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I'm here now. <_>

Time to shower. I wonder how long it's been since I showered and shaved.

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Asuras said
Yea, I meant blood-bending . She can't exactly be immune to someone bending their own blood. xDNow she (Mary) just has slightly better regeneration, no longer with high natural defenses.Avelynn has also been updated with a different set of powers. Hopefully this one is much more acceptable. Edited in the mana explanation as well.Their personalities have been forgone because I'd rather their actions speak for them. Their histories are pretty generic, so I didn't think it was all that necessary to give them one, nor would it be interesting to read.

Avelynn and Mary (along w/ valentinezzzzz) have been accepted. I'm liking Avelynn a lot more not because she's less offensive, but because there's that chance to have her be the supportive backbone of the Hunters, aye? :D

I will be looking forward to figuring out their personalities in the roleplay. I am an evil mastermind, after all. >:D

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NEW UPDATE! (i did not see the update you made to your Sheets, Asuras; my bad lol)

I ACCEPT THE HUNTERZZZZZZZ

BUT...

the gm...

Yeah, we just have to wait for Rose to come online to add your characters to the Character Listing. Unfortunately, that might take a few hours, so screw it and go on ahead to introduce your characters, Asuras.

Welcome to Athalia Academy, btw! >:D

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Asuras said
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Hm. I may have worded several things incorrectly (I've yet to master English lol). And I was assuming that the weaknesses were directly related to combat due to their combative nature, but if that's the case, then I'll gladly accept those weaknesses.

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While Mind Control might actually tempt me to blacklist someone (jk, I'm not that cruel XD), there are many kinds of "blood-benders". For instance, in Deadman Wonderland, there are characters that use their own blood to create makeshift weapons, and those count as hemokinesis as well.

Sorta like this

You probably meant that blood-benders who affect OTHERS' internal blood are overpowered, and that is something I absolutely agree with you on (though there's already a villain that's capable of doing that in a way). However, I kinda wish that you described just what kind of hemokinesis it blocks. :D (to, like you said, reinforce the rules like a boss)

I understand the telekinesis part, obviously. The only thing I'm mainly concerned about is the high defense power she has, which I assume that you will be editing soon based on your last post. :D

I misread the Ciercelt Hunter description, and I apologize for that.

I think Mary would definitely be acceptable if the changes are finalized! :D

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If Avelynn DOES have a mana source, then I definitely appreciate that! Still, making it fully present in the CS would be appreciated to avoid confusion.

If you are doing a rework on her abilities, however, I will simply disregard what I said earlier and prepare to analyze again.

(btw, are their personalities and backstories things we need to figure out in the roleplay? just curious on this part, actually, because it's optional anyway. :D)

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@Asuras: I'm loving the amount of work you're putting into these characters! They're unique additions to the roleplay, and I definitely want to see them in action as soon as possible. :D

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Theobromine said
So... We needed more females and good guys/heroes. I think the numbers are being filled in quite nicely. xD

I still don't think there's enough heroes, actually. One of the villains is just overpowered to the core.

It's feedback time. Also, do note that I give feedback through an non-favoring way, so please read what I have to say with attention. (I'm not always going for sh-ts and giggles)

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Mary Ciercelt

I would like to know how heavy these weapons she carries are, because I don't think she'll be lifting stuff like school buildings and using them as a regular weapon... right? o.o'

Her weakness of not being able to use magic is seemingly mitigated by the fact that she can take damage pretty well. I recommend that this particular section is somehow balanced, because having both of these can be unfair for magic users.

Body Mastery is by far one of the strongest, yet way too powerful abilities so far. It's basically saying that several magic users who rely on hemokinesis, telekinesis, or mind-control (which no one literally has right at the moment) cannot be used on her, The very fact that she has this AND the power to use immense amounts of power without consequences could make up a particularly ridiculous combination. My recommendation is to completely scratch out one of these, or somehow balance the two to give others some room for counterplay.

She also has Ciercelt Hunter, which means that, so far, she has insane defense, fairly high offense, and the ability to see through her opponents and do something pretty... unfair. I recommend you to look into this and try balancing the skills out, because so far, this character has a generally unhealthy kit right at the moment. I'm pretty sure it'll be easy for you to edit them out, though.

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Valentine Ciercelt

Nothing in particular is actually overpowered about this timid girl, but some clarification on her use on "mana" will be appreciated to clear confusion.

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Avelynn Ciercelt

Arcanist is a tadbit overpowered if you add in the fact that Avelynn is, from what I could tell, a sniper and has no energy sources like mana. The library should be toned down, or an energy source should be made to provide some counterplay. (This may not have been your intention, but I like to see more details on what consequences there are in using a library of an entire arsenal of spells)

If she can use magic bolts with great efficiency and speed, I doubt that her ability to snipe should be accepted as well. Basically, she can fling down a rain of energy bolts on people that cannot see her without becoming exhausted. It's pretty... unfair, I guess. The fact that these bolts seemingly have a high damage output begins to put it in the path of an overpowered ability.

