[OOC] Blades of Iron Roses: A fantasy Knight RP

[ghastlyInc]

Hey man, nobody complains when you pair salty with sweet. So why not irish with French....
....some how I feel like I'd offend either group by the suggestion.

[Feisty-Pants]

I think I should point out that there aren't really any defined ranks in the knights, aside from the captain's. ... and that borrowing names from classical mythology for swords doesn't really fit so much. :P

Besides, Irish and French? D:

@Raineh Daze

Fixed the rank then.

And yes, Irish and French. I'm almost a 50/50 split between the two. And it's been an intentional easter egg to my irl heritage for many years. (Salt gave quite the spoiler xD). I speak french fluently, and actually have a funny accent between the two as a result.

[Saltwater Thief]

@Saltwater Thief: I'll look into the bio shortly.

Candaeln isn't a town. It's the home base of the Iron Roses, a large building with an expansive bath(donated Mayon blessed water stocking it), a kitchen, and a lot of bedrooms.

It's in Aimlenn, Thaln's capital.

@VitaVitaAR

Quick little thing as I plan things out, are the baths kinda like the old world communal baths, or are they more individual?

[VitaVitaAR]

There's two communal baths, one for men and one for women, and then the Captain has a private bath.

[Feisty-Pants]

There's two communal baths, one for men and one for women, and then the Captain has a private bath.

@VitaVitaAR

My CS is done on the previous page, what's the word boss?

[VitaVitaAR]

@Feisty-Pants: Sorry I totally forgot and now it's pretty late. ^^; I'll look it over tomorrow.

[Feisty-Pants]

@Feisty-Pants: Sorry I totally forgot and now it's pretty late. ^^; I'll look it over tomorrow.

@VitaVitaAR

Noooo worries. I hope you like her!!

[VitaVitaAR]

Made a quick edit to the last post.

[Feisty-Pants]

Made a quick edit to the last post.

@VitaVitaAR

Fun fun.

[VitaVitaAR]

... I am so sorry I keep forgetting I have a bio to look over. ^^;

I'll try and do it soon.

[VitaVitaAR]

@Feisty-Pants: Okay, um... if there was an enormous civil war that cost thousands of lives recently it'd be a big deal, and the biggest recent war of that nature was Phoran Cal's rebellion, in Thaln.

Still looking over the bio.

Edit: Photographs do not exist in this setting. ^^;

[Feisty-Pants]

@Feisty-Pants: Okay, um... if there was an enormous civil war that cost thousands of lives recently it'd be a big deal, and the biggest recent war of that nature was Phoran Cal's rebellion, in Thaln.

Still looking over the bio.

Edit: Photographs do not exist in this setting. ^^;

@VitaVitaAR

It was an internal family squabble, not an actual civil war between split factions of a country. ^^; Sorry about the misconception there.

Also, can easily change it to a sketch. Just a moment.

EDIT: Fixed the photo issue.

EDIT 2: Feel to ask for clarification or for me to change on any other issues. Not afraid of criticism unless it's unwarranted. As Salt can vouch for me on.

[ghastlyInc]

Yo, Guess I'll throw my two cents in, albeit not the GM. Just to address a few things mainly in the magical abilities list you provided.

The Ultimate Eye --

description

Minerva's trademark magic, and the most feared magic of the Fairchild Family. While some magics comjure fire out into the world, this one harnesses the fire within. Causing perception and bodily enhancement to maddening levels as she she can be described as moving faster than some can even see. Survivors tell of tales where she was standing before them fifty feet distant, and when they blinked, she was upon them

The Rose of May --

description

A blossoming of fire around her form that explodes outward. White hot fire, that appear to be flower petals swirl about her form in countless thousands of tiny blades that burn and slice through even the heaviest armor, if it were not magically warded.

Heaven's Strike --

description

A shocking blast of fire at searing hot temperatures around a single target. With temperatures and the swiftness of a bolt of lightning, it can be difficult to anticipate.

I'd feel a little more comfortable if you put a little more detail into the exact behavior of these spells. Limitations on improvements to ones abilities, possible long term side effects she might experience that sort of thing (more so for ultimate eye than the other two). Not a huge issue (Loli seems to be cool with them), but its always nice to establish a clear baseline when dealing with magic. (if only for so in the future, things remain internally consistent. Sans Rule of Cool moments.)

