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Im a bit interested in joining. Its something I need to scratch that BNHA itch
So this'll just be my place holder post while I work on a CS.

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Hey. apologies for going silent. I had a completely different Quirk idea and I was hesitant to undo my progress. It would also require me to redo my whole backstory, at least to a degree, so I was on the fence about pulling the trigger. But here it is.

Quirk Name: Android
Quirk Type: Mutant
Quirk Description: Alex's body may look normal on the surface, but beyond a layer of semi-realistic fake flesh, he's completely mechanical. Strangely enough, his body grows normally with age due to a telescoping internal structure, hence why he isn't still a baby (as robots normally don't grow). This comes with numerous advantages, but also numerous weaknesses. While Alex has the superhuman strength, shorter reaction times, tireless endurance, higher running speed, enhanced durability, and superhuman processing power of a robot, this doesn't mean his Quirk-generated structure is compatible with other computers right out of the starting gate. He runs on his own operating system, with his own internals and unique hardware. As a result, while his basic mechanical structure can be repaired by anyone with a basic knowledge of robotics, in order to outright replace or upgrade a part, the machinist must basically reverse-engineer him first, making it much more difficult for him to get the services he needs. However, he can be modified to rectify some of these problems, such as by giving him additional protocols or a USB port to interface with otherwise incompatible machines, but these modifications are simply not there yet. Of note: Alex can actually eat or drink like normal people, as his body atomizes food for fuel via a plasma arc, much like real-life plasma gasification plants. However, when he burns the syngas produced via this method, he must release the built-up exhaust once an internal canister fills up, much like how most creatures must expel waste. He usually goes outside to do this. His body is also capable of internally self-repairing moderate damage, much like how a human can heal broken bones, but he must consume large quantities of metal and/or plastic and/or rubber to do this, and the process is only slightly faster than similar healing would be in a human. Alex also has a power plug for charging off of electricity if food is unavailable or for convenience's sake. The main strength of the Android Quirk is actually not its superhuman abilities, but its robotic nature: Once it is reverse-engineered and compatibility with modern systems is obtained, any amount of internal weaponry, enhancements, and defense systems can be installed, within reason. After all, his powerplant and processor can only handle so many components at once.
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@Genon Androids doesn't really suit the MHA universe... Every Quirks are related to some form of mutations, true, but I don't think a human can mutate to be born robotic with not-biological body parts.

Unfortunately, I can't accept this Quirk. Plus, even if it wasn't for that, the Quirk itself has too many advantages and the best of all worlds, it's not balanced properly. I suggest reading a Wiki of MHA to inspire yourself from existing Quirks and see the difference in power and design to this one, or even just our CS Tab for inspiration and what not.

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Hey ! I've seen your WIP, I'm just waiting for it to be finished before analyzing it and giving feed back. :3
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I literally shitposted my way to a chance at a second character

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@Indra Hey !

That Quirk sure seems original, but I have many problems and confusion about it.

First: Spices have nothing to do with actual Heat, so while I understand the idea behind pairing the two for style, some of the things you wrote makes little sense. To me, he's just another Fire Quirk, but with blue flames. Everything Spice related makes little to no sense, and the MHA universe powers, or Quirks, are built around the fact that they basically have to make logical sense.

Furthermore, keepîng in mind that at this point his Quirk is basically just any other Fire Quirk, I also have problems with the moves. Producing Fire or Electricity is a thing but shaping and using it is another. I rewathced Endeavor's fight scene, and he does shape it into balls that he shoots or, at one point, a sort of Javelin - my guess is that it takes load of training to learn to master a Quirk to this level. And he's world wide 2nd Best Hero. The one Move where you are cloaked In flames seems OK, but the two others are way too advanced for a student. He may learn it as the story goes forward, but it takes time to master a Quirk.

Even more than that, the Sample Post is too little too few. I am not talking in terms of length, of which I do not care, but the Quality isn't there. It feels as if it's written Hastily, and it tries to skip over some information which should be described more deeply. It lacks something, and it's not high quality enough that I could accept it as it is !

You can Edit it all, if you wish it, then poke me that I can take a second look at it.
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Appearance:
REGULAR APPEARANCE
Lucian is usually seen wearing a regular T-Shirt with a graphic on it (his most favorite ones being a tribal designed sun, The Great Wave Off of Kanagawa, and a lion), with camo cargo shorts. He loves wearing casual clothing when he can, sometimes opting to wear his casual outfit instead of his school uniform.

HERO OUTFIT
His hero suit consists of white robes (most resembling a jedi's clothing) and sandals. On the back of his robes are his family crest (it has a white lion over a red pavise shield) .

