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a few questions:
If she is retired, what will make her interact with the more active PCs?

Where did she retire to? The empire? Outer parts of the Republic? One of the Core Worlds? An unaligned world? one of the worlds controlled by the hutts?

How does she feel about each of the major factions?
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I'm thinking it may be a good idea to not have her be retired...
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Questions needing to be addressed:

Why did this Trandoshan give her that many credits? 100k is a bit of a shortcut.

How did she meet her girlfriend?

Why did she become a bounty hunter at all? It's a long shot (pun intended) from being a carnival sharpshooter to becoming a professional (wo)manhunter.

Why does she consider the Republic her enemy?

If the Republic, Jedi, Sith, criminal cartels and other bounty hunters are 'out' as potential employers then who does she work for? How do you see this character interact with the rest of the player base?

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1. To prove that being a bounty hunter was profitable and to encourage the 'next generation'.
2. Good question, we still haven't exactly figured that out yet... @februari?
3. Her father was a bounty hunter and now another bounty hunter is giving her his 'blessing'. Seems like destiny!
4. She gets all her contracts from The Empire.
5. With caution and disdain.

Hope this is ok! <3 xx
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I actually addressed #2 in the CS for Ryndi:

"After an exotic performance on Zeltros, Ryndi was approached by Nahtisse Ratinde, a bounty hunter who'd tracked a fugitive to the planet. The pair struck up a conversation and quickly became lovers, ultimately turning a casual evening into a two-week affair and head start for Nahtisse's quarry. Feeling obligated to assist after having detained the bounty hunter for so long, Ryndi used her contacts to locate the fugitive, and thus began a sort of partnership and on-and-off relationship between her and Nahtisse. The couple have since entered a martial union and Ryndi has relocated to Alderaan to live with Nahtisse, to whom she is very much attached. That said, in concession to the Zeltron, Nahtisse allows her to continue her career, having redefined fidelity as loyalty rather than physical exclusivity."
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There are still some details to iron out then! xx
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1. To prove that being a bounty hunter was profitable and to encourage the 'next generation'.
2. Good question, we still haven't exactly figured that out yet... @februari?
3. Her father was a bounty hunter and now another bounty hunter is giving her his 'blessing'. Seems like destiny!
4. She gets all her contracts from The Empire.
5. With caution and disdain.

Hope this is ok! <3 xx


I did not mean for you to address these questions like this. I want you to think about these and add the information to your sheet.

I actually addressed #2 in the CS for Ryndi:

"After an exotic performance on Zeltros, Ryndi was approached by Nahtisse Ratinde, a bounty hunter who'd tracked a fugitive to the planet. The pair struck up a conversation and quickly became lovers, ultimately turning a casual evening into a two-week affair and head start for Nahtisse's quarry. Feeling obligated to assist after having detained the bounty hunter for so long, Ryndi used her contacts to locate the fugitive, and thus began a sort of partnership and on-and-off relationship between her and Nahtisse. The couple have since entered a martial union and Ryndi has relocated to Alderaan to live with Nahtisse, to whom she is very much attached. That said, in concession to the Zeltron, Nahtisse allows her to continue her career, having redefined fidelity as loyalty rather than physical exclusivity."


I know you did, but that is your sheet, not hers.
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Right now @BabyBump96, the story leading up to her becoming a bounty hunter feels shallow and somewhat far-fetched. But it is more that it lacks detail and justifications than being completely illogical.

We would suggest you delve more into at least some of the following possibilities:
  • Expand the Trandoshan Bounty hunter into something more than a one-liner plot device for her getting gear and money.
    • Make it into multiple competitions in various fields, with fewer participants each time, eventually culminating into apprenticeship
    • Teach her about the importance of the Scorekeeper (Trandoshan deity of sorts)
    • figure out why a trandoshan would take on a softskin like her.
  • Make her have to work for things, give her issues and real challenges.
  • Give her failures in her life.
  • build up her relationship with family, both good and bad parts.
  • explore her culture more
  • find a reason for her becoming a bounty hunter. What led her offworld?
  • Are there any places she avoids? any places she enjoys?
  • Does she take all sorts of bounties, or just some?
  • What is her opinion on bounties that ask for the target alive?
  • What is her opinion on bounties that ask for the target dead?
  • What sort of gear does she prefer?
  • Any prominent bounties on her records?
  • Why doesn't she work for criminals/Jedi/Sith? any particular events that led to this?
  • How many of her hunts have been successes, failures and mixed successes?
  • How did her first kill feel?


We could add more, but these should give you a good pointer as to many of the things your sheet feels like it lacks. When you cover points from the above list, do so by altering the story elements and sections, not just as if answering a questionnaire.
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I'll need some time! <3 xx
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@BabyBump96
What is the status of your edits?
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