Shard

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@Jay Kalton So, am I accepted then?

@geminironin

We've been discussing your backstory. It's preferred that you were born in Konoha, given what Jay wrote in the first post.

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I wouldn't have a single problem with creating a new genjutus/bloodline based around genjutsu, its more like I don't feel spending 1-2 hours on a proper character, just to end up not being able to join due to the limited slots situation :')

@Ploxerdon

Genjutsu just like Telekinesis and Mind Magic in an RP all share one very specific flaw. They cannot be "dodged". It is incredibly hard to play a character which targets the minds of others. Roleplaying Genjutsu is a chore to write and go up against, and also remember that even though the characters in this RP are supposed to be above average, they are still genin. Low level Genjutsu doesn't do much against most enemies we would face and high level Genjutsu are a complete hit or miss. Either they kill your brain, or your enemy sees through them. It is an incredibly static way of fighting, which is why the Sharingan has -so many abilities-. The Byakugan actually makes sense, it is a visual jutsu which works like a filter that helps the user see things that are otherwise hidden. The sharingan is all over the place.

Playing a genjutsu character would get dull for you very fast since almost every single "Mind magic" technique is always "Plot No Jutsu". You look at your enemy, they go ape shit, you walk away. It's not the most satisfying situation. Also, genjutsu is rather cheap overall. You clash blades with your enemy, it doesn't work...so you look at them very intently and they fall over.

Role playing Genjutsu takes a lot of skill to manage properly.

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Okay, we've reviewed your sheets. There was a lot of back and forth on several notes but in the end, we could only come to one consensus. What I am about to say will probably piss you both off, but it's the only logical solution that we could come to terms with.

No one can play an Uchiha.

There are two major reasons for this, one is the fact that it breaks lore and the other is purely mechanical. Let's start with the first. Itachi was tasked to kill every Uchiha, which he did. Sparing Sasuke was a -huge- deal, and the fact that he was the last Uchiha was a major plot point. I realise that this is an alternate universe RP -to an extent-, however surviving the Uchiha massacre is no small feat. Also, this might just be me but I am honestly a bit tired of the typical Anime backgrounds of "My family got killed, now I'm an avenger." It's highly overused and rather redundant by this point. Death in the family is fine, but the whole massacre thing is a bit old now.

With that said, Itachi slaughtered the Uchiha with help from Obito, the dude who nearly destroyed the world with Madara. I don't think hiding under your bed would help you escape that. Sasuke survived because he was allowed to survive. No one else survived.

When it comes to the Sharingan, the thing is vastly overpowered. I think Kishimoto just went waaaay overboard with what that eye could do. It essentially removes every other character's individuality with its "Copy Ninja" techniques. We have more than enough Taijutsu characters in this RP and with the Sharingan, you can essentially become all of them. Not to the mention the Sharingan's later level abilities. Amaterasu is actually -stronger- than it is portrayed in the anime since it sets ANYTHING YOU LOOK AT ablaze.

Bottom line. The sharingan is OP and Uchiha characters are dead. Also, just a pet peeve of mine...writing in your character sheets that your character is "Better than others" at something, isn't very good. Describe them as excellent if you so wish, I know I like to showcase what my characters are good at but it's very easy to step on other people's toes when you feel the need to write down that your character is better than his/her teachers and fellow Genin, I'm just saying.

Conclusion:
We cannot accept Uchiha characters. You're welcome to make other ones to be reviewed if you desire.

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Another option is to keep the one not chosen as back-up in case somebody has to drop out?

@Ploxerdon

We prefer to review sheets when open spots come up.

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Added a list of shit that Toko is trying to invent because...fun times.

Also, Artifact, Jay and I are going to discuss your character along with Ploxerdon's and see what we can agree on.

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I actually made some further edits to Toko.

Added a skill. (He's now a mechanical weapon engineer...yaaay...Or rather, he designs crossbows.)

Made him a scrawny, fucking weakling. (Because...I wanted him to be a scrawny little shit that can't throw a punch.)

