First off you nailed paraphrasing that,second I'll explain things more
Surname/dynasty:I am not to familiar with what either of those are
He can turn invisible as long as we wants
Those aren't katars,they are claws,If the weapon in the picture is a katar,oops
Shadowlegs are pitch black spiders who make literally no noise,their steps are mute
It was crossed by unknown means,even he dosent know
He isn't sadistic,he just seems that way I guess,I don't know what I'm trying to say
As for sides,at the start he will be neutral I may change this,to which side,I have no clue
Evil gaze isn't hypnotic,it is used to paralyze targets,and then make them fall into a deep sleep
Dark spawn look like solid dark purple figures with no physical details,they can be of any shape or size but all have claws that could cut steel
Weak points in his personality?i am not quite sure what you mean by this
Anything else you're not to sure of,lemme know and also the way you formatted his CS looks cool, you get a cookie :3
I meant to respond to this earlier, but my internet died.
Your surname is your last name - for example, with my character Lucifer of Phoenix, the term "of Phoenix" would be his surname.
Dynasty means something similar but never changes. For example Lilith of Phoenix has the Surname and Dynasty "of Phoenix". If she gets married to Quay Lionfury, she becomes Lilith Lionfury. Her Surname becomes "Lionfury", but her dynasty is still "of Phoenix"
Turning invisible indefinitely is a little Overpowered. There needs to be some kind of restriction or energy that he has to draw from, or else it just isn't fair.
My bad. I saw the image and assumed they were weapons.
Okay. You've got the creature, now make sure it's a part of your CS. Where are they found? How big are they? Are they dangerous? Basically, describe it as though we knew nothing about it.
If he doesn't know, that also needs to be put into the CS. That could actually be developed into a really good plot point if done well, so top marks to you.
Does he take pleasure in hurting other people? Or is he driven by some bloodlust? Details, man, details!
If he starts neutral, I suggest hooking up with our resident Bandit Prince Shep early on in the game.
Paralyzation and tranquilization is essentially hypnosis.
Eep! These dark spawn chaps also sound rather over-powered - I suggest limiting them to either a very small number i.e. one, or weakening them so they aren't as much of a problem. You'll also need some other kind of "mana" to keep these creatures summoned.
By weak points, I mean things that aren't all good. You have him as Clever, Sly, Funny, Smart and Calm - none of these are negative. To go back to my Lucifer, I split his personality traits into three:
His "positive" traits - Kind, Loyal, Just and Resolute. These are traits that can never be seen as being bad and are always helpful
His "neutral" traits - Honest, Cynical, Merciful, Chaste and Proud. These are traits that can be seen as both good and bad. For example, Chaste means he can't be seduced by an enemy spy - but he will do anything to avoid an intimate situation.
And his "negative" traits - Cowardly, Submissive and Inhibited. These traits are very rarely good and only serve to make the character weaker. Running away from a fight and being easily dominated are very rarely good things.
