Grevious actually wasn't force sensitive, I believe. He was just so heavily modified, so angry and so skilled he could compete with Jedi at their own game.

Grevious actually wasn't force sensitive, I believe. He was just so heavily modified, so angry and so skilled he could compete with Jedi at their own game.

Yeah, I think I remember reading something on a forum that claimed he was using enhanced droid reflexes and calculating abilities to substitute for the Force awareness that keeps Jedi from cutting their own limbs off with a weightless weapon, as well as fight on equal footing with multiple Jedi at once because his computing ability was so advanced. And of course the whole four limbs thing.

Everything seems to have stayed intact. Yay! Not at home yet but about to head that way. I'll check up on everything when I get there.

I'm back as well! Hope everyone had a good weekend. Should we wait a bit for others to post?

Whoo, ok. All caught up now. So first, @Midori The CS's are fine with the exception of one tiny detail: It is not mentioned of any kind of difficulty persuading the council to allow Taiko to become a Jedi, despite the fact of her not being drafted into the Order until she's 15 (unless I missed something?), when the Council typically wouldn't allow older people to join except in special cases (such as being the "Chosen One", or being in the midst of war and needing more Jedi. I'm not against her joining. Just have to find something that makes her extremely unique (keep in mind, unique, not a Mary Sue trait) for her to be allowed in. Perhaps give her a Battle Meditation-esque ability or great healing abilities or precognition or something of the sort? While perhaps she can't entirely control it yet? I know you said she was relatively skilled with a lightsaber, but that could be attributed to "street smarts" and knowing how to gauge her opponents' weaknesses.

@Overlord24 Most of what I could say has pretty much been said, but you've got a lot of fixing to do. You have an extreme-level Mary Sue (or "Gary Stu", if you'd rather) here. A prodigy of a Jedi (literally good at EVERYTHING) who was knighted by 15 despite being vulnerable to the Dark Side is not likely to happen. In fact, Jedi typically aren't Knighted until around 20 at earliest. Obi-Wan was a notably powerful member of the order, even praised for his swordsmanship by Mace Windu (the quote goes something along the lines of "But who is the stronger: The inventor of a lethal form [referring to himself], or the master of a classic one [referring to Obi-Wan]?" said immediately after Obi-Wan had attempted to praise Windu's skills), but even he wasn't knighted until 19 or 20, or perhaps later. I don't entirely remember the details.

You also, as was said, have created a very minimal CS. We have no idea what the accident was that gave him his cybernetics, how he was raised as a Jedi, why he would favor the Makashi form (he sounds more like his personality might favor a form such as Shien/Djem So), and then there's this:

after that his choices were, to stop Jedi training, or to get robotic replacements

He's without one of his arms, and he has one missing eye. Kreia's eyes had atrophied to total blindness, and by the end of KotOR II, she had no hands. Did that stop her from fighting or continuing to function as a Sith? Heck, no. Granted she was a Sith Lord, but the fact remains, this is a very unlikely obstacle to one continuing his/her Jedi training. In fact, it's all the reason to continue if you don't get prosthetic replacements.

Like Midori's Padawan, it sounds like he was drafted into the Order at an older-than-normal age, and seems more likely to have been scouted out by the Sith than the Jedi. So the question is, "Why was he allowed in the Order?" We have nothing that is a good enough reason. He has dark tendencies already, and he's too old. Not about to be allowed in, especially if Atris had anything to say about it.

Lastly, we need some more on the description if you're going to not use an image. In short, we don't do "one-liners" in Casual, or at least not in any RP I've been in here, and especially not in portions of a CS. Those are for Free RPs, so let's clean this one up.

@Zeroth Sorry if my IC post for Alek was a little awkward in what he said. I can fix up some of that if you'd rather. I literally threw that together in the spur of the moment because that was about all I had in time, and realized later it wasn't really in-character for him. My brother's better at impersonating him and he literally told me if your character still wasn't convinced to use a line like, "If there is to be no emotion, but peace, then is allowing the Mandalorians to spread such hatred throughout the galaxy--is this going to bring the Jedi peace?" Or something to that effect. But I guess I didn't have to lol

@Rethel34
It seemed fine to me. Like I've said before I only recently bought the Kotor games and have only just gotten to Kashyyk for the first time in the first one, so my experience with Malak/Alek is based solely on his Sith persona. So far I would say you've presented what they're meant to be pretty well--people who wanted to defeat what was obviously seen as an "evil" opponent, but who were being held back for reasons they didn't know or didn't understand.

Seems to be a running theme in the series to me that the Jedi Council always relies on secrecy, when just opening up and telling people "Look, the reason we don't wanna go to war is because we can sense this big huge Dark Side thing that's just waiting for us to make a move and trap us" would work a lot better than telling a headstrong youth he can't go "just because we say so."

I know he was always intended to be authoritative (if not downright intimidating) due to his height, as well as being an eloquent, persuasive speaker. Of course, he began to lose the prettier aspects of his speech the more he turned to the dark side, using more violence to persuade others. However, in KotOR 2, there's a scene where you get a peek at how he was before his fall. Much more calm, cool, and collected. Trying to embody what he is supposed to be is difficult.

@TheBigJon
I'm gonna wait a bit before I post, if that's alright, so that other people can get an intro or something in too. Otherwise it might turn into just a back and forth between us.

I'm talking to @Midori about our Padawans. As soon as that's sorted out and @Midori's characters are accapted, I'll post in the IC. Sorry for the delay, I just want to have the Padawan and knight together before posting.

@Roosan her chars are really close. Actually @Midori your Knight is in. It's just that the Padawan needs reasons for joining the order later in her life.

@Zeroth Yeah, that's a good call

Just saw that @ZeusTheMoose hasn't been online the past couple of days. Anyone know him well enough outside this RP to know what he might be up to?

Also, @Ozerath are you still working on a CS? Not trying to prod, just curious.

Sorry guys I think I'm gonna have to drop out of the RP, my real lfie is getting a bit too hectic. It sucks but I just thought I'd give a heads up.

Go give those Mandalorians hell.

@ZeusTheMoose We'll always have a place open for you if you can ever get back in the swing of things. :)

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@ZeusTheMoose
That sucks, hope things become less busy for you soon.

So I've made some (hopefully) final edits to Hirani and Taiko to facilitate Roosan and me swapping Padawans.

And I just realised I forgot to post my Padawan character in the OOC. Here he is. He would be @Midori's Knight character's Padawan if approved.

@Midori & @Roosan All accepted :) Go ahead and move them to the CS Tab and post IC when you're ready.

@Roosan Mind doing a collab with me sometime to continue that conversation between Alek and Stadak? I'm free most of the rest of this week in some form, I do believe. Just name a time.

@Rethel34
Sounds good! I could do it at some point tomorrow, preferably in the evening. I'm in GMT+2 though, so I'm not sure what time that is for you.