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I plan on keeping most of the original first post. I'll tell the story of how Paradise Lands came to fruition, but I want to build on what happened during the time skil. Have the Story Teller (the person telling the story in my first post) explain what has happened over the past 5 years.
I think it's a good way to tie this one in to the new one.
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thats a good idea, bridges the older one to the reboot so to speak
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Exactly! I was thinking of including that there were many big fights. One of them was the other group with the leader Cypher.
Obviously PL came out victorious, but not without some casualties. I intend to make that part very dark indeed when I do the recap in the story.

Twilight, should Ravenia and Tobias continue on their romance during the 5 years or do you plan to do something anew?
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One idea I had was that the story recap picks up after the group takes care of the large horde of dead that had attacked PL. When Ravenia gets the children to spill about the secrets that Cypher had planned for her people, she sends out a search team. Unfortunately, this was the Trojan Horse that the Russian had been speaking of and the team is captured.
The Cypher group makes it to the PL gates with the captured team, Mad Max-style.
He offers a trade, Ravenia for the group. In her martyrdom-style of thinking, she agrees to the trade.
The group is returned almost fully intact and Ravenia is then taken hostage where he strings her up and whips her bloody.

There will be some sort of catalyst that sends the two groups into a major war. One thing I had in mind is that somebody from PL runs out to Cypher to beg him to stop and he kills that person, sending Ravenia in a frenzy. She manages to break free of her restraints and drags Cypher into the shadows. This causes the two sides to break out in fighting. In fact, the continues on for nearly 3 days when Ravenia slowly reemerges from the shadows, bloodied, carrying Cypher's head in my hand. That causes the fighting to come to a standstill as Ravenia announces that she will kill any man who stands against her in a minute.

That was something that I've been thinking about.
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I tried messaging the characters who looked like they would be able to return.
I'm hoping I can get back most of the originals.
I think for the ones who we can't get back we'll write stories for how we've since lost them.
Might even make a post of the warriors we've lost in battle. Might make it kind of open ended on how we "lost" them.
Won't just out rightly say they died, but maybe they just did in fact get lost our in the Red Waste or something.
I think I will choose one of the original characters though to be the catalyst that started the aforementioned war. Some of the people haven't been on here or posted in the past year so I hope they wouldn't mind if choose one of their characters.

Can't wait to hear back from you all. Please bring all ideas and criticisms with you!!
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Those are some interesting ideas! It's alot to soak in on one reading! LOL But I like the idea of the 5 year skip and that we lost some people and the remaining ppl have gotten a little darker. But I think if Cypher is dead, there of course needs to be a new antagonist. Maybe Cypher's son wants revenge for Ravenia killing him.

Also, a part of me wants Sun to have died. Just an example that even something pure of heart like Sun can perish under unfortunate circumstances.

Who was the Russian?

And I think the person who was the catalyst, should be Shay, since if I remember correctly, Ravenia was very close to her.

I think the Harpies, are born anew, kinda like a Phoenix. They died and have been reborn as three new harpies. I personally, would replace the Gatekeeper with a different role since in the last story, The Gatekeeper didn't really get much to do. But I think it may be a cool idea if the Paradise Lands either expanded, as you said, or moved to a new location since that location was ultimately comprised by Cypher Vale. I think some Cypher Vale's group merged with PL, like Eliza and Kaiden, but most perished in the battles.

Or perhaps, The harpies can be replaced all together with a new role, like the 3 shapeshifters or maybe the 4 shapeshifters. They can do full or partial transformations. 1 can turn into animals, 1 can turn into other people, 1 can turn into the elements(fire, water, wind, earth, plants, electricity, ice, etc), and 1 that can turn into inanimate objects.

Sorry, this is very jumbled. I'm just getting really excited at the idea of reviving this.
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I'm glad that you mentioned that Angel! What if Sun was actually the catalyst that started the war. Maybe he ran out to beg Cypher to stop, but once he gets close enough Cypher snaps his neck or something.

I think moving PL would maybe be a good move, but it would be a dangerous once since that's a whole lot of people they're having to move and a whole new fortitude they would have to create. Maybe they didn't move, but a good deal of it was damaged so they had to rebuild a good part of it and in that rebuilding stage they decided to expand it our into the city a little bit more. I think an expansion would really be easiest, truthfully, just because of how many people PL houses and protects. In their day and age you just don't wanna get up and move everything.

I'm going to give a chance to let what Harpies can make it back. I don't want to write them off when it's a possiblity that they could easily return. We may be down one or two. Whether we get them all back or lose them, I'll definitely find a way to incorporate a bunch of new Blessed Ones. I wouldn't mind other Guardians that were able to manage the skies like the Harpies of Three used to do. I'm thinking about creating the High Tops. Basically it's a housing unit that only a select few can get to but they'll be like the sharp eyes of the city. They'll be able to see any oncoming threats or anything of that nature.

