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Men vs. Women Race to 1000

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UGH IT WASN'T 5 EVEN MINUTES

Ban the Person above you

Banned because I don't understand the top half of your signature.

Although Søren is bae. Yes, we're on a first name basis with him.

Do you know what 'reconnaissance' means?

Random input:

I knew what recon meant. I had no idea it stood for reconnaissance. Until I played Kingdom Hearts 358/2 Days, and I think Vexen mentioned the word. I looked it up and was like ohhhhhhhhhhhhHHhhhHH

Damn English for being the uncomfortable bastard child of French, Latin, random peasant Germanic shit, and apparently "15% other languages" according to the internet, which I assume is the unknown baby daddy.

Men vs. Women Race to 1000

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I need to get my post-per-day count up anyway... lol

RPGC#14: Reality! Voting and Discussion

@The Grey Dust Thanks for the review! I wrote Latum Alterum.

You and Dark Wind had similar issues with my story, the general lack of deeper meaning or a connection to the main character that could create such a meaning. In truth, I felt the same. For some reason, it just didn't occur to me to narrate the story from Theo's emotions—something which I almost always do. It felt more like a true "3rd person" story, with the narrator revealing hardly anything through description about the main character's emotions other than what happens concretely. Unfortunately, I submitted the entry knowing this all too well which is a sin on my part.

The story was trying to pump water out of an already-dry well for me. My most recent writer's block had been pretty bad honestly, but I think without the stress from school, forcing myself to write the story (despite the flaws), and reading books more is helping to pull me out.

Thanks again for taking the time to review! Hopefully you'll see some improvement from me in the future.

RPGC#14: Reality! Voting and Discussion

My @vote goes to The Unknown Heroes. I just love it too much and I like how it fits the theme.

Windy, I love how your tagline went from artsy "Sky Traveler" to "Summon the bitches"

RPGC#14: Reality! Voting and Discussion

YAY REVIEWS *flails*

Latum Alterum

YOU STINK, LOSER.

Alternate Dimension

I normally suck at commenting on poetry, but I'll try here. You know what the most unsettling part about this poem is, for me? It starts with "Have you ever..." It makes a connection to like you would understand, and then slowly, horrifyingly, everything falls apart and you are delved into madness and screams. Instead of just watching the horror from a distance, the poem reaches forward, grabs you, and delves the reading into it too.

The Unknown Heroes

You know, I've come to love reading your stories. They're all very original, often with lore, and lovingly crafted and, as Dark Wind said, cute. This story was no different. As for fitting in with the theme of the contest, this story definitely fits. The idea of going back in time to stop a calamity from happening and has interesting implications. Some stories, as you may have heard of before, often have the time travelers "disappear" as some paradox-correcting rule. But keeping the heroes alive was even more interesting. Only Mikhal and Trevor know the true ...reality? It happened,
though at the same time, for everyone else, never happened at all. And of course, no one would believe them. Still a very interesting and delightful story to read.

Shattered Realities

I am an idiot. I thought I had read your entry, and then I saw Dark Wind's review, and I was like... Morpheus project? Horror? What? And then I realized I hadn't seen the final hider. Whoops. So I re-read the entire thing.

Definitely... chilling. Weird, but in a good way. An original idea, and just... all around... unorthodox? It's written in a form that I've never encountered before, to start. The repetitions and progression are powerful. Hmm. Well done. There are a few typos and the writing was a little hard to follow at times (perhaps for my lack of scientific knowledge), but the overarching truths and themes remain. This reminded me, at least at first, of the Pendragon series, book four I think with the virtual reality simulator Lifelight. I read it a long time ago and I think there was a nightmarish element in the book, but you took a whole different sick approach. Bravo.

The Six Truths

Well, I don't know about you, but Supernatural Western is not a genre I've ever seen before. You definitely wrote an interesting story within an already interesting genre. To me though, the only "Western" parts about it were Adrian's boots and spurs, some dialect, and the American Southwest paradoxical desert-next-to-snowy-mountains terrain you described, so I honestly think this could have been set in any small town. But okay, that was a huge nitpick and just a thought of mine. The story itself is spun nicely and well-organized and of course, with latent themes woven within. As for the "reality" bit, for me, Adrian's true nature is what I think is called into question. Destiny wasn't as big as a factor for me. I don't know why, I mean, you know me. Why bother commenting or arguing on something which we cannot prove or disprove? Alas, I really liked your story. You're certainly getting good at this whole storytelling thing.

In-Between-Box

My favorite part about this was the dialect, and the fact that the narration was written in that dialect as well. It gave everything a singsongy Scottish charm. While unfinished,
I see some interesting potential with the story, especially with interlocking realities and intersecting timelines. If this is a book/novel you're working on aside, I say keep going! So far it seems quite intriguing.

No vote yet. I must ponder. And brood. And also eat dinner.

Also, I don't know why, but my computer keeps putting random line breaks in my writing. Sorry about that. Smh.

RPGC#14: Reality! Voting and Discussion

Whoop! Looking forward to finish reading.

And, uhm, y'all can possibly expect another round of Blitz's Unhelpful Reviews™.

RPGC#14 - Reality

Aghhhhhhhhhh. I'm so impatient.

*flies to nearest black hole so time here will move faster*

A New Contest?

Oh, awesome! That's good to hear. And less work for me, hehe.