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3 yrs ago
Current Remember, nobody actually enjoys roleplaying if there isn't at least five shameful fetishes uncovered by the 2nd page.
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5 yrs ago
Somebody stole my mood ring. I don't know how to feel about it.
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5 yrs ago
Let's be honest, it's far more satisfying and challenging to actually imagine what a character looks like than paste a hundred gifs of a celebrity and call it good.
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5 yrs ago
So, a team of players who are good at playing as a team in a team-based game are individually bad players. Seems kind of silly when you put it like that, no?
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5 yrs ago
My goal these days is to have an RP that can actually finish, or the very least, last a few years. I see way too many die on page one to take chances
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Ancano looks different in a tie.
@gcold, so I get that nothing was necessarily confirmed yet, but between knowing where everyone is at the moment and the events information on the first page, I figured I might as well get started. Then I couldn't stop. So, yeah, I got a little carried away. Sorry.

There might also be little spots in the sheet that might need little touch ups or editing, so forgive me when you see them. Don't gotta decide anything just yet, but I do wanna know what you guys think.



Cold's gonna be doing his own critique and review when he wakes up from his zombie-like slumber, so here's my go.

First off, I really do want to give props where props are due; you are a phenomenal writer! You manage to describe imagery and set scenes remarkably well, and for the first quarter of the sheet, I was absolutely on board.

Where we start to run into issues is a lot of the Molag Bal stuff... we're going to give the super strength possession stuff a hard pass because it's overpowered as hell and presents a real risk of power gaming that I'm not comfortable with. Typically I tell people to steer away from Daedric stuff with their sheets because when you're talking about literal gods, things get really muddied really fast. Much like how I tend to look at vampire and werewolf submissions with extra scrutiny because of the powers involved and implications of being a literal monster, in this case we're dealing with someone who, whenever you deem it so, can become possessed and gain super strength that can overpower anyone and murder them. While I don't think you'd use this to kill off player characters (or start to cannibalize them, egads), we're just going to cut that off at the pass and just say no to the possession angle.

However, that's not to say all of Molag Bal's influence has to be taken out of the sheet since it's a pretty big driving force for the character, but I'd much rather see the influence as something that's more like an irresistible urge than a straight up Exocist-level body puppet, something where Wylendriel's (full disclosure, for some reason I read the full name as Wayne Gretzky when I skimmed by at first. My Canadian is showing) thoughts and desires are blurred with what Molag Bal compels her to do. You should also be aware that if any character suspects she's under Daedric Prince control, she runs the risk of being executed. We've had a werewolf go that route of death by exile into the Kamal ranks.

We also want to have the voices toned down from really clear voices and be something more akin to visual flashes, whispers, a few choice words, but something that's open to really deep interpretation. Depending on how involved we get Molag Bal and his influence, that could increase, but for now let's avoid the voice in the head route.

We both really liked that she gained conjuration skills through Bal's influence, that is a really unique spin on a character that adds some interesting depth to it all. We do suggest that she was at least a novice in Conjuration to begin with so it was more like a foundation that was heavily built on.

Other stuff I feel needs addressing,

Keep in mind this is a mercenary company and someone who's a hardcore pacifist like Wylendriel is going to HAVE to fight at some point; the commanders aren't going to sign someone on who doesn't have demonstrable skills as a soldier of fortune. While her healing would make her a really attractive asset, it would more likely than not have her pressed into service as a field nurse at base camps rather than taking part in missions, aka a huge part of the roleplay. Trust me; even simple missions can take months. That's a long time to go without any real character interaction. You should really evaluate what could make this character work as a mercenary, even if they do have pacifist-like views. My own character Do'Karth, for instance, has a code against killing but he still is one of the fighters in the company who is more than happy to beat enemies into submission and put his life in danger to help others, be it opening routes, try to rescue prisoners, act as a distraction/ buffer for mages, and so on. Maybe a part of Bal's influence has made Wylendriel something of a subtly violent person with a subconscious desire to dominate others? Maybe fighting is something that helps keep the influence at bay, and she's struggling to maintain her values prior to Molag's Ballz interjection in her life and what he's forced her to become. It's far more compelling if she's a character that's struggling with her own choices and flaws rather than having a tidy thing to blame by having MB be the soul culprit, e.g. "It wasn't me that burned down the orphanage! Bal used me!"

I also noticed you tend to write Aldmeri Dominion as Altmer's Dominion. It's the former because the Altmer are extremely proud and arrogant about the fact they are closest in lineage to the progenitor elvish race, the Aldmer (you could argue that pure snow elves and Maormer would have equal claim to that, but alas). It's not unlike the whole Aryian Master Race thing the Nazis were all keen about, only in this case with a basis in legitimate claim to racial purity unlike whatever it was the Nazis were claiming. This is also the Third Aldmeri Dominion, which makes the whole Third Reich comparison even more poignant; usually when Germans are going on about a Reich, they're harking back to the glory days of Charlemagne. In the Altmer's case, their Aldmer forebears and how fucking great they are for being the most pure elvish lineage.