The Gate Keeper can choose to not want to revise his role since it was pretty limited. If does not choose to revive it I'll probably make the GK a non playable character and just use him loosely or we could create an actual opening system that would make it a little bit easier.

I also want to incorporate the Safe Grounds, this is maybe the place where new people requesting entrance into PL can go. It's gonna be much harder for people to get in after a betrayal that I'll mention later on. During that time I'll probably have Shay perish too, as a key story point. The Safe Grounds will probably be an off the ground save haven for people who aren't trusted yet. Kind of like a trial period.

As for a new threat, I think Cypher's son may be pretty cool. Maybe he made it out alive from the killings when they attacked PL. One other thing I was thinking about is maybe a group of marauders who could cause a really bad time for the people of PL. Like they've got Blessed Ones and normal humans ready to storm the gates of PL. I don't know how I want to proceed with that part.
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That all sounds good to me. Do u plan on working on an Interest Check or an OOC soon? Cause if you gather all the info and blazay blazay that u want to include in it, im pretty good at making OOCs pretty and visually appealing and engaging. But this is your baby, so all the decisions are yours to make. But feel free to ask me for my opinion on anything your unsure about. I'll definitely be here.
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No, please, help me make things look pretty!
What I think I'll do is create another board and post the main story line, just like on this one, but you can help me build the rest.
I am all about getting help to make things better!!
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"Would you like to hear a story children? About the fall of our governments, our civilizations, and finally our Earth?

Well you see, it started over hundreds of years ago when the great men who led the past nations wanted to play 'Who's got the biggest cock?' It started as bluffs, men threatening others with their nuclear warheads. Then the day came when the bluffing stopped. It is said from stories passed down that it didn't take long. It was over in a matter of hours. As soon as one missile was launched, all the others played follow the leader. Everybody wanted to create great pain on others, for they knew that their people would feel it. No man should have had that much power in their hands. Our fate was sealed that day, thanks to a handful of men on a power trip. Reactors exploded, the bombs took out many cities and great populations. A good portion of life was wiped out in almost one day. Radiation levels spiked, choking out life and hopes of new life.

Many, many years had passed after the warheads had been fired. Unfortunately, the Earth was not getting better. The Earth was sick it seemed, rotting away on the inside. Wildlife withered, water evaporated, life itself was slowly slipping away. It was during this time that the first generation of 'Blessed Ones' were born. Humans, with fascinating abilities and powers that none thought were possible. However, it was a single Blessed One that seemed to give hope to others. They called her Mother of Water; you see, her power was the ability to pull water from midair. She was known far and wide and many flocked to her, asking for her help. She always willingly helped others, never questioning.

This was the time that the Paradise Land was created. It was a great fortress built to house people and provide them with the needs of life. It also came in handy as a means of protection when the Dead began to arrive. Men, women, and children alike were beginning to arise from their graves and were on a hunt for the flesh of the living. They were slow, dumb creatures that ran on the most simple of instincts. To feed. The Blessed Ones and human warriors alike fought bravely against every wave of Dead that came their way. Always thriving, fighting to continue on living.

Now, today, our Paradise Lands have seen many hard times. We have fought both mean and the dead, alike, to keep our people alive. About five years ago, our current Mother, faced her greatest foe yet. A man named Cypher, with him he brought a group of zealots. These people were devoted to him until their dying breaths. He caused great hard times for our people, his own people had claimed the lives of some of our very own during their siege. I’ll never forget the day that he arrived at our gates. Claiming himself the new King of the Paradise Lands. Mother, with her band of fiercest warriors stood atop the walls of our fortress and faced down the threat.

That was the time that the 3 Day War happened. It is a crucial point in our history, children. During that time much of our beautiful city was destroyed. The people grew scared and hope was slowly becoming lost. At that time, we all thought that the Paradise Lands had been lost, many had blamed Mother for that. However, she proved her stuff and calmed the nerves of her children and they all began the rebuilding of our Lands.

We’ve since expanded outwards. It was almost like the Lands were reborn. We’ve closed our gates to most outsiders but we aren’t completely heartless. We created the Safe Grounds to allow people refuge who come wandering in from the Red Waste. This is where we allow them to go through a trial period to see if they may allow them into the Lands. We have also created the High Tops. These high vantage points are littered all around the Lands, creating a life above us all. This is where our sharpest eyes are set up so as they might be easily able to detect any threats that may be wandering in from the Red Wastes.

The Paradise Lands have stood for hundreds of years. They will continue to stand. Our history and out future have been carved in stone, much like the great walls that surround us and fortify our city. No matter what force may come knocking at the metal doors of our Lands, our warriors and whatever Mother we have will always face it with no fear in their eyes. Humans and Blessed Ones alike will fight to keep our Lands in Paradise. Be proud of your history children, for you are our future.”

