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@Heathen Thank you for your patience, and willingness to make the edits. His weaknesses and drawbacks, and shizz are now up to my ridiculously high standards.

Only one thing I don't quite get,

Lastly, his powers are drawn from his own metahuman energy. If he phases too many people or phases into a super dense object, he will pass out or die depending on how much energy he used.


I kinda feel like something power-related should occur if his power draws upon his energy. Like losing his powers for a bit, it fritzing, or having a higher chance of ashing. That's just me. lol




@Shikaru Power section is fine, the other thing I should note is that you didn't describe enough of her appearance for me to get a clear picture. You forgot stuff like hair color, facial-shape, etc. That's pretty much it.




Three pages and I'm already exhausted.
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Thank you for your patience, and willingness to make the edits. His weaknesses and drawbacks, and shizz are now up to my ridiculously high standards.

Only one thing I don't quite get,

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I kinda feel like something power-related should occur if his power draws upon his energy. Like losing his powers for a bit, it fritzing, or having a higher chance of ashing. That's just me. lol


I only added in that bit to give a weakness. And the fact you mentioned that metahumans get their power from some invisible energy inside of them. That's what I was talking about. And it is included that his molecules are unstable so his powers will be acting up a lot.

OH. And I realized everyone was getting confused is because I'm a big dummy and put most of his weaknesses in the limitation section. I moved most of them over. Which is why it seemed like he had no weaknesses. My bad.


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@Mr Allen J I didn't put that she had red hair in the description of how she wears it? Huh. I'll touch up her appearance a bit. Kinda meh from allergies lately soo it's possible I forgot it.
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OH. And I realized everyone was getting confused is because I'm a big dummy and put most of his weaknesses in the limitation section. I moved most of them over. Which is why it seemed like he had no weaknesses. My bad.


This is why you disappoint me the most.

@Mr Allen J I didn't put that she had red hair in the description of how she wears it? Huh. I'll touch up her appearance a bit. Kinda meh from allergies lately soo it's possible I forgot it.


Take your time. Won't be starting for a little bit.
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@Mr Allen J Edited, better?
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This is why you disappoint me the most.


You're so extra.

You know you love me and my dinginess.
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@Mr Allen J Edited, better?


Yeah, she's accepted.
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@Mr Allen J Nice. Thanks. Now to work on her sister.
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yay
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@Mr Allen J Hey so I'm done.
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@Mugin Hm. I'm a little confused as to what he can actually do with his power. I know you said that he can trap people in illusions or whatever, but he can just make any illusion? Or spawn a specific thing to elicit said emotion?

And I think the formatting on the sheet could use a little work. It's a tad hard to follow.
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Yea..I uh..would give criticism on the sheet too but I can't even read that ._. Like. At all.
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I usually make my sheets more in depth but Allen is a casual scrub that struggles with more than two paragraphs at a time.
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Kinda have some doubts regarding the powers and how it will make any sense but anyway, just gonna throw this in and see if it meets the standards.
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The first paragraph of the appearance is utterly superfluous. I don't see a reason for it to be there other than to digress and show off your vocabulary. It's more of a personality trait anyways.
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Well I figured that since there's no personality section, I may as well add a bit of concept just to correlate with the physical appearance. If it's really that unnecessary, then I'll simply remove it.
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I agree, Allen is bad. :^)

Brief bio and a missing section? My boy is scrubbing it up already.
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I agree, Allen is bad. :^)

Brief bio and a missing section? My boy is scrubbing it up already.


Hey, hey, hey, you're the one joining this (And it'd be great if you didn't). I just didn't feel like writing sheets atm.

Anyways, Andrea is accepted.




@Scoundrel Richard checks out. I don't really care if you add personality or not - just throw it in the other section. He's accepted.




This is a message to err'body, but I was thinking of a "school-games", or tournament-type plot up until I come up with something solid. Like, everyone was put into teams, and forced to compete to win fame and glory! Oh, that's another thing. I'm thinking that I put an empathizes on the teams thing. Every team gets their own team, colors, etc - like a little sport's team. Could lead to some interesting dynamics, and a good reason for people to interact with each other.

What do ya'll think?
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Sounds cool. I'll also have Maria's sheet up sometime today.
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So is it kind of like the Hogwarts housing in a way but add in some competitions...in a way?
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