Which also brings up another issue I had, while you're right that the Altmer tend to view themselves as the Ubermensch elves even compared to their bosmer allies/ the seat of the Dominion is in Alinor, the Bosmer are still respected allies and it's important that they maintain the image that the Dominion is all about elvish superiority over man, and to maintain their strength, they need to keep their allies happy and compliant. If the Altmer had a reputation for subjugating, oppressing, and executing the Bosmer, they'd be facing a revolt from Valenwood and would lose a huge foothold on the mainland along with a sizable force of fighting men and women, scouts, and experts in fighting in rural environments. The Altmer also know that if Valenwood broke away, it would be a nightmare and a huge cost trying to conquer Valenwood because the Altmer are not at all suited to fight in Valenwood the way the Bosmer are. Look at how bad of a situation Skyrim's Civil War put the Empire; it made it extremely vulnerable to the Dominion and it wasn't even a province where the natives could be hiding behind any tree or branch with deadly archery and poisons along with the psychological aspect that the Bosmer will totally cannibalize their enemies. As such, it's totally plausible that Thalmor garrisons get overzealous and treat the local populace like crap at times, but systematically murdering swaths of Bosmer would be something Valenwood would not tolerate. It's not a bad idea having Wyl be wanted by the Thalmor for some reason or another, but it should be a personal issue rather than trying to escape sweeping subjugation. Maybe something like they were putting out conscription notices and she wanted to avoid being pressed into an impending war?

The other thing to note is that it kind of sounds like you have the impression the Dominion formed after Wyl was born; the Aldmeri Dominion and Thalmor rose to power very shortly after the Oblivion Crisis 200 years ago and declared independence from the completely dismembered Empire that was reeling from Mehrunes Dagon's attack and the interregnum between the Septim and Mede empires. For all of her life, she's lived under Dominion rule; she literally would not know any other life. She might hear stories from the elder Bosmer or even some of the Altmer who live in Valenwood, but she herself would just have grown up knowing what it's like under Thalmor watch, kinda like how American citizens after 9/11 and the Patriot Act probably will grow up expecting the government to spy on them and all of their communications.

Also, Bosmer and Dunmer each live for around 250 years on average, they can certainly die of old age. Even the Altmer who can live for a thousand years eventually succumb to the ravages of time. This doesn't change anything with your sheet, but it is something worth keeping in mind for playing as Bosmer.

Overall, there's a lot to like about the sheet and the quality is superb, but we really need to tone down the Daedric stuff to make this a viable and fair character for the group dynamics. As stands, Wylendriel would make for a solid stand alone fic character rather than a roleplay character since group dynamics with others apply here.

@Spoopy Scary ohai! I couldn't remember what game I knew you from. Mystery solved.

But yeah! Coldy Locks and I will help you get a character idea up to snuff and help you ease into the game. Don't worry about the year's worth of IC; when I joined it was the second arc and I only retroactively read the prior arc after joining. All you really need to know is the world-effecting events that your character should know about. Think of joining as being in the same boat as them.
Speaking of the peanut butter red flag to go with the "cravings'" chocolate, nothing makes me nope out of an interest check faster than a giant list of generic pairings.

That's great you want to witness a pirate and an astronaut smash genitals, but games kind of require more than basing every single aspect of the game around one player being a repressed deli clerk and the other a meth tripping biker or whatever. How do you possibly build a plot around it that isn't thinner than dollar store toilet paper?

"But Dervs!" You cry, "A good roleplayer can build off of that! We can build a really good story and or hot intense romance just starting with my ninja and your alien princess!"

I admire your enthusiasm, hypothetical interest checker who smashes nouns together and hope they work, but the fact you have 50 pairings that are variations of "Billionaire x Sanitation Worker" tells me you have absolutely no ideas for any of them and expect your partner to either roll with a super improvised story that is a really forced romance sans actual plot or to do the heavy lifting.

That and few times I took the bite and decided to see if this could work, I got dropped for having the audacity of working on an actual character sheet and trying to do some world building so the character would make an ounce of sense. I've learned people are far less interested in even establishing the time period, some locations, and supporting casts than they are hoping that the two characters meet and become each other's entire world while everything else is completely made up on the fly, consistency and logic be damned.

In short, a solid 10 on the pH scale. Basic as fuck.
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Sounds like Sloth, doesn't "act" more "waits" for a reason to act. "For Satan finds some mischief for idle hands to do."

Edit: Lusts in there somewhere, because he enjoys hurting people. Though he restrains himself so it's more like the virtue, chastity.


Sounds pretty reasonable! I keep forgetting the modern definition doesn't necessarily apply.
Do'Karth is like St. Mary the Sue.


Oshi-

On the other side of the coin, it's hard for me to choose a Virtue for Dax. He's got some patience, some diligence, some temperance, some chastity.

However, his Sin is definitely Wrath. Most of his skill and world view is based upon the anger he has.




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Prideful S.O.B.


See, I was thinking wrath or pride because he enjoys fighting and hurting his enemies, but he still knows when to stop himself and he's kind of a pacifist to some degree, or pride because if you squint he's definitely much more at peace with what he his grown into rather than who he used to be, but he's way more on the humble side and doesn't really assert himself unless he needs to.

Wut do
DK's virtue would be Patience; the description is pretty bang on!

I can't really peg him for one of the seven deadly sins because he tiptoes in some of them but it doesn't fit the classical definition.
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