I personally do not think her weakness of being weak in close-range combat actually exists if she can:

1. Do equal damage with her magic in any kind of range.
2. Set up traps and fire fast magic bolts at a fast pace.
3. Analyze her enemy and know how to dodge pretty much most of their attacks.

I feel like this is not actually a weakness, but more of a general analysis. An actual weakness would really be recommended.

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Summarization

Mary: Needs a rework of balance in her kit. She has advantages in nearly everything, and provides no counterplay for both magic users and physical fighters. And Anger does not qualify as an actual weakness if she can't be easily taken down anyway.

Valentine: No problems here. Just a clarification on her mana system would be nice.

Avelynn: Needs a rework of abilities in her kit. She does not have an actual weakness (like Mary, who can pretty much avoid fatal damage with Ciercelt Hunter) and can easily avoid it by using unmentioned abilities in her "library of spells" (a summary of what's in the library would be nice). Horizon Mage + No Energy System makes her an unfair opponent in nearly all circumstances when combined with her lack of weaknesses.

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Very interesting concept, and a huge (pleasant) surprise as well! Some balancing and tweaking would make me gladly accept these characters, but we'll have to wait and see for the changes. :)

I hope all three of them make it in soon. This party's going to rock really hard soon!

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EDIT: POSTING AT IC TOMORROW. I'm pretty tired.

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Sukui said
Still working on editin' that?

It doesn't say it anymore, though. o.o

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FaithsRose said
It's a risk we're willing to take :P Besides Driving Park's got a post up ready for you to reply to xD1800 OOC posts? O.O Wow we talk a lot...

Oh, you haven't seen me talking a lot yet...

On another note, I'm gonna go work on my fanfic. I need to hone my Humor skills there.

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Theobromine said
Lol, in just page 20 alone you can see my username pop up 3x while most people only have 1 post in there. xD As much as I love a good invasion, I think it's time to let other people post.

>:(

NU.

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Driving Park said
Nahhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh

>:(

NU.

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Nero said
tictac

NU.

>:(

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Ryuu Yamauchi

His sunglasses were on, and his lightsaber was literally chained to his pockets. A small backpack rested on Ryuu's broad shoulders.

With no hesitation, he kicked the dormitory room open in a stylish manner, his leg remaining in its initial kicking position before being lowered. Today, Ryuu was feeling quite good! The first day at Athalia Academy, there were a bunch of students asking him to be friends, and he gladly accepted them all with warm, embracing arms. After all, he was quite the friendly guy. Mmm hmm! He sure had a great day yesterday, and now, he was going to be awesome today as well!

Going back to reality, he actually got mistaken as a gangster, a punk consistently looking for fights, and a man who threatened others simply by looking at them. At the same time, he met David, some people, and most importantly, a girl who he became quite fond of. She was like that one person people made sure that no harm would get to her. Sure, she did have healing abilities, but seeing her in pain sounded like an awful idea. Oh yeah, did Ryuu mention that he saw a huge demon and an insane beast crashing a party? He sure as heck did not, and it was not a bragging right in many cases if he was thrown about the place. Twice.

A beautiful aroma came into the air.

...Whoa, Ryuu said, covering his nose because the smell was too good for him. It actually smells like my sister. She spent way too much time making food and testing them out on me. That big b-tch...

The otaku began to head toward the source of the smell...

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Nathaniel G. Terotrax

Isse was apparently not a morning person, which was ironic, but Terotrax had no idea as to why it was so. Instead, he decided to keep going, moving out of the bathroom to let Isse go shower in peace as he sang on,

"You just need to ke-eeeeeeeep on fightin'...! To the end~~~!"

The boombox user hummed some of the next parts before completely changing his tune again. With the voice of Optimus Prime himself, Terotrax said to Isse,

"Your name is Isse. And I... am Optimus Prime."

He then began to laugh with his eyes closed, his boombox playing hip-hop music. The DJ made sure to distance himself away from Isse, who looked noticeably angry, but the smile on the college student's face never wavered. His intentions were very innocent, after all. The student planned on going to his classes soon, but not right at the moment.

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Jeanne R. Cortez

"...Eh?"

Cortez blinked in surprise. She was not allowed to set sail toward Geor-gee-ah? Then that meant that she would not be able to find treasure in a foreign land.

...

...

The pirate captain's cheeks puffed up, her cheeks beginning to grow flushed as she mumbled, "I-I- er, methinks me could find a way to go there anyway! With money and... stuff!"

In other words, she refused to admit defeat. She then walked over to her leather bag, which served as... her backpack. She took out a pouch filled with enchanted bullets before hanging them by her waist. The captain looked just the way she was as she looked in the previous day.

"...What's life in Geor-gee-ah like?" Cortez suddenly asked curiously, her eyes shining again.

She was quite an enthusiastic person who quickly forgot bad things.

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Theobromine said
Speaking of spamming, I think I've done enough of that in the IC for now. xD I'll wait until tomorrow before I make any more posts.

nu keep spamming plz

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Nearly done with my IC post