Wars RP)
→
8 yrs ago
Forum: Casual Roleplay
In
The Imperial Prisoner Task Service (Forgot to mention that this is a Star Wars RP)
→
8 yrs ago
Forum: Casual Roleplay
Name: Jarrde Holder
Age: 25
Race: Human
Gender: Male
Appearance: Jarrde is of a tall and slim, though not unmuscular build. Time in various prisons, rebel and imperial alike, has given his features a somewhat rugged and gaunt look. His brown hair is long and and generally unkempt.
Equipment & Clothing: Jarrde carries a collection of vibroblades, as well as a very cherished Verpine shatter gun. He dresses himself in a basic, but comfortable set of flight fatigues.
History: Jarrde Holder was once a junior officer of the Imperial navy. He had graduated from the academy with high marks regarding leadership and tactical proficiency. He was expected to be on the fast track, but alas, this was not the case.
Jarrde's criminal career began rather nobly by aiding the escape of a few dozen Wookie slaves. This earned him his first prison sentence with the Empire.
This didn't last long, however. By the pure chance of being in the right place at the right time, Jarrde has the good fortune to be liberate as a Rebel strike force came to rescue some of their captured comrades. Rather than joining the cause, however, he stole one of their ships and made way to the rim.
Out here on the fringe of the galaxy, he fell in with a group of pirates and made a career of it, targeting imperial and rebel alike. His military training served him well out here, as he grew rich plundering weak merchant vessels and under protected military supply lines. He eventually fell in love and married the group's captain, a pirate named Salina Ginn (Seen next to him in the provided image). Things were going well.
Although the good times can never last. As they were attempt to seize a valuable cargo freighter, they fell into a trap set by Imperial forces. Most of the crew was captured, but Salina was killed in the preceding firefight. Only Jarrde and a couple of others managed to escape. Alone and desperate, her turned finally to the rebellion for help. But old grudges from past crimes lead to inevitable betrayal. Jarrde was quickly sold out to facilitate a prisoner exchange with the empire. At the end on the line and back in Imperial hands, this is where the story begins.
Personality: Defiant, sarcastic, and somewhat arrogant, but not especially quick to anger. Becomes much more cold blooded, however, with the recent death of his wife.
List of Crimes: Various flavors of treason against the empire, conspiracy, piracy, forgery, and dozens of counts of murder.
Age: 25
Race: Human
Gender: Male
Appearance: Jarrde is of a tall and slim, though not unmuscular build. Time in various prisons, rebel and imperial alike, has given his features a somewhat rugged and gaunt look. His brown hair is long and and generally unkempt.
Equipment & Clothing: Jarrde carries a collection of vibroblades, as well as a very cherished Verpine shatter gun. He dresses himself in a basic, but comfortable set of flight fatigues.
History: Jarrde Holder was once a junior officer of the Imperial navy. He had graduated from the academy with high marks regarding leadership and tactical proficiency. He was expected to be on the fast track, but alas, this was not the case.
Jarrde's criminal career began rather nobly by aiding the escape of a few dozen Wookie slaves. This earned him his first prison sentence with the Empire.
This didn't last long, however. By the pure chance of being in the right place at the right time, Jarrde has the good fortune to be liberate as a Rebel strike force came to rescue some of their captured comrades. Rather than joining the cause, however, he stole one of their ships and made way to the rim.
Out here on the fringe of the galaxy, he fell in with a group of pirates and made a career of it, targeting imperial and rebel alike. His military training served him well out here, as he grew rich plundering weak merchant vessels and under protected military supply lines. He eventually fell in love and married the group's captain, a pirate named Salina Ginn (Seen next to him in the provided image). Things were going well.
Although the good times can never last. As they were attempt to seize a valuable cargo freighter, they fell into a trap set by Imperial forces. Most of the crew was captured, but Salina was killed in the preceding firefight. Only Jarrde and a couple of others managed to escape. Alone and desperate, her turned finally to the rebellion for help. But old grudges from past crimes lead to inevitable betrayal. Jarrde was quickly sold out to facilitate a prisoner exchange with the empire. At the end on the line and back in Imperial hands, this is where the story begins.
Personality: Defiant, sarcastic, and somewhat arrogant, but not especially quick to anger. Becomes much more cold blooded, however, with the recent death of his wife.
List of Crimes: Various flavors of treason against the empire, conspiracy, piracy, forgery, and dozens of counts of murder.
@Ayemdar
Yes, I saw that. Funny how characters sometimes take a completely different road than we originally plan for them, isn't it?
Keep in mind, though, we may go ahead and reboot this into the Free section. I haven't spoken to Delta or DriveEmOut since yesterday, so I don't know how they feel about it yet, but I think it'll be a good move to make. Of course, it'll come down to whatever Delta wants to do. I don't know anything, I just work here. XD
Yes, I saw that. Funny how characters sometimes take a completely different road than we originally plan for them, isn't it?
Keep in mind, though, we may go ahead and reboot this into the Free section. I haven't spoken to Delta or DriveEmOut since yesterday, so I don't know how they feel about it yet, but I think it'll be a good move to make. Of course, it'll come down to whatever Delta wants to do. I don't know anything, I just work here. XD
Oh, I see. That's awfully inconvenient, but perhaps for the best. It would give me the opportunity to help Delta prepare this thing a little better, at any rate. Ultimately, it's his call as to what he wants to do.
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