Changed some key words in his jutsus. (Crossbows can't use arrows...duh..)

Added a few sentences to his Kekkei Genkei and changed his weapon. (Again...no arrows. They be bolts...)

Okay, peace out. Have a nice day, love you all. Kaythxbye.

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Luvs it as always, Shard o3o

@Jay Kalton

Yaaay, sank yuu

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So yeah, this is Toko with a few major changes. Changed his weapon style and his Kekkei Genkai and uhm...yeah that's it.

Toko Ling

"My arrows run faster than you."

Basic Info
Name:
Toko Ling

Nickname/Alias:
N/A

Age and date of birth:
Fifteen, second of June.

Age Appearance:
Thirteen - Fourteen

Sexuality:
Homosexual

Parents:
Wa Ling - Mother (Deceased)
Ken Ling - Father

Length and build:
5’0ft, lithe and thin. Rather than possessing bulky muscles, Toko has a thin frame, athletic like that of a dancer.

Weight:
90 Pounds

Favorite weather and season:
Spring and summer.

Village:
Konoha

Birthplace:
Konoha

Organization:
Shinobi Forces

Clan/Bloodline:
Ling

Rank:
Genin

Chakra Nature:
Wind

Character Appearances
Appearance:
Toko possesses a thin frame, rather light skin and black hair. A set of brown eyes rest above his nose and peer at you with a soft smile stretching across his lips. There isn’t much that would catch your eyes about this boy. He wears clothes that allows for freedom of movement and prefers to move about without much encumbrance.

Toko’s body is what would be expected from a ninja his age. He’s rather small which would lower the threat he’d impose to quite a drastic level. It would be uncommon to gaze upon this boy and expect much of a punch but as most would have learned through their experiences, in the world of the ninja, a person’s size and age mean next to naught. Toko always wears outfits akin to his clan, consisting of an elegant silken vest that licks his thin torso rather tightly. Apart from the fingerless leather gloves donning has hands for a better grip, his arms are bare and leave little to imagination.

Upon his legs, Toko wears a pair of shorts reaching down to his kneecaps. Finally by his ankles the boy's ninja sandals take over and cover his feet. Most of the time, he’d leave it at that. He dislikes accessories as they get in the way and dresses in a way that reflects his view of life, simple. Across his chest one can often see the string of a bow thrown over his shoulder.

He’s not very creative when it comes to colours as most of his clothes are either black or grey, however a rather colourful personality can at times make up for it.

Personal Information
Personality:
What lurks behind that cute little smile of his? It’s a question many have asked, but none has quite been able to decipher it. Toko doesn’t appear to be menacing in the slightest and sometimes he could seem a bit ‘too’ innocent. However, those who know him also know that this is far from the case. While not quite an act, Toko appears to be incredibly humble and never measures himself with anyone. He would much rather simply step aside and allow the situation to take its course without violence or pride getting in the way.

One could call this cowardice but on the contrary, it’s confidence. Toko doesn’t feel like he has anything to prove to anyone but himself. He is very well aware that there will always be those who are stronger than he is, and there will always be those whom he can best without much of an issue. This is an objective truth which will always ring true no matter where you are, no matter when you are. In short, Toko sees no reason in measuring himself with others and has as such developed a calm, serene and harmonic personality which allows him to meet conflicts with a smile, an apology or a simple nod.

Of course, this humble personality does have the tendency of pissing some people off as they can take it as patronising. This is never the intent, however when words reach physical violence, Toko will never hesitate to commence combat. The boy is an incredibly protective individual and will do everything in his power to protect those he considers his friends. However, he is not a fool. Being a ninja, Toko has been taught to be disciplined and professional, never rash and foolhardy.

Quiet and without many words to share, Toko is still quite social. He enjoys contact with others but prefers to listen rather speaking. Words have a much greater impact if they are charged up with knowledge and wisdom, something that is acquired by listening. Speaking of which, Toko holds great respect towards his elders and gladly listens to their experiences as to learn from their lives. Respectful would be a great word to use when describing this boy.

