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@Exie, like the vampire character you've got there!

One small request from me (and again,@HeySeuss can override me on this) but I think "A small arsenal" is too broad a statement. "A small arsenal of what" is my natural follow up question. Firearms, cool. Swords and knives, again cool. Magical items, now we're in murky waters and need an itemized statement lol.

Perhaps a clarification there is necessary.

Also, the "Yes, and" which ties you in to the larger group.

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Another issue I'm getting, @ArkmageddonCat, is a bit of dissonance in your character sheet between what your character IS and what your character DOES.

Magical Reincarnate, awesome, double thumbs up. Modern Frankenstein Monster is not done enough in fiction, IMHO.

But this stuff about Rifts, phasing, teleportation, that seems to fit some kind of a magician or wizard rather than a construct (also, reads like abilities from a D&D book, and we have no dice to roll for success). This is@HeySeuss call as GM so treat this as a suggestion, but I think you should go into detail where his access to these "Rifts" and phasing powers come from, or come up with a few new powers.

The electricity powers I love, and could definitely fit into the arsenal of a construct.

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You sir(or ma'am), are awesome.

@ArkmageddonCat

Sir, if you please.

If emotionless is not your thing, go ahead and write emotion. I'm saying remove the conscience.

He looks at a homeless man and feels sad for the man. How unfortunate that the man must suffer such deprivation in this world! How truly horrid!

He's confronted with a thief as he turns the corner, the mortal holding a gun. He quickly pummels the shite out of the man, leaves him with a dozen broken bones and second degree burns from electricity, and has nary a scratch on his own hands. He continues on his way, whistling while he walks. Why should he feel bad? The thief drew first.

As for the portal, if you have trouble limiting it, I'd nix it entirely then. Could be a Deus ex Machina, and nothing ruins an RP like a Deus ex power. I just deleted Parael's phasing power since I was on the fence about it for a while too.

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I have some more villainous characters, but do they still need to fit in with this team? I'm just asking that so I know whether to edit or start over.

@ArkmageddonCat

I personally think this character can be salvaged. If I may offer my advice?

Cut out the wormhole power or severely limit it, like, more than it is.

I like the idea of him being a soul in a constructed body. Like a Frankenstein's monster, almost! With that in mind, maybe his soul and his mind don't jive as well. He's not dumb, but almost sociopathic in that he doesn't really care how other people view his actions. So when Arachne says "Yo, you shouldn't have murdered all five of the Magician's guards," he might shrug and say "They were in the way and you said no witnesses. Now you'll have five fewer enemies. And I cleaned up the bodies."

But when someone or something hits home, he still displays emotions about it.

Finally, the Prophets add a great layer of mystery of to the character. Keep them in your back pocket for a character twist somewhere down the line!

Take it all or leave it as you like.

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All aboard the train to NOPENOPENOPE-Ville!

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Coolness!

Now please don't be offended, but I'm going to Costco to buy out all their Raid cans...

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As the origin of all spiders she can spawn any existing and even new species.

@t2wave

May I make a suggestion?

Why not a Spider Shifter instead of a full-blown Goddess and creator of all spiders? She could still give birth to broods of spiders and claim the title of "Queen" this way, but taking out the "mother of all spiders" background means she isn't more powerful than the dread mummy. Or perhaps she tells everyone she's THE Arachne when she really isn't, as a way of inflating her own power.

I think Seuss was going for a motley band of heroes feel with this RP (unless I'm mistaken and s/he is free to correct me). I handicapped Parael specifically to keep in this feeling.

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Hnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnng Spider queen????

*Hides in the corner, weeping quietly*

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Hey! I'm interested - hope new people are still welcome! Wondering how old de Lacy would have been?? It's quite relevant to the character I'm hoping to put forward. Thanks :)

@Stephanie96

That's@HeySeuss question to answer, but I imagined him as a Machiavelli type when I wrote my character, pulling strings and balancing everyone's interests against his own.

Then again, how YOUR character perceived de Lacy and how everyone else perceived de Lacy could be wildly different...

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And then there was @rtc143