White Feather

Darkness and Light

Sorry for the delay. Internet died yesterday.

Darkness and Light

@White Feather

Should I reply to your post? Or do you prefer to meet with Lance?

@Neko Sensei

Could you reply to me? Sorry, Lance!

Darkness and Light

Sorry for the ridiculously long post, I just had plenty of time to come up with this one.

@NightmareInd

My first posts are always my worst. I thought yours was pretty good, actually.

Darkness and Light

Sure,I tried spacing it by putting a gap between the lines

@Blizz

No, I mean like spaces between words. It looks kinda crushed. How about this?:

Jack the Half-Brood

"I'll tear you into ribbons"

Name: Jack (Surname? Dynasty?)

Age: 12 (Rather young, is he not?)

Appearance: (Whatever he looks like, maybe a paragraph or two if you can't find a picture)

Gender: Male

Race: Half-Brood - A human crossed with a specific kind of spider, the Shadowleg (Needs more detail. What exactly is a Half-Brood? How was it crossed with a Spider? And wouldn't he be an Arachne)

Side: Neutral

Weapons:
Katar: A strange kind of dagger used as though one is punching with it.


Abilities:
invisibility - Jack can turn himself invisible for a short period of time
night vision - Jack can see in the dark as if it were day
Extra Limbs - Jack has extra limbs that extend from his back that can be used like his normal hands

Powers(he learned these):
Dark Spawn - Jack can summon creatures of the shadow (What do you mean by this? How many? What do they look like? Etc.)
Evil gaze - Jack can hypnotize foes that look into his eyes (For how long?)

Talents:
Stealth - Jack is naturally good at sneaking around, hiding from sight and generally going undetected
Armour-breaker - Jack understands anatomy enough to know which parts of his enemies are weakest and will apply this knowledge to his fighting.

Personality: Clever, Sly, Funny, Smart, Calm, Sadistic (Any weak points to his personality? He's rather Gary Stu at the moment.)

Backstory: (This is required, unfortunately.)

Extras:
Very fast at moving.
Has not chosen a side.
Sadistic and enjoys making his foes bleed (Is this not better as a personality trait?)
(Straight? Gay? Bi? Asexual?)

So yeah, this needs to be a bit more balanced and needs a lot more detail. I don't mean to come across as rude, I just want you to have a well-thought out and planned character.

Darkness and Light

Lucifer of Phoenix

Dark Lord's Castle

Lucifer looked out of a window and sighed. Another wet night - definitely not conditions to travel.

He should be in bed. He had been planning on going to bed. He was even dressed in his pyjamas, had cleaned his teeth and washed his face, all ready just to dive under the covers and drift off. But he couldn't possibly sleep now. He was thinking about too much, or rather, about one thing in extreme detail.

"Are you okay, big guy?" A familiar voice asked. "You're acting even more moody than usual"

Lucifer mustered up a weak smile. "Not really. I've been thinking about the letter Khosh sent me."

"The one about the...

"Aye... that's the one.

There was a bit of silence for a while as Lucifer gathered his thoughts. When he was ready, he went for a walk around the castle as he spoke "Sometimes I wonder if I made the right choice, you know? Throwing my lot in with Alastor and the Seven. And then I get letters like that and I realise what I'm fighting for. I've nothing against Lionfury... but he's just so ineffective. And it doesn't seem like Alastor is much better.

"Don't let Zenith hear you talking like that. He'll think you're being insubordinate."

"That's the problem with this war. People are taking advantage of it. Costs go through the roof, criminals run rampant and here we are, in a big fancy castle, completely oblivious to the common man's plight"

"Except you." Empusa noted dryly.

"I just want the Kingdom to be better after the war ends than before. But the damage might have been too much already and I'm scared in case we can't fix it.

"But at least Alastor is trying, right, big guy?"

"Aye. And that's why I chose him over Lionfury. At the very least, he's bloody doing something. I might not agree with him, but he's our best hope."

It was as if saying it rammed it home. Alastor Daeva, the best hope for humanity. It was a strange notion - the Dark Lord seemed too aloof and lacked the empathy to govern justly. So why had he joined his cause with such vigour? No promise of gold or power could ever make him abandon his ideals. The people who aided Alastor were either cruel, selfish or in thrall to him. He was the only one, he realised, who was helping the Other Side because he genuinely thought they were a force for good. And maybe they were - maybe their idea of holding on to power was to make the common man dependent on them and thankful, rather than to cruelly oppress him. A naive hope, perhaps, but one that Lucifer held on to dearly. Lionfury represented things staying the same. Change of any kind was worth a shot.

Before long, Lucifer realised he had no idea where he was going. It was a big castle and he wasn't quite used to it yet. Tired and lost, he sat down and curled up into a ball to keep warm, praying that someone would come along and see him before it got really dark.

Darkness and Light

Hey, could you space it out a bit more? I can't really read it properly

@Blizz

Darkness and Light

Working on a post now...

Darkness and Light

What is this MF of which you speak?

永花城学園 - Nakkashiro Gakuen/Castle of the Eternal Flowers Academy [Closed]

Sorry. You've completly lost me. What is happening?

Darkness and Light

No no, I am not sored out. It is just that I am realistic about my ability ey. I won't be able to make good long posts and follow the lines of epic structured rps of this level and even if I involves and invested in this I would do poorly and falter sooner than later bringing down people with my level. :O

No worries really as I said I am being real with myself. :)

@Gin

Hey, if you need help, I can give a few pointers and link some tutorials for you. Iwiyuld quite like to see as many people in this as I can and I think you're gut in particular has some potential.