@Genkai Alright thanks a bunch :)
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@Genkai My CS is needing feed back/approval. The CoGMs have kindly coached me on a couple edits, but your input is important as well. Please fill me in on any changes you would like done.
also Anon, just a small note- As a Corrector finishing his training your character is given an upgrade, right now I'm seeing 2 upgrades: the heat power, and boomerang throw ability. Not to mention that he also has kickboxing. turn it down a bit?Alright I'll cross off the boomerang ability for a possible future add on. Thanks for letting me know. I've also edited his weapon description and added a disadvantage. As for his breakdowns, I elaborated a bit on it. Hopefully I've addressed the concerns. If there's anything else that needs tweaking just tell me and I'll gladly edit :)
@AliceInRedHeels Ok, I'll get those points fixed up ASAP!
So more disadvantages for the weapon and expansion on his emotional breakdowns?
@AliceInRedHeels Does my CS need anymore touch ups or is it fine? I guess Genkai is getting swamped with school work -.-'
@TalijaKey Haha, that sounds great XD
@Hella Cute Actually, that sounds perfect. I checked his back story and her age fits just fine. So 9 she is! Want to babysit Yoi too?
@Hella Cute Well, nothing is set in stone so I could change that easily if you'd like. Kiku's siblings are 8 am I correct? So how does 9 years old sound. I was just thinking that keeping her independent would be easier for Takeshi, but managing a little sister at that age doesn't seem too bad.
Plus, this would be the perfect excuse to have our characters interact more often if their younger siblings are close friends.
@Hella Cute I'm glad that the adjectives make more sense now, I appreciate the feedback.
Yeah , I took the family factor into consideration. I sorta hinted at complications when he didn't dig into his father's death just in case it endangers his little sister. Adding that part about his dad stemmed from an idea I could use in the future for this story depending on how things go. And about his income, I'm sure he isn't the type to spend lavishly to the point that she'd notice something was up.
His sister is 16 so she doesn't need to be babied. I should probably clarify that in the CS. Thanks!
Typed up a background for Takeshi so his CS is basically complete.
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