Name: Lucian Phaleon
Age: 18
Gender: Male

Hero Name: Archangel
Quirk Name: Hardlight
Quirk Type: Emitter
Quirk Description: This quirk allows Lucian to create hardlight objects of anything. Of course, the bigger it is, the bigger the cost on his body. If he wants to, he can emit something so big (like an explosion on the nuclear level), but it would most likely cost him dearly/

Inventory: Whatever is in his pockets

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The Phaleon Family has always, throughout history, escaped persecution. From the Spanish inquisition that took many lives, to the Holocaust that took many more. Lucian was born never knowing a home. He always ran, from police to villains. His family were scavengers and thieves, stealing what they could to survive. This head to Lucian being born with a hunter/gatherer mindset. In the early part of this decade, an oppertunity arose the Phaleon family. They could send theur only child to the United States. Under this heartbreak, did Lucian discover his quirk, Hardlight. His heart broke when his family told him he was going to a foreign place all by himself, and that he would most liekly never see his parents. But hey, at least there was no need to run anymore...
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@SimpleWriter

1. I'll just go with blue flames. I'll make a similar recoil to Bakugou's explosions then, if that is allowed or just go with the typical Fire User weakness which is their body can't handle prolonged usage. I understood on how things must make sense.

2. Sample post was cut short because my phone was dying so literally I wasn't finished :/

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@JrVader Too lackluster. Quirk not explained enough, lacks details and potentially way too power just from that very small description.
Sample post is also too lackluster. I simply cannot accept this as it is, still needs a lot more work before that point. Sorry.

@Indra As I discussed with my CO-GM, I quite liked the Spice idea. It's just that how you put it made little to no sense.

Since everything pointed to wanting to have a Hero similar to Endeavor, let me say that; If I had been you, I'd have created a Hero with a Quirk that lets him create some sort of extremely spicy substance in either spray or dust form? Since your character idolized Endeavor, I would have made it so the character was constantly laughed at for his Quirk that seemed so insignificant compared to the number 2, but who keeps trying. It's the perfect under dog story of someone who never gives up, and eventually makes something of his quirk.

Otherwise, going for a classic Fire Quirk, yet blue, is also fine with me if you prefer that.

Make your choice if it's not already done and poke me when you edited your sheet, please. :3
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This took me longer than I hoped because I didn't have access to my computer for a week. This is currently where my CS is at. The Bio is lacking as I wanted an element of mystery to her upbringing while allowing for only what only the character and people around her should know. If you want to know what I had in mind just lemme know



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@Pudding Right off the bat we have a problem; the Sample Post is obligatory. Sample Post is not Bio, Sample Post is a way for me to know if I accept you or not !

You don't have to write about your character's past. Hell, you don't even need to write about your character, but I included it in it because that is usually what everyone does. In the end, though, I need a Sample Post.

I read the rest real Quick and I probably would need to talk about it with my Co-GM, but to me it doesn't seem like anything else is extremely out of place.

P.S: @Indra @Pudding I have to mention that I am ready to accept only one final player as Hero. Which ever one of you edits first and is accepted can join. It's worth to mention that I might need a new villain soon-ish though, but that is not yet certain.

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@Genon I'm sorry but I'm with SimpleWriter on this. Some machine-like body parts would be fine, but a full on android just doesn't fit the MHA setting. Also, the reverse engineering thing would likely be really tricky IC. Sound of Silence without the strength/speed aspect would be fine though, if you're willing to redo the backstory.

@OwO I like it, glad for you all the shitposting paid off xD Accepted as far as I'm concerned, just check with SimpleWriter if you haven't already.

@Indra I second the spice idea, instead of a mix of fire and spices. Like a pepper spray effect, which would actually be really useful but not as flashy as fire, so he gets laughed at a lot and has to rise above it. That'd give him a reason to act high and mighty.

Of course, like you said, going with a classic fire Quirk is also an option. It's probably quite a common Quirk as it's a very basic one.

@JrVader I have to say the CS needs more fleshing out. As for the Quirk, hardlight is fine but it needs more restrictions. First of all, in what way does overuse harm his body? Maybe it could cause him pain or fatigue, or it could have a similar drawback to Yaoyorozu's Quirk and drain nutrients. Secondly, nuclear explosions are frankly waaaaay too strong whatever the cost, so please limit his creations in terms of size and power.

Also, the sample post is written like a typical background section. Sample posts in this are meant to be examples of writing style and skill, as well as insights into characters from their point of view.

Let us know if/when you expand on the application, and we'll look over it again.

@Pudding Intriguing character! As long as the Quirk is somewhat like Tomoyami's Dark Shadow rather than any kind of actual spirit possession, it sounds good. And the mystery aspect is interesting, though I recommend PMing SimpleWriter and me with details about the backstory, just to make sure it's all ok.

That and got to say a sample post is needed. Also, while being wounded from having her hair cut is a suitable weakness, instead of becoming nigh-indestructible, maybe it should be tougher than normal hair but a strike from a sharp enough blade would still slice through it. That'd balance things out more.
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@Genon I'm sorry but I'm with SimpleWriter on this. Some machine-like body parts would be fine, but a full on android just doesn't fit the MHA setting. Also, the reverse engineering thing would likely be really tricky IC. Sound of Silence without the strength/speed aspect would be fine though, if you're willing to redo the backstory.