This is a rough draft, or maybe the actual thing. I don't know yet. I feel like I'm too focused on Mother. Once I know all the other stories I may revamp it.
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I like it! But I would recommend kind of simplifying it. You can always have separate little blurps about the settings, like the High Tops, Safe Grounds, Red Waste, etc. But thats minor though. I really like it though.

But yeah, if anything, I'd say simplify it, or shorten it a bit. Cause if push comes to shove, alot of that stuff can revealed in flashbacks like we used to do.
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This is very true. Hmm. Where should I start first.
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This is very true. Hmm. Where should I start first.


I think just explain the basic story and premise of the RP. Alot of the other stuff can be put into little blurps, or shown in flashbacks later on in the RP.
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Agreed. I may just use the original and tweak it just a little bit.
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"Would you like to hear a story children? About the fall of our governments, our civilizations, and finally our Earth?

Well you see, it started over hundreds of years ago when the great men who led the past nations wanted to play 'Who's got the biggest cock?' It started as bluffs, men threatening others with their nuclear warheads. Then the day came when the bluffing stopped. It is said from stories passed down that it didn't take long. It was over in a matter of hours. As soon as one missile was launched, all the others played follow the leader. Everybody wanted to create great pain on others, for they knew that their people would feel it. No man should have had that much power in their hands. Our fate was sealed that day, thanks to a handful of men on a power trip. Reactors exploded, the bombs took out many cities and great populations. A good portion of life was wiped out in almost one day. Radiation levels spiked, choking out life and hopes of new life.

Many, many years had passed after the warheads had been fired. Unfortunately, the Earth was not getting better. The Earth was sick it seemed, rotting away on the inside. Wildlife withered, water evaporated, life itself was slowly slipping away. It was during this time that the first generation of 'Blessed Ones' were born. Humans, with fascinating abilities and powers that none thought were possible. However, it was a single Blessed One that seemed to give hope to others. They called her Mother of Water; you see, her power was the ability to pull water from midair. She was known far and wide and many flocked to her, asking for her help. She always willingly helped others, never questioning.

This was the time that the Paradise Land was created. It was a great fortress built to house people and provide them with the needs of life. It also came in handy as a means of protection when the Dead began to arrive. Men, women, and children alike were beginning to arise from their graves and were on a hunt for the flesh of the living. They were slow, dumb creatures that ran on the most simple of instincts. To feed. The Blessed Ones and human warriors alike fought bravely against every wave of Dead that came their way. Always thriving, fighting to continue on living.

Our current Mother, Ravenia, has been to hell and back for the safety of our Lands. Her and the warriors who protect us have faced death numerous times. These past five years for us have not been easy. We’ve lost loved ones and we’ve had to rebuild the walls that have protected us for hundreds of years. However, don’t let the blood that’s spilt on our grounds these past few years scare you. The Paradise Lands have stood for hundreds upon hundreds of years. They will continue to stand. Our history and our future have been carved in stone, much like the great walls that surround us and fortify our city. No matter what force may come knocking at the metal doors of our Lands, our warriors and whatever Mother we have will always face it with no fear in their eyes. Humans and Blessed Ones alike will fight to keep our Lands in Paradise. Be proud of your history children, for you are our future.”
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@Angel Eyes Okay, so what do you think of the new revamp? I simplified it a lot. A LOT. Haha!

I'm thinking I'm gonna rewrite my character and possibly post a new board.
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I Love it! Great editing! You simplified it, but still kept the essence of what the RP entails without cramming too much into it. This is solid!

Rewrite Ravenia? How? In what way?

Also, I think there should be an updated character sheet. One with maybe a little more detail. And I think the character's should only use real life images. Before we used a mixture of anime and real life images, but I think making it real life face claims grounds the roleplay in a deeper realism.

And yeah! We would definitely need a new board to revamp the RP!
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Thanks! It wasn't nearly as hard as I thought it was going to be.
I want to write a little more darkness into her actual profile sheet.

I was thinking on how to rewrite the character sheets, what do you got?

And I am actually not a fan of real-life images for some reason. haha!
I don't know why, but I like the anime feel a little bit more. But by no means does that mean that somebody HAS to post an anime picture.
They can definitely post real life if they want!
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Fair enough! LOL Guess we can always stick to what we did before, which was use both a rl life image and an anime image(At least thats what I did for Sun).

And I can try and come up with a revamped version of your old character sheet. Spice it up a bit for u if u want.
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I would really appreciate that, Angel!
I'm gonna get off of her for the night.
I have to be up early for work tomorrow.

I'll be on around 8 CST tomorrow!
ciao~
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