[OOC] Invincible - Chapter I : Origination

[GhostReaper]

Blarg blarg Honk honk! >.> Anyways...how far a head will the time skip be? Just kind of curious so I can start getting a basic Idea for what I'm going to post.

[Write]

Any ETA on the IC post Nevermind?

[Sixsmith]

@t2wave I'm not saying don't write! Learning how to write takes a ton of practice, and reading. Please don't feel like I'm saying it was awful, it wasn't. The post was just a bit hard to tell who was being the POV character when. I think the line breaks, or shoot do a collab with me, and I can show you some tricks that I've learned.

When you write a post in one POV it helps to be in an editor of some sort, be it titanpad or a Google document, even if you have to do it back and forth in PMs it can be cleaned up to be in one POV rather than switching. That way you can work out how the whole post fits together with your partner. I normally just give stage directions on what my character is doing, and then let the person who is writing the POV character edit it to be from their character's POV. It doesn't always work, sometimes it looks bad, like in our last post "eyes lit up" sounds awkward and forced, and that's because I wrote that. It isn't in McHaggis' voice so it's clunky.

Believe me working with tight POV is hard, professional writers spend an unbelievable amount of time and energy trying to get it to work right.

@Kirah

I did a lot of collabs with a good friend of mine and he'd always control his character through my character's PoV. It helped tremendously with figuring out what was happening.

It also helps to use name in place of pronouns a lot of the time. Especially when refering to someone for the first time in a paragraph. I find it easier to do so every sentence, so people know who I'm talking about and if there's enough distance within the the sentence, then I might use the name twice if it makes sense. I, however, have no idea if I'm making sense right now.

[twave]

I don't like constantly dropping a name. But I am not used to working with two characters in the same setting. I know my English teacher would have a fit reading something like that.

[Nevermind]

Sorry for my absence. Personal stuff. Working on IC.

Edit: post is up. I wanted to collab with Phoebas on it but I don't want people getting bored of the wait, so I put an unfinished version up. It's finished for everyone, really, bar Phoebas and I. I'll add in her stuff later on.

[Sixsmith]

I don't like constantly dropping a name. But I am not used to working with two characters in the same setting. I know my English teacher would have a fit reading something like that.

@t2wave

A good rule of thumb that I like to use: a pronoun should almost always refer to the subject of the sentence or refer to the most recent character named in the current sentence or sentence prior. Sometimes that requires me to drop a name multiple times throughout the paragraph, but it's usually never more than once per sentence. I use this especially when concerning more than one character. If not, it depends on how I feel.

I'm also talking about the pronoun 'it' when referring to an object. That one can be particularly tricky if you don't clarify what it is you're talking about.

[twave]

@Sixsmith
Yes I know. I'm going to stop commenting on the subject.

[Phoebas]

Oh hey! @nevermind I am on! Shall I give the IC post a read through really fast?

[Write]

Well done on the IC post, I'm liking our new 'father's' attitude. I'll be sure to throw a post up soon enough.

[GhostReaper]

And the calm analytical Alex has arrived XD Sorry folks no muder-death-kill sprees today.

[Sixsmith]

I'll try and get a post up soon! :o Been busier than I thought I'd be

[Valhalla]

I'll have a post up tonight! Sorry for the delay!

[Sixsmith]

Posted!

You think that last part of my post was filler. BUT WOE TO THE MAN OR WOMAN WHO THINKS SUCH A DECREPIT THOUGHT. D:< (ignore the misuse of decrepit in that sentence) It's actually kind of important to Erskine's character, at the moment. ;-; And it's a shameless plug for his powers.