@OwO I like it, glad for you all the shitposting paid off xD Accepted as far as I'm concerned, just check with SimpleWriter if you haven't already.

@Indra I second the spice idea, instead of a mix of fire and spices. Like a pepper spray effect, which would actually be really useful but not as flashy as fire, so he gets laughed at a lot and has to rise above it. That'd give him a reason to act high and mighty.

Of course, like you said, going with a classic fire Quirk is also an option. It's probably quite a common Quirk as it's a very basic one.

@JrVader I have to say the CS needs more fleshing out. As for the Quirk, hardlight is fine but it needs more restrictions. First of all, in what way does overuse harm his body? Maybe it could cause him pain or fatigue, or it could have a similar drawback to Yaoyorozu's Quirk and drain nutrients. Secondly, nuclear explosions are frankly waaaaay too strong whatever the cost, so please limit his creations in terms of size and power.

Also, the sample post is written like a typical background section. Sample posts in this are meant to be examples of writing style and skill, as well as insights into characters from their point of view.

Let us know if/when you expand on the application, and we'll look over it again.

@Pudding Intriguing character! As long as the Quirk is somewhat like Tomoyami's Dark Shadow rather than any kind of actual spirit possession, it sounds good. And the mystery aspect is interesting, though I recommend PMing SimpleWriter and me with details about the backstory, just to make sure it's all ok.

That and got to say a sample post is needed. Also, while being wounded from having her hair cut is a suitable weakness, instead of becoming nigh-indestructible, maybe it should be tougher than normal hair but a strike from a sharp enough blade would still slice through it. That'd balance things out more.


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The thing is, I actually based the Android Quirk off of something from the anime. In the audience at the UA Sports Festival, I remember there being two robots sitting next to each other. I figured they were heroes of some kind, since so many pro heroes were in the audience. I'm pretty sure they even get some dialogue at some point, commenting on the fight.

Of course, those robots were closer to tin-can types than androids, sort of like the robots used for the UA entrance exam. But I hadn't seen any other sapient robots up to that point, so I figured that their appearance was a Mutant-Type Quirk. From there, why not make an android Quirk?

In any event, Sound of Silence was something I was reluctant to use in its original form. Yes, venting the absorbed sound would make for a pretty good offensive move, but sound is hard to direct, and if it's loud enough to stop a rampaging villain, it's probably loud enough to cause collateral damage. And I frankly didn't want to play such an indiscriminately destructive hero, hence why I gave it a strength and speed boost instead.

I'm not really sure what to do here, but I can probably make something closer to cybernetics, like Iida and Jiro's Quirks.
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I've never had to do a sample post before, so I didnt really know ehat to put of im honest. I'll fix some things and PM you things regarding backstory when om finished with work today
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@Puddingyou can look at the accepted characters for references on what to do the opening post on.

Could be a slice of life. Her getting ready for school, or a big moment in her history.

Edit sample post not opening post sorry
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I made a small sample post, that's all I can pump out with my work drained brain right now.
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@Nyahahameha Multiple problems here.

1. You say she bends more easily than others, but she also has bones yes? So it depends where and how much you meant. She couldn't twist as much as a snake, let's say.

2. How could she fly? This would mean some exterior force is pulling the strings upward, and I think that's what you meant? I don't know how to explain this but...you said that the strings function like real muscles, but on the outside. I am sure you know that even if you tried, you cannot actually 'Pull' yourself in the air, so I do not know how those wires could? Who's 'pulling the strings' ? Re-read you, it's all good. So she attach the strings to things and pulls from those? Like Spider Man? xD

The rest looks fine, and those two points can probably be worked on to make them possible.

@Pudding OK. So.

Your Sample Post is a bit small and doesn't feel like a post, but you did say you were tired. I checked your profile, I see you're coming back from a 2 Years break.

I like your character design very much, though. I would be willing to accept you as our last Hero spot and give you a shot? Do you have Discord?
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@Nyahahameha Looks good to me, except for the two things SimpleWriter mentioned.

One, flexibility is ok as long as it's just in her joints and she's not super bendy all over.

Two, I figure that when you say she can fly, you mean she can suspend herself from objects. That's what I got from the line "Using enough threads, Molly can even achieve a limited form of flight - assuming she is indoor or there is a tall enough structure nearby - by using her threads to lift herself entirely off the ground." This is fine, as long as there are suitable objects around indoors that can support her weight.

Once you've clarified this, I say the profile can be accepted, just check with SimpleWriter.

@Pudding As long as you make sure the hair isn't nigh-indestructible, the CS is probably ready to accept. Yeah, the sample post isn't a typical post, but it's interesting. Makes me want to find out more about her.
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Um yeah, I can join the discord if you like and discuss things with you.
By decreasing the defence of the hair, I'll have to decrease the amount of pain Chloe takes from it being cut. But I can always work that into the character.
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