AngelofOctober

[Resident Evil]: ESCAPE FROM RACCOON CITY

I'd like to make an Umbrella Operative sent out to clean up the crime scene. Who um might see some of the survivors as just cleanup.

Aria's Seas

@Bishop

-snorts-

"I am not blaming anyone"

Yet, you just tried to put the blame on me again. I respect people who take responsibility. Your sheet was your own fault. Your attitude is your own fault. Your inability to comprehend the RP, your fault.

I admit I may have been a bit harsh on Scarecrow. That's fine I'll take responsibility for it and apologize for maybe being too harsh. But that's the difference between me and you. You get to leave feeling good because you've convinced yourself it's other people and not you.

We're the GMs. I talk to Neo, just as she said, about everything before I post it. What we say is what we say. We will listen to anyone if they have good ideas. But we don't listen to anyone that expects us to think their ideas are good when they are not.

Aria's Seas

@Bishop

This isn't going to work out. I'm sorry, but we're going to have to ask you to leave. Thank you.

Aria's Seas

@Bishop

I swear to god, what part of, magic has been forgotten by man do you not understand.

Aria's Seas

AAAAAAaaaaaanyway, what about a character who uses a deck of cards(magic cards) that have different magical effects in order to fight among other things?

@Bishop

Pirate Gambit

Aria's Seas

@Bishop

I'll tell you this right now. You earn my respect more by taking responsibility. Then trying to put the blame on others. All that comes off is like you're trying to defend some sense of honor;

"everyone should have praised me"

"everyone should have appreciated my sheet"

"everyone should have seen the joke, it's not my fault if they do not get my humor"

No. The only person's fault for that sheet is your own. You failed to execute the humor. You failed to execute that it was a joke. And you failed to clearly communicate that with us. With that said, Neo is right. That sheet is not accepted. You really have two options right now. One is make a character with a serious intention of taking this RP with sincerity. Or get out. Because I do not want you wasting our time.

Considering the lack of comprehension you have shown. I seriously doubt this was a joke. I do not know you. I have never RP'd with you. So to me, this is the first impression I have of your quality.

Aria's Seas

May I ask the intended destination of this vessel?

@Aleranicus

-.-' to hunt down the relics we find

It's about the journey of the artifacts.

Aria's Seas

Something to begin with. I will have to revisit tomorrow, but please feel free to critique as you like!

*Hides in pillow fallout shelter, awaiting the GM's ire*

Marius Triar, The Last Cleric of Hiathas WIP

The Dawnfather's Pilgrim

Marius Unchained

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"The Old Gods have one thing that these new ones do not. Compassion. Whether you believe or not, Hiathas does not loathe you. Hiathas does not curse you. You are loved by the Dawnbringer."

Nicknames: The Last Dawnbringer, the Pervert Priest

Faction: The Cult of Hiathas

Age: 29

Gender: None (See Character Description, paragraph 1)

Character History:

Dogma: The cult of Hiathas in ancient times was a simple one. The Dawnfather, Hiathas, held daylight, athletics, hope, and non-heterosexual love as the domain of his priests and priestesses. His beloved was Braniel, God of the Forests. The priests were often neither male nor female, but took a third gender blending the two. Those who were born with characteristics of both men and women were looked highly upon and could rise highly within the cult.

The Cult gave blessings to marriages between men, women, and those who were neither, pioneered some early healing techniques, and oversaw the harvests in the days of the Southern Republic. Their religious texts mention miraculous healing as well as athletes who could jump so high they seemed to fly and dancers who moved with the grace of flowing water.

The Cult of Hiathas held sway within the Old Republican days of the Southlands for generations, up until the time modern scholars posit the war against the Demon Famerin happened. Many scholars note that this "demon" was actually an interpretation of the Eastern Warlord Famahl of the Haru and the devastation wrought by his hordes on the Southlands. And the Hordes did introduce the cult of the One God to the region, which began the decline of the old cults among the peasants. After all, why pay for eight sacrifices to offer at the altars of different gods when you only need pay for one? It wasn't until the fall of the Republic and the arrival of the first Empress that the cult began to enter a true death spiral. The Imperial Church vied with the Eastern Faith for the hearts of the people, but both sides seemed to agree that it was time for the old cults to go.

The Eastern Church feels the Dawnbringer's message is too forgiving compared to the realities of the world. Only the One God may dispense with hope and compassion, and they must be earned through blood and toil- not given out like flowers at a festival.

The Imperial Church feels the talk of men loving men, of more forms than Man and Woman, of such scandalous talk of life without marriage, to be not only sinful, but unsuitable even for academic discussion. Now universities, the last places where talk of Hiathas and his brothers and sisters happened regularly, are adjusting their curriculum to label the followers of the cult as nothing more than lecherous perverts.

Now the Cult of Hiathas has one priest left. And he knows he will likely be the last to carry the Dawnbringer's Torch...

Relic: The Dawnbringer's Torch
The Dawnbringer's Torch was said to be a sign of divine favor from his domain. The heart of the Torch fell from the sky during the feast of Midsummer near a shrine to the God outside the city of Veralia in the south. For a time it was enshrined as an eternally burning stone, one that held miraculous properties. Day and night, in wind and snow, the fallen stone would retain heat and glow with an otherworldly power. The people

When the time came to seal the Demon away, the Hierarch of the Dawnfather willingly gave up the sacred stone to the greatest smiths in the Republic. Legends say they cut down the entire Forest of Braniel to feed the flames needed to make the stone maleable, forging it as the centerpiece of the Torch. The name of the stave's wielder has long since been lost to time, as has the knowledge of the weapon's unlocked powers, but the stories do note that the stave seemed to blind demons and burn those described as "unworthy" of the Dawnfather's favor. More fanciful tales even state that the Torch would grant its wielder wings- a notion that is quickly dismissed by even the simplest child these days.

