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It's funny how you kept all my random ramblings (like "boo" and "yada yada") in the worlds description XD
"Endel's region" is actually called Elensa. (Endel is the city inside it... I said Endel's region before because at that point the regions didn't have names.)

The Great Roral Plateau, in Rauren, and the Charis Mountains, in Charen, are split between two regions for no good reason

Since both the mountains and the plateau are in both regions, it's more like:
The Great Roral Plateau and the Charis Mountains are split between two regions, Rauren and Charen, for no good reason.

The council is the main ruling body for Alberyn. They are in charge of regions of Ceris, Palyis (though this region has it's own council, but still under Ceris' Council), and Elensa (Though this region never listens.)
I thought the Council in Ceris was in charge of all of Alberyn... meaning the whole big landmass except for Valkan and Herelen. All the other rulers in place ( = pseudo-kings, sages, princes, other councils) were just governing their lands, but still under the authority of the Council. Like Washington DC and the 50 states, but with the states being even more independent and really diverse. Also, you forgot about Leija (the tiny region where Ceris is is called Ceris, but the larger region around it is Leija, and it has a multi-racial council).

They are a legend that not many humans and dwarves believe in... Just an old wives' tale to explain weird disappearances at sea.
Uhh... this would be the sea people, not the dragons.

At first I was confused why you put Herelen and Valkan inside Alberyn, and Linia inside Lunae... Do the land masses need names? I figured they didn't really, since the area already has a name (Taeren). I kind of thought of "Taeren" like "Africa", where you have the island of Madagascar that's pretty much part of Africa even though it's not on the continent. But maybe they do need different names. I dunno.

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Orynae said It's funny how you kept all my random ramblings (like "boo" and "yada yada") in the worlds description XD

Yeah, a lot of this was copy and paste. But I kept your comments because I thought they were fun. :) It was actually harder to do than it looked. (Or maybe I just sucked) And I got annoyed at it. Thanks for pointing out some of my errors. Hopefully I've corrected them all.
Orynae said At first I was confused why you put Herelen and Valkan inside Alberyn, and Linia inside Lunae... Do the land masses need names? I figured they didn't really, since the area already has a name (Taeren). I kind of thought of "Taeren" like "Africa", where you have the island of Madagascar that's pretty much part of Africa even though it's not on the continent. But maybe they do need different names. I dunno.

I thought they were names of the land masses, not different kingdoms. I have corrected my erroneous assumption.

I like Naine's staff :)
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Updated my barbarian -- don't have time to finish the others now =/
EDIT: finished the others :3
I also realized that a strait of water is not a "straight". So the channel between the two landmasses is actually the Niriod Strait. Should I fix it on the map?

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That day they had gotten two fresh newbies and two reassigned from other Bands.

Aren't there three newbies? Caden, Mordechai, and Kai. (although Kai's not young and green.) And Nainë's the only one who was reassigned.

In this case those said recruits were mainly human. [...] a band of humans and half-humans

My half-elf is passing himself off as a human though, so as far as everyone's concerned the recruits are all human and there's only one half-human in the band.

Now they were a days ride from Baron Laflur's castle, near the southern edge of Endel.

Would that be the southern edge of Elensa, then? Since there was a mix-up between Elensa (the region) and Endel (the city).

Now they were a days ride from Baron Laflur's castle, near the southern edge of Endel.

So they're on horseback?

Sorry for all the comments, and I haven't even posted... I really don't know where to start, actually. Since your post was really general, I'm not really sure what I should do... I mean, if I wanted to do something general too, I could do a rough sketch of how my guys relate to the other band members, but other than that I'd be repeating stuff you said about how it's weird there's so many humans and how racist the Elensa population is. But I have no idea where to start with a more specific close-up scene of the characters... Unless I fast forward all the way to the arrival at the castle or something.
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Orynae said Aren't there three newbies? Caden, Mordechai, and Kai. (although Kai's not young and green.) And Nainë's the only one who was reassigned.

Mordechai's new to the group but not to the White Shields.
Orynae said My half-elf is passing himself off as a human though, so as far as everyone's concerned the recruits are all human and there's only one half-human in the band.

