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ugh...just realized that this was booted up to advance and such...that and to write such a long passage such as everyone else is quite difficult for me plus time consuming. Sorry going to have to pull out, wish you guys luck in developing the story!


You don't have to write a long post. As I said before the minimum is one paragraph.
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then must be my writer's block of sorts...because I got really upset with what i was about to post since everyone else had such huge paragraphs and ended up deleting it
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then must be my writer's block of sorts...because I got really upset with what i was about to post since everyone else had such huge paragraphs and ended up deleting it

Haven't been liking my character either, so I'll have to keep trying on making a concept. I ain't gonna puss out as I made promises to J to not be a moron.
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Git gud, @Gowi.
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then must be my writer's block of sorts...because I got really upset with what i was about to post since everyone else had such huge paragraphs and ended up deleting it


Also, keep in mind that those were intro posts where people try to give you an idea of what their character is like. The rest of the posts are probably going to be much shorter.
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Updated the cast list and gave evryone a cute title.
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@dragonmancer I would accept him, but I think his moveset needs a lot of work. You kind of gave his kit too much, with little flow. My problem is the same as with another character; he kind of seems more like a boss character than a regular character.

I mean, he has moves from a rushdown character, several different ranged attacks, and a few defensive moves without a real focus. What I want from the characters is that they focus/excel in a single area, and bad in another. From what I can gather, he seems more like a slow, tanky, character with hard hitting moves. Perhaps you can change his. I don't have a problem with a character with a ranged attack or defensive move, but you went a bit overboard.

In addition, I think his supers need reworking. Tactical Swipe is okay, but Raging Dragon is a bit OP, and Unmasking the seal kind of feels like an instant win button (or the second form of a boss character, same issues I had with a previous character). I know Unmasking the seal fits with his character and all, so I suggest toning down his size, limiting how long he can use it, and if you want to be fun, you can make it a fast form to contrast with the mighty glacier I suggested earlier.

Again, your character isn't rejected, just need some reworking. Just look at the accepted characters thus far.
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@Mr Allen J thanks,ill let you know when I finish reworking him.
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@Mr Allen J thanks,ill let you know when I finish reworking him.


I'm glad you took it well. You wouldn't believe how many people I've seen just up and ragequit when you tell them their sheet needs work.
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Hey well Its your rp so I'm not going to argue what would be balanced or not, I'm happy to fix/nerf what I have to offer to fit it into the story. Though I'm not gonna lie and say I wasn't planning on playing a boss-character esq situation if thats not cool with you then who am I to force it?
Alright so here's the edited version. I cut out half of the basic moves including all of the ranged ones except for the leaping-based attack. Though if that still isn't acceptable I can cut that out too or replace it with a different lightning based ability.
As for the supers, I nerfed the transformation size (As you can see in the appearance section, I also changed the overall appearance as well.) and gave the transformation a 5 minute limit with a long cool down.
I also nerfed the raging dragon to a single dragon apparition and a single attack. Though if it still doesn't fit the bill I can cut that super move altogether.


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@dragonmancer Only thing I want cut is the Ancient Eye, and he's accepted.
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Alrightie, anything else?
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@Mr Allen J

Alrightie, anything else?


Just fix the [ hr] tags in his sheet, you need to remove the space for them to work.
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@dragonmancer Oh, and maybe tone down his guards a bit so that they only lessen damage.
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@dragonmancer tell me if you need any help starting off.
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Aye I'll probably get a post up later tonight.
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Here is the last character I'll be making (save for the villains).



I just needed to use this idea!
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Hey! Are you guys still accepting?
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Hey! Are you guys still accepting?


Yes.
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