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Oh now your bitch ass decides to come when your people tried to come for me earlier.

That's okay though. I'm a strong bitch. I can handle my own.

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It was a misunderstanding, that was all. No big deal.

I'm working on my characters, give me some space to splash the pool.
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Oh now your bitch ass decides to come when your people tried to come for me earlier.

That's okay though. I'm a strong bitch. I can handle my own.


I wasn't coming after you, Heathen. I was giving you constructive criticism because I thought that your power wasn't going to be accepted. I have nothing against you, but I think that your character needs more weaknesses, because right now they can phase through enemies and make themselves impenetrable without any real drawbacks besides a time limit and a force limit, neither of which really constitute weaknesses. Your other weaknesses aren't weaknesses of your power, as I said before, but weaknesses of being a human. All metas are harmed by attacks against their neurological systems unless their power negates this specifically. Saying that is like saying that your character isn't fireproof. That's not a weakness. That's a fact. As I mentioned, I have no authority here, but I'm a close friend of Allen's and I know what he tends to look for in a character. I didn't know about Thinker rock, and if he deems your power okay, then that's fine by me since it's his rp. That, however, doesn't mean that I'm not entitled to my own opinion.

None of that is meant to be rude or condescending at all and I apologize if you take it as such.

EDIT: Density is how spread out something is. That is the definition of density. Something airy or light is something that is more spread out over an area, higher surface area to its volume. Things with high density are things that are less spread out over an area, lower surface area to its volume. If your character's appearance doesn't change at all when they change their own density, then they're not actually increasing their molecular density. However, considering that characters in this rp don't necessarily have to follow the laws of physics, you can really do whatever you want. It was just a suggestion.
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<Snipped quote by Mr Allen J>

Oh now your bitch ass decides to come when your people tried to come for me earlier.

That's okay though. I'm a strong bitch. I can handle my own.



My ass is waiting for when it's most appropriate, then I tactically insert a shitpost.

Anyways, yeah, yeah, I agree with Maxx that Jesse bitchface could use the weaknesses that Maxx suggested, blah, blah, blah.

Ya'll stop acting like a bunch of bitches before I whip out my pimp hand.
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DAMN IT MAXX.

WE WERE HAVING A FUN TIME.
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Yes, this is setting the precedent for how the rest of this RP is going to be.
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Y'all drive bitches to drink.

I'll make some edits.
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I JUST WANTED TO HAVE A CIVIL CONVERSATION ON THE INTERNET! WHAT DID I DO TO DESERVE THIS????
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ON THE INTERNET

GLHF

btw have a hint, everyone.

Theme for one of my three characters.
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Okay, it's not too late

I can torch this thread and run while there is still time!

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Okay. Added that pain is lowered but he still has discomfort. Made it to where he's slower at a super densed state and took out his stunning is fatal. The only reason I put he can stun people when he phases his body into them is because like electronics, the human body has electrical impulses too. I think. I'm a little rusty on my science. But anyway I put it only stuns people for like a couple of seconds while he phases through them and when he's out of them they're fine. That sounds sexual in a way but you know what I mean.

And I think that's it. I don't know what else to do. He's not as bad ass as people are making him. I guess that's a compliment.

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Finally done with sheet one..Hope it's okay?.. ._.
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@Spoopy Scary I am extremely bad at describing clothes, tried to find a real versions of outfits similar to that that I liked but failed miserably. *shrug*. Usually only use anime pics fully, only used it now for a reference for her clothes. Don't kill me, k tnx.
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Hey, copied my character accross with a few changes, nothing major. I notice that Chloe and Pink are actualy quite similar in some ways, but massively different in terms of personality. Still, both have predator instincts, prefer meat, have sharp teeth (/fangs) and are cold blooded. I'm gunna love whatever interactions they end up having.

Also Chloe will fight her for that Jormungandr code name.
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@Heathen You still haven't given Jesse any solid weaknesses. The ones Maxx suggested were good.




@Shikaru Can you put it in a hider or something if you absolutely need to have it? idk

Other than that, the character is fine. A few sections (Specifically the power section) could be worded better. So she's basically a waterbender? Just that I think that she needs some more weaknesses. Since she basically has intangibility. Being a novice with a power isn't really a weakness, and should probably be moved up to the limits section. You could probably say something about dehydration, or a extra susceptibility to electricity. If she takes the characteristics of water, she could be softer, and takes more of a hit - but I'm spitballing here.




@Verminlord Upon reevaluation, Chloe still seems perfectly fine to me. She's accepted. We could definitely do a dynamic between Pink and Chloe - whether they become enemies or not is up to you, she isn't the most pleasant person. lol
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@Heathen You still haven't given Jesse any solid weaknesses. The ones Maxx suggested were good.


I'm not about to play with you.

I added in all the critiques except for the not being able to phase to high dense materials.

I've never really understood when people put weaknesses and limitations as separate things because I've always viewed them as being the same. That's why I listed most of his hindrances under limitations. For me, a weakness is something like kryptonite for Superman or some shit.

EDIT: Added in that his molecular structure is constantly unstable. That's actually a big disadvantage. And he's weak against electricity. There's not really much else.
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@Mr Allen J I'll be honest, I was dreading a harsh reaction to the sheet :p... I can definetely put the picture in a hider if it's that offending, yes.

I can also move the whole 'novice' thing to limits entirely. And she is more or less a waterbender, yes. I could definetley add the thing about electricity and dehydration as well. I'll work on her sisters CS shortly as well.

EDIT: Edited her.
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Alright I think I'm good. Hopefully. I added in some more things.
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