In the centuries since the binding of the Demon, the weapon has always been carried by a Cleric of Hiathas. And as the ages passed, with religions rising and falling constantly within the borders of the Empire, the passive powers of the staff are the only one that is always noted by its bearers.

Blessings
Where the staff goes, the people begin to enjoy kinder weather- clear skies and cool breezes. Hope comes easily to them. The future seems brighter as if the gods themselves are smiling on them. Travelling Companions with the Torch's wielders have noted that they have been inspired to actions that they normally would not feel capable of doing. Legends say that the touch of the wrought steel from the Dawnbringer's Torch is painful to the touch when pressed against the flesh of demons, and that those who enjoyed Hiathas' favor would be granted flight by him. This last power was last "observed" more than six-hundred years ago and has not been noted since.

Curse
The staff brings the sense that those around it are God-touched. And joy for blessings one day quickly turn to fanaticism and factionalism the next. If the staff stays in one location longer than several days, neighbors will take any sign of impropriety as offense against their own patron gods. Those who hold no gods in their hearts will simply assume the worst of their own neighbors. If the staff does not move on, in short order a lovely village will become desolate from religious warfare.

In short, this

Becomes this

@Aleranicus

So far I like it. Only don't forget to explain how your character came to the pirates. And all that jazz.

Aria's Seas

@Bishop

First I'd like to address the fact that I have a concern with your reading comprehension. I'll give you the benefit of the doubt and say you did read everything, but you didn't comprehend anything. That's twice now I have had to pull up two little clips from Neo that you somehow missed. Or didn't understand. I expect better comprehension and reading in the IC.

Second off, and I am not saying this lightly. But I think you are better off starting with a new character. Because this character is unacceptable in every aspect of the word. It has nothing to do with the RP. It's poorly written. And we're not talking grammar. We're talking poorly written.

Before he was a pirate he worked as a payed killer, an assassin. From the age of 13 he had already killed 3 people. As the years passed by the numbers only stacked, going up to the hundreds. His signature killing method was to take out both eyes of his victims. Cutting their finger, in their blood he wrote on the nearby walls quotes like
"The Darkness is all consuming"
and
"If thou gaze into darkness,
fear, terror, horror is all that await thee."
among others.

Tell me how a 13 year old even manages that. Full grown adults weight more than a thirteen year old. You're trying to tell me he can overpower an adult and manage to kill them. He sounds also less like an assassin and more like a serial killer fine. But how does a serial killer become a pirate? Please tell me. Beyond the fact that it's just written like a middle schooler's English class assignment. And if you think I'm being cruel;

Reputation:

"Have you heard the news of the killer that takes eyes?" two woman sat across from each other, folding laundry over the laundry line they shared. Their shabby dresses desperately betrayed both the young woman's natural beauty. One had a baby slung across her chest in a blanket wrapped around her shoulder.

"Please don't talk such rot in company of children," the other woman gasped in horror that her friend would chose such a subject to talk about.

"Don't you feel unsafe walking the streets?" her friend continues. Of course she did. Of course she was afraid. It was all over the papers and the town crier continued hollering about the horrific details. It could just about unnerve anyone.

-end-

I really suggest you look this over before you think anyone would accept that quality of writing level. Because I won't and I know Neo won't.

He has a dark side and a light side in him. He is terrifying the more edgy he feels as an aura of darkness is released around him. The opposite happens when he loses his edge. His personality weakens, he becomes less sure and all that dark theme suddenly gets tilted over and shattered. One way to do this is to throw a counter whenever he says one of his signature cool dark themed quotes. Another way is for others to take him lightly or just brush them off as stupid moods. If he can't keep his persona intact then his powers severely weaken up to the point of disappearing, he becomes self conscious and unsure, feeling insecure. You may find him cowering in a corner of the ship if you enter his quarters after a heavy hit to his dark themed persona...

But otherwise he is ruthless, sadistic, masochistic, narcissistic...and other bunch of random shit which even he can't make heads or tails of. It all kinda gets mixed in there with one sometimes overlapping the other and taking turns going on top of each other. He is like a safe with a rotational device lock and every time you reach a *click* something changes about him.

There is no nuisance in his personality at all. He's evil. Okay, what makes people want to work with him? Why is he on a ship full of people? These personality traits don't make him workable. He's just a lunatic.

Relic: Inner Demons
The relic was inside a corpse, it was merged with the corpse. Touching it, transferred the power over to him. It brings out the power of someone's soul out in the open. For his case he got the powers of "The Shadow" when he was moderately edgy and it brought out the powers of "The Darkness" when he was full on sharp Edge Lord.

I have no words on how stupid this sounds. I know that's very cutting. Very harsh and extremely blunt. But honestly I don't like it at all. I think it sounds like it lacks any originally. I think it lacks anything creative. I think it lacks any good writing to make it sensible.

He's Jekly and Hyde without the potion. Essentially. And I am pretty sure Jekly and Hyde were not called Edge Lord.

I am not even going to waste my time with the History. Not only is it badly written. It's a bad premise on top of bad writing. On top of how does any of this correlate with this RP?

EVERYONE

Just because they are pirates doesn't mean that they have to be blood thirsty murders. Robin Hood is a pirate, but he steals from the rich to give to the poor. Actually if you take into account things from real life, the real life pirates that took over that ship, were simply low income poor workers who took to crime because they had no other option in their life. Not every pirate is some scumbag who drinks babies blood and rips out intestines.

Poverty breeds crime. Just a thought.

Aria's Seas

@Bishop

Over time however, mankind stopped believing in magic, weakening it significantly, causing this lock to deterierate, though not enough to free the demon.

@Neo Is Delight