This is Leon. He's very exact.
Orynae said Would that be the southern edge of Elensa, then? Since there was a mix-up between Elensa (the region) and Endel (the city).

Yes. Forgot about this. I can fix it in my post.
Orynae said So they're on horseback?

I assumed so. They could be walking too.
Orynae said Sorry for all the comments, and I haven't even posted... I really don't know where to start, actually. Since your post was really general, I'm not really sure what I should do... I mean, if I wanted to do something general too, I could do a rough sketch of how my guys relate to the other band members, but other than that I'd be repeating stuff you said about how it's weird there's so many humans and how racist the Elensa population is. But I have no idea where to start with a more specific close-up scene of the characters... Unless I fast forward all the way to the arrival at the castle or something.

Haha. I did leave it kind of open .But I like open ended posts. >> You could skip to the castle, that's perfectly acceptable.
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Oops. It's pretty short. Sorry... =/
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Not a problem. I tend to be short when I first start posting myself. It takes me a while to work out all the kinks with the characters and my partner. Then I start posting longer stuff. :) So, it's all good.
Orynae said I also realized that a strait of water is not a "straight". So the channel between the two landmasses is actually the Niriod Strait. Should I fix it on the map?
Almost didn't see these. Umm, I don't think it matters too much. If you wanted to, you could.
Orynae said How long do Elves live? When do they become adults? For that matter, how long do dwarves live, and nature spirits?
Elves, let say they live the standard "forever" or a "long time" So maybe 500-1000? Meh.
Dwarves, maybe 200 max?
Nature spirits, depends. If it's a naiad, as long as their tree. Water spirits probably live for a really long time, like elf long.

And I'm working on the logistics of my reply. I should have it up tomorrow.

EDIT: And it's Mordechai not Caden who's not new to the White Shield. Caden is brand spanking new. Mordechai's been around for a while, like a year or two, but not long enough to be a veteran. I fixed this everywhere.

PS: I'll probably run through all my character's POV just to start getting a feel from them before I pick one, or switch to having them all in the same post.
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Ehh... too lazy to fix the map.

I was trying to figure out how old Kai is, but I can't really get a feel for it. Maybe it doesn't matter. How long do you think the kingdom of Alberyn's been around? I was kinda thinking like a century or two, but in terms of Elves that wouldn't be very long at all...

By "dissuade the Baroness", did you mean a diplomacy mission, or fighting her troops or something to distract them from Laflur's castle?

In your first post you said it was Baron Devon that was going to attack, but in your second one it was Baron Heath Kathy...?
(At first I read Janus as Janos, like Janos Slynt from A Song of Ice and Fire. But anyways...)

PS: I'll probably run through all my character's POV just to start getting a feel from them before I pick one, or switch to having them all in the same post.
Sounds like a good plan. Maybe I'll do that too.
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It's fine. I condone laziness. And I don't know if Kai even needs an age. >> Just leave it as is. I don't think it really matters.
Orynae said How long do you think the kingdom of Alberyn's been around? I was kinda thinking like a century or two, but in terms of Elves that wouldn't be very long at all...
Long enough that no one alive, human or dwarf can remember the old human kingdom of Ester. The actual dwarven kingdom itself? Two centuries is fine by me.

Orynae said By "dissuade the Baroness", did you mean a diplomacy mission, or fighting her troops or something to distract them from Laflur's castle?
I'm leaving that open. At the moment Laflur just wants the Baroness out of the picture. I sure he wouldn't even care if the Shields snuck into her castle and held her hostage until things were sorted.

Orynae said In your first post you said it was Baron Devon that was going to attack, but in your second one it was Baron Heath Kathy...?(At first I read Janus as Janos, like Janos Slynt from A Song of Ice and Fire. But anyways...)
Ahhh. I knew I named a Baron, but could find it even in my short, post so I made a new last name. I'll fix that. Fixed
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Didn't have any ideas, didn't think any of my characters would say anything if they didn't have an idea, didn't know if your characters would say anything, didn't want to keep the Baron waiting too long. So, short post. Sowwy. =/
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I hope you like where I'm taking this. It'll include everyone's skills and whatnot in the plan. :)
If you don't like it... sorry :(
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