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@Aristo Ooooooooh, liking the image. Don't wanna spoil myself wit anything else though. Let me know when its done and I'll review it.
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A couple of points here. @Card Captor

1. I think you could add a bit more detail to his description. I think you would know your character best, so I think you should put a little more depth into his description. Some more wouldn't hurt right? lol I also think his personality could use a bit more detail, but I guess I'll let it slide, though it couldnt hurt to add more there either.

2. His blood type cant just be O. There isn't such a thing as O blood. It is either O+ or O-, pick one. I missed it, but same thing goes for @WhiteStar19, AB alone isnt a blood type. Is it AB neg or AB pos? Please choose one and change it in ur character sheet accordingly :)

3. But the biggest thing im concerned about is his power. It seems like Orihime's(from Bleach) ability. Is it like a temporal rewind? Or a biological rewind?

Point A.) Could you give me an example or two of this?----->(or turning chemical changes and complex objects back into their raw parts. When putting something back together, it does this by having the separated pieces fly together violently)<----And could u explain this for me, cause that sounds more like a temporal rewind. He isn't really healing, and is more so just reversing time around an object to revert it back to its original state. Right? I ask because if the pieces fly together violently, can he reverse time around a ball to make it fly back where it came from, or can he reverse a flower back to when it was a seedling? I need some clarity on how it works, cause a power like this needs a bit more detail and explanation of its logistics.

Point B.) Also, the Imperfections you have said aren't actually imperfections. An Imperfection is a FLAW in the ability. A hiccup. Being in a bad mood is a circumstance. When and if he gets in a bad mood, his powers go out of wack. That isn't inherent nor is it an imperfection. Its not the power thats flawed, its his mood. And seeing as your character is on super friendly juice, the probability of him being in a bad mood is very fickle.

Secondly, "him having to touch something before he can use his power on it is a pre-requisite. It doesn't make the power imperfect or flawed. Okay, he touches something and can then use the power perfectly. No. lol A pre-requisite isn't a flaw, its just the formality for activating his ability. That's it. I mean, im not saying you can't keep those for what they are, but they arent imperfections.

(He can not restore life to a living being, and he can not use his powers on himself)<-------Hmmmm...this could potentially be his flaw, but it also just feels like a limitation. His power still works perfectly, he just cant restore life and self regenerate. But I suppose for a power like this, its hard to find a very logical flaw or imperfection. Might be easier to find once you describe Point A for me.
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Guess I'll drop a WIP character sheet too.
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My WIP for now :3 Will continue working on it this afternoon or evening.



When the imaginary animal part is too much I can change it into a normal animal.
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nvm, i flipped a table and my interest went crashing to the ground with it. I died from doing too much thinking into this xDDD
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@Angel Eyes Changed it. I can't believe I forgot. xD

Also, when will we know if we have the Orion spot?
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@WhiteStar19: Thanks whiteSTAAAARRRRR! :P

Well, when or if more people joined I was going to decide. lol But I'm optimistic it wont be long.

@Urbanliner I feel like Mizuki is trying to seduce someone and kill them at the same time. LOL Is he trying to be sexy in that picture?

@Amaralyn Elisa is soooo fucking cute. OH! And Imagine Dragons FTW! One of my favorite bands!

Looking forward to you guys finished product.

@GummyCat I didn't realize you were interested seeing as you never expressed it to begin with. lol How did you put too much thinking into it?

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@Card Captor I see Jojo references.
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@Card Captor I see Jojo references.


Thank god someone does

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Edited my CS
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@Card Captor Alright amigo, hes accepted. You can go ahead and move him into the character tab! :)
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@Angel Eyes

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Your welcome!
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Alright, so, flaws seem to be a point of difficulty from what I can tell.

Let me run something by you: would a high propensity for collateral damage be considered a flaw? More specifically, the power being easily able to set off a destructive chain reaction if not used within specific parameters?
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Alright, so, flaws seem to be a point of difficulty from what I can tell.

Let me run something by you: would a high propensity for collateral damage be considered a flaw? More specifically, the power being easily able to set off a destructive chain reaction if not used within specific parameters?


Not necessarily a point of difficulty, but more so an internal fluke, an imperfection that makes the power. Like in the show, for example. One of the characters has the ability to teleport to any point in his line of sight, but its portrayed as his body literally moving super fast in one direction. And the flaw/imperfection is that when he teleports he cannot fully control where he stops so hes always crashing into things(per hurting himself and causing collateral damage).

But, the power has to be inherently flawed, not sometimes due to parameters or circumstances. For setting off a destructive chain reaction to be the flaw, that would ALWAYS have to be the case when he uses the power, not just sometimes if not used within a specific parameter. But whats the power though? Hard to know the flaw if i dont know the power.
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Well, for the "difficulty" part, I meant that players were having difficulty designing it. It's hard to make a power with an intentional glaring flaw.

In any case, my planned power is Ionokinesis, or Plasma Manipulation.
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Well, for the "difficulty" part, I meant that players were having difficulty designing it. It's hard to make a power with an intentional glaring flaw.

In any case, my planned power is Ionokinesis, or Plasma Manipulation.


Oh I here wat ur saying.I don't think anyone has expressed any difficulty making a flaw so far. But I can see why u could feel that way depending on the power. Certain powers require a little more thought. But that's how powers work in the actual anime, I didn't just make it up. they are inherently imperfect.

But if majority of the people are unsatisfied with the idea of an imperfect power, I might be willing to get rid of that aspect.
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Finally done with my CS!

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@Angel EyesI'm still working on a cs, but how does this sound for an imperfection of telekinesis?



I understand that, with enough training, my character would be able to use their power in such a way that it seemed to be just normal telekinesis, but I'm not sure if that's okay or not. If it isn't, I have a back-up power planned, so it's really no big deal. :D
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@Talipaendrag

That actually sounds like a really viable imperfection for telekinesis. I like it! ^_^

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She is too cute. Haha/ I will review her in a bit.
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[@Tailpaendrag]

That actually sounds like a really viable imperfection for telekinesis. I like it! ^_^

@Amaralyn

She is too cute. Haha/ I will review her in a bit.


Thank you > w < Can't wait for your judgment.
I made one last edit just now: I changed her quote.
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