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Hello! :) Are you possibly still accepting?
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I hate it when that happens, I feel ya.

Sunlight is a very valid weakness, regardless of what you may think. I understand you don't want extra weaknesses, no one does, but we're trying to help you out here. Perhaps the sun itself can cause it to shrivel up, while unnatural light (such as light from light bulbs, camera flashes, etc) has no effect? I dont know. I'm fine with zombie like tendencies (slow movement, sickly behavior, lack of energy, etc) if you want that. Can you supply us with situations in which this power would be used?

Also, be careful with the word refuse with Allen. Knowing him he'll do just that just to mess with you, and it's also a bit disrespectful.

Hello Silent Resonance! We are always accepting!
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Lovely! Glad to hear that! I will try to get a character sheet written up sometime today :)
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I'll get in a post later, been working on a final character.
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I've fixed the outlying issues, and still fail to understand what's wrong with using the word 'refuse'; surely he didn't take offence to something as insignificant as such? If I have offended anyone, I apologise, it's hard to get my point across properly in some areas it seems.

I meant that it is impossible to be instantaneously immune to any disease as it is in the real world, too; there's just a varying degree on how fast your body reacts to destroy it, and whilst we can contract disease fairly often we do not feel them as our body is fast enough to remove the pathogen before it manifests into any physical damage.

The corruption is a powerful disease, but Allen's character is a powerful healer. Technically, she probably won't be able to feel the corruption at all (save for maybe standing on it and feeling a bit itchy, but that's more of a residual effect from the nerves to show that they are standing on something dangerous - similar to the way your fingertip tingles with pain just before you place your hand onto a hot object) since she'll be incredibly fast at destroying it.

I never refused to let her be immune, since technically, she already will be. And again, I apologise. I tend to find that I sound a bit blunt when I type - it's a common occurrence. I'm glad you're patient enough to tolerate my rudeness.
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No, you misunderstand me, Allen's a pretty cool guy and he wont care. I'm say dont say I refuse because he will most likely do just what you dont want to annoy you. :P
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"Allen is cool, just don't give him a chance to make your character a bitch of one of his own"...That's Red speaking fellas!
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InfernoBlaze said
"Allen is cool, just don't give him a chance to make your character a bitch of one of his own"...That's Red speaking fellas!


lol, misread that as "Allen's a bitch, just give him a chance to make your character a cool one".

Anyways, any more issues that I need to address? :)

Actually, I have one - particle manipulation or not? My power can't really hurt people in fights, see. If we were to fight things that is. I'm fine with even just a minor particle manipulation, makes it good that the corruption dies quicker. Maybe the more particles I use, the less corruption there is?
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Okay, Stitches, I have some problems with your sheet.

To begin with, it seems like she can pretty easily shut people down. Stomp the floor once, the entire surface is quickly covered in corruption, and anyone who can't fly is now infected with it. Lethargy, slow reaction time, and dizziness are pretty damning in a combat situation, so I feel like your character only needs to get a couple of hits in and any given character is shut down. Even the healers. It fades off after thirty minutes, but causes severe mental deterioration over several weeks. So does she have to actively be next to someone, continually flowing corruption into them without sleep for several days in order to see this effect? If so, without being rude, is there a point to having the negative long-term effects?

I'll be honest. I don't really understand how your power works or what the applications of it are. If it's just making people sick, I'm sorta lost as to why it's an extra-dimensional thing. It's essentially this toxic substance that she's capable of restraining as I best I understand. She can't control its movement, but can control whether it effects people and remove it forcibly. It also says she does not have to expend energy to resist corruption, but is slowly being corrupted without any of the symptoms. How can our characters become corrupted if it dissipates after thirty minutes? I'm not trying to be obtuse but I'm lost as to how this power works, and what applications it could have. Being able to levitate on the corruption's a cool idea, but if she can't control how the corruption spreads then she's kinda limited in where she can go, isn't she?
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If you wanted me to change it, then you could've just told me? I'll think of something different since a multitude of people seem to have some form of protest against it. Honestly, it's a new character, it's just about as malleable as play-dough. There's no need to be so indirect about your dislike for it.
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Stitches said
If you wanted me to change it, then you could've just told me?


He just did now. =P

Stitches said I also refuse to have Theresa be immune to the effects instantly, but I can clearly see that she'll be able to fight it off in a matter of seconds in herself, and longer in others.


Stitches said I never refused to let her be immune, since technically, she already will be. And again, I apologise. I tend to find that I sound a bit blunt when I type - it's a common occurrence. I'm glad you're patient enough to tolerate my rudeness.


*Cough*

What's honestly the different between being completely immune to it, and fighting it off in a few seconds...?

Personally, you should just change the power into something. I know you were trying to go for a unique power, but I don't see this corruption ability working. And as Shade said, she basically just secretes a toxic substance. The rest of the sheet is fine.... Nothing really special about it, but it works.
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Sorry guys, meant to post last night but had something come up and I passed out comforting a friend...I'll catch up and adjust my half finished post accordingly!
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Fixed.
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Yeah, could you go a little bit more in detail about her power? She can just make anything shatter (No matter the hardness) with no effort, or, what? Sorry for the hassle.
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Yeah, could you go a little bit more in detail about her power? She can just make anything shatter (No matter the hardness) with no effort, or, what? Sorry for the hassle.


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- Cannot break magical/enchanted objects.
- The harder it is to break, the more energy needed.
- Object cannot be completely shattered if it's twice as tall as Jackalyn.


Sorry, it's late and I'm tired. :£ Is there anything else I missed?
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Mr Allen J said
Yeah, could you go a little bit more in detail about her power? She can just make anything shatter (No matter the hardness) with no effort, or, what? Sorry for the hassle.


At least it's not as difficult as it was for me :p Which reminds me I need to finish up that second character while I wait for a response ^_^ Didn't see anything on relations for Sylvia on Stephen so I figured might as well give it a shot! Plus gotta love messing with the new guy :p
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Alright kiddies, after much thinking, we're moving up to the advanced section. This thread will be locked shortly.

http://www.roleplayerguild.com/topics/58110/posts/ooc
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Hey guys, some news.

We're moving, not off forum or anything, but to a different category. We've all been impressed by everyone's length and the amount of plotting that's been going on. We've decided we have the skills required to be categorized in the Advanced Roleplay section so that way we are more likely to find people like you all around!

Here's the link. You don't have to resubmit anything, we'll just continue from where we left off both IC and OOC.
[url]http://www.roleplayerguild.com/topics/58110/posts/ooc?page=1#post-1789738[/url]
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