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ok, stuff time. Noster, what is your system for the leech arrows? Also, your character's bio states that his father was a gatekeeper that disappeared when Sylus was much younger. Maybe I'm just arguing with wording here, but if your character is a 200 year old Elf, and the Black Gale has only been around for 20 years, the Gatekeepers only being around for around 14 or so years, so how young would Sylus have been? AWFUL, your character sheet is good except for one point. With his abilities, we would prefer you had some sort of clause that prevented him from using his abilities against other students, or something, as it is probably a good idea not to have a character who can change the physical make-up of other characters. As for your question about Lucis-Earth contact through the black gale, travel is probably not the most difficult thing, since humans have advanced aircraft for transportation, and Lucians have everything from Griffons to dragons. There would at least be 1 or 2 corporations trying to monetize black gale transportation. Though, transport between the 2 worlds probably wouldn't be the most common thing, given that cultural differences are a thing, and only 20 years have passed. Humans, as well as Lucian countries would probably have a large portion of their populations against allowing the other group from intruding on their society. Though, given that it has been 20 years by this point, some acceptance/lenience has occurred. A Lucian historian that decided to move his family to New York to learn more about human culture? Entirely possible. Drew, I am still a bit confused with the "listening to machines" thing. Wouldn't it just be more logical to state that she has a natural talent for recognizing the problems with machines by sound, instead of making it sound like some sort of psychic power?
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Sorry, I got away with myself with my writing style. I didn't mean to make it confusing. I was going for the identifying machines and their innards by sound. It was an ability inspired by the main character of Clockwork Planet, one of my favorite manga/LN that I've been kind of wanting to make a character with a similar ability.
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Alright, you make a fair point NW. I've altered his mutagens so that they only affect his homunculi.
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Noster, what is your system for the leech arrows? Also, your character's bio states that his father was a gatekeeper that disappeared when Sylus was much younger. Maybe I'm just arguing with wording here, but if your character is a 200 year old Elf, and the Black Gale has only been around for 20 years, the Gatekeepers only being around for around 14 or so years, so how young would Sylus have been?
NW, I do not understand what you mean by "system" for leech arrows. I edited his bio and it probably fits much better into the setting now, saying his father became a gatekeeper when the Gale appeared and that he vanished about 3 years ago. Man, I'm such a noob XD
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Oh wait... is the the fact that I used the word "voices" in her weaknesses? I'm sorry I can see how it could be seen as psychic; that isn't meant as like that I was basically filling out the form in-character... I probably shouldn't have done that in this case I guess. She's a young girl that perceives the sounds she hears from machines as their "voice" since she's lived with it all of her life.
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Drew and AWFUL, go ahead and throw your CSs in the Character section. Noster, sorry, that was a question from another GM, but I guess they meant something like "How much mana could the arrows leech, how fast, and other stuff." I don't really know why they asked, though. You are also accepted, anyway. Yay, accepting people, woo!
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All right I think that covers everything, tell me if you see anything that needs to be changed.
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shweeeet, can't wait to start playing :DDD. Thanks for letting a newb like me be part of this lol.
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I'm with Noster. Thanks! :)
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Shiny! I look forward to playing with you all :3
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Is my CS okay?
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Since you asked: No, we did not find it acceptable. As in, not even a revision will fix it since the problems are in regards to the fundamental concept. You're better off making a new character.
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  • Your female image isn't working
  • What's the adverse effects of not munching on hearts?
  • Leeching off magic locales is... eh. Seems kinda like it's trying to dodge the weakness of dealing with organ eating. But like, sentient beings are anything that can perceive or feel. Just eat livestock liver.
  • Your illusions should be only single target.
  • Nix the pocket dimension for your orb, it negates your weakness.
  • What kind of fire spells?
  • The electric collar is hardly a restriction, considering she can just shapeshift out of it. Make it an anti-power collar.
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Finally finished him up, he ok?
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@Gray Really!?...Well that's depressing
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I hope this is still open...
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  • Your female image isn't working
  • What's the adverse effects of not munching on hearts?
  • Leeching off magic locales is... eh. Seems kinda like it's trying to dodge the weakness of dealing with organ eating. But like, sentient beings are anything that can perceive or feel. Just eat livestock liver.
  • Your illusions should be only single target.
  • Nix the pocket dimension for your orb, it negates your weakness.
  • What kind of fire spells?
  • The electric collar is hardly a restriction, considering she can just shapeshift out of it. Make it an anti-power collar.
No problem with most of that, the only one I want to ask about is the choker was so I can have something physically try to stop her from killing someone just for food. If it's just an antimagic collar, not really anything stopping her from attacking someone unawares physically. Other than that I can see the reasoning behind, I'd imagine the choker would adjust to fit if she shapeshifted. Although I never said it could so I see part of the problem there. Edit: also Amon doesn't have any illusion, I never put that in the cs, opting to play into the vampire-ish nature to let Amon be able to give out her energy to others, no matter how rare that may happen due to her selfish streak. The magic leeching would only be viable in areas rich in magic, such as sacred areas and the school, if only for how many practitioners gather there. But if you want the leeching taken out, I'm fine with that.
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Ah before I forget, I meant to ask for a point of reference, what kind of fire spells would a fairly novice caster have available to them, since I'm a bit unaware to what I should limit Amon to when it comes to that area.
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Sorry, busy weekend. ^^" I bolded what I added, hopefully that clears it up a bit more. ~Alice
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Hmmm... kinda quiet around lately. Mind if I try to do some more worldbuilding?
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