History:
Toko grew up with a close relationship to his mother and father, both of whom were incredibly open minded and accepting individuals. They raised him well, but throughout his childhood, Toko kept mostly to himself and it grew with the years.

It was early that he learned that his mother had been struggling with a terminal illness but it didn’t show itself very often. In fact, she was a very strong woman but with her energy being constantly sapped, it eventually became too much. What could be considered a perfect little family was down one member once the illness finally won the fight. Since childhood, Toko’s mother had been an astounding warrior, but the one foe she could not beat was the illness draining her spirit. Her passing was hard on both Toko and his father but together they managed to struggle through it.

With her gone, Toko grew even more reserved and kept to himself most of the day. The passing of a year was enough to eventually crack a small hole in the shell he had created and he started to speak more and spend more time with his father. Their relationship grew stronger once the mourning had been going on for a while and things started looking up.

Ken continued with his missions, and Toko’s grades at school were picking back up. Before and after his mother passed on, Toko’s life was rather straight forward. His Bloodline Limit ability showed itself as early as ten years into his life and has since then been close to his heart. It has been the centre of his combat prowess and what draws his clan’s capabilities.

Toko gets along with most people but has at times difficulties initiating meaningful conversations with others. It has however been noted that his ability to maintain social interactions with others has improved quite a bit over the years.

Since an early age Toko found great interest in the concept of bloodline limits and powers all together. Given the fact that he noticed how he was 'different' at such a young age, he quickly grew interested in what other people could do. He happily spent many hours listening to stories and tales of old, learning about various clans and their feats.

Theme Song:
Theme Song
Battle Theme

Battle Arsenal
Weapons/Items:
Toko uses a bow as his main weapon.

Skills and Techniques
Skills/Abilities:
Excellent
- Aim
- Ranged Combat

Good
- Teamwork
- Stealth

Horrible
- Close quarters combat. (Tai, Kenjutsu)
- All kinds of ninjutsu excluding his Kekkei Genkai (Completely unable to use them.)

Special Traits:
The Ling bloodline while good at what they do, are unable to manage even the simplest of jutsu beyond their own Kekkei Genkai.

Kekkei Genkai:
Chakra Manifestation
The ability to conjure chakra into a solid state, it is an ability practiced by the Ling bloodline as their specialised combat maneuver. At a young age, the user of this Kekkei Genkai chooses to link his or her spirit with a single shape which will later be accessible for conjuration. The arrow is the absolutely most common shape the Ling bloodline has connected themselves to, and as such are known as splendid archers.

This shape, in this case an arrow, can be summoned at will and nocked onto the string of a bow before it's fired at whomever is the target. As the user of his ability grows in power, they are able to imbue their conjured item with various effects ranging from elemental fire to poisonous strikes.

Traits/Abilities of Kekkei Genkai:

D Rank Jutsu

Name: Chakra Arrow
Type: Bloodline Limit
Rank: D
Range: Personal
Hand Signs: None.
Description: The most basic of techniques. This ability allows Toko to summon an arrow made out of pure chakra. It has a blue transparent colour like chakra usually does and acts like any other solid arrow. However, these arrows are unaffected by environmental disturbance such as wind. The arrow will vanish after a certain amount of time.

Name: Fire Arrow
Type: Bloodline Limit
Rank: D
Range: Personal
Hand Signs: None.
Description: A basic addition to the Chakra Arrow, Toko infuses the arrow with the element of fire, turning the blue transparency into an orange hue.

C Rank Jutsu

N/A

B Rank Jutsu

N/A

A Rank Jutsu

N/A

S Rank Jutsu

N/A

Star Wars: The Circle Of Space - High Casual

Also, I am not going to wait for reserved spots much longer. I am willing to stretch the amount of characters to six, but if good character sheets roll in that I accept, the spots will be filled.

Also everyone, remember that first come first serve is not a thing. If your char sheet is up to par, I'll accept you.