[Feisty-Pants]

Yo, Guess I'll throw my two cents in, albeit not the GM. Just to address a few things mainly in the magical abilities list you provided.

The Ultimate Eye --

description

Minerva's trademark magic, and the most feared magic of the Fairchild Family. While some magics comjure fire out into the world, this one harnesses the fire within. Causing perception and bodily enhancement to maddening levels as she she can be described as moving faster than some can even see. Survivors tell of tales where she was standing before them fifty feet distant, and when they blinked, she was upon them

The Rose of May --

description

A blossoming of fire around her form that explodes outward. White hot fire, that appear to be flower petals swirl about her form in countless thousands of tiny blades that burn and slice through even the heaviest armor, if it were not magically warded.

Heaven's Strike --

description

A shocking blast of fire at searing hot temperatures around a single target. With temperatures and the swiftness of a bolt of lightning, it can be difficult to anticipate.

I'd feel a little more comfortable if you put a little more detail into the exact behavior of these spells. Limitations on improvements to ones abilities, possible long term side effects she might experience that sort of thing (more so for ultimate eye than the other two). Not a huge issue (Loli seems to be cool with them), but its always nice to establish a clear baseline when dealing with magic. (if only for so in the future, things remain internally consistent. Sans Rule of Cool moments.)

@ghastlyInc

Valid point for at least the Ultimate Eye. Pending on what the GM says, I'll add some kind of weakness if she(?) mandates that it's too strong. On my end it doesn't seem that bad, just raw physical enhancement.

[VitaVitaAR]

I can second ghastly there really. ^^; I'd like some clarifications and elaborations on the magic.

[Feisty-Pants]

I can second ghastly there really. ^^; I'd like some clarifications and elaborations on the magic.

@VitaVitaAR

Okay, what are you looking for specifically? So I can write towards what you want. ^^

[VitaVitaAR]

Specific limitations on The Ultimate Eye, specifically, and and maybe a bit more on the targeting abilities of Heaven's Strike.

... Also this is a little nitpicky, but Heaven does not really exist in setting, Reon's Sun Palace and Mayon's Moon palace serve that purpose. ^^; It'd make sense to maybe rename it to something sun-related since that can be tied to Reon.

[Saltwater Thief]

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Valid point for at least the Ultimate Eye. Pending on what the GM says, I'll add some kind of weakness if she(?) mandates that it's too strong. On my end it doesn't seem that bad, just raw physical enhancement.

@Feisty-Pants

Well, the bit that usually makes people wary about it is the degree of the enhancement. You like to say it makes her fast enough that people can't see her move, which is pretty damn powerful even without the strength she also gets. You're usually fine with that being flavor text, but people who haven't worked with you before won't necessarily know that from the description.

It IS just physical enhancement... but technically so is most of Superman's powers xD

[Feisty-Pants]

Specific limitations on The Ultimate Eye, specifically, and and maybe a bit more on the targeting abilities of Heaven's Strike.

... Also this is a little nitpicky, but Heaven does not really exist in setting, Reon's Sun Palace and Mayon's Moon palace serve that purpose. ^^; It'd make sense to maybe rename it to something sun-related since that can be tied to Reon.

@VitaVitaAR

Okay, so how about after an extended of Ultimate eye ends,(For about half an hour straight) there is a period of magical exhaustion where she can't use spells? Like a full day or so? Would that be enough? Short burst usage say 5-10 minutes shouldn't be penalized heavily. Maybe some physical exertion, even though she has been training for years to handle this magic?

For Heaven's strike, it's meant to he fast, but I can see where it would be excessive. I can just ditch it and make that easier.

[Feisty-Pants]

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Well, the bit that usually makes people wary about it is the degree of the enhancement. You like to say it makes her fast enough that people can't see her move, which is pretty damn powerful even without the strength she also gets. You're usually fine with that being flavor text, but people who haven't worked with you before won't necessarily know that from the description.

It IS just physical enhancement... but technically so is most of Superman's powers xD

@Saltwater Thief

Ayep.

Added weaknesses to the Ultimate Eye, deleted heaven's strike and made a small change to The Rose of May. It functions a little more like um...Byakuya's ability.

So, outside of magic, the Bio is good, VitaVita?