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WiliamZero said
AMAZING UPDATE Xd I wanna make update too, still waiting for Jelly XD

Jelsaki hasn't been on for 5 days ._.

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Lexzah said
Arydun still strode through the city she was currently residing in, unknowing to where she was going or why since she currently had no goal. Soon though the Dragonette felt her tummy complain to her, she was hungry and she didn't feel like eating raw cow again.Placing a slender hand on her stomach the blue haired girl glanced around for a human place to eat, eyes landing on a small Cafe the had a pleasant smell wafting from it's open doors. Grinning widely Arydun picked up her pace and was almost skipping over the the Cafe, eager to get some human food into her stomach as she found it very tasty.Arydun got to the Cafe quickly and skipped into the small building, not looking where she was going of course. For an intelligent dragon she was rather clumsy and didn't tend to pay attention to where she was going. The Dragonette was looking all over the place and didn't notice herself almost run into a waiter until it was almost to late, when she did notice just in time Arydun quickly moved so not to knock the man over but instead her rear bumped into the back of a boy sitting at a table behind her. Realizing this Arydun quickly back up from him and bowed deeply in apology "I'm so sorry sure I wasn't paying attention to where I was going" She quickly said still bowing low to him.

Sip.

Ah yes, there was nothing like a nice drink of caffeine stuffed with a bunch of sugar to wake your system before classes start on a nice Spring morning. Sip. It was indeed something Ren could most definitely appreciate in life. Not often was he early enough to treat himself to this, after all. Si-

As he brought up the cup to his lips, something soft and bulbous pushed the back of his chair, causing a minor spill of his drink. Fortunately, he was drinking leaning somewhat forward rather than backward, so the force didn't end up causing his shirt to go brownish. Which was good, since he didn't want to deal with teachers and the 'disciplinary committee' reprimanding him for not keeping his uniform straight. The ESPer set his drink down and wiped his lower face off with a napkin. He registered some sound and movement off somewhere behind him and he turned, only to be faced with a rather embarrassed bluenette. Evidently she had been the one to bump into his chair.

Ren sighed and rubbed one of his temples. While it was true this girl was well-meaning and sincerely apologetic, she was also creating a scene. The tribal much preferred not to be the center of attention too much; it gave him headaches, especially when around other ESPers. Subtlety was more his game, of course. "Yeah... Don't worry about it. It's fine," Ren insisted, attempting to stop the young lady from attracting even more attention his way.

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HellHoundWoof said
Ok would a ship from Laranias be able to get to Elfteria... Because I can always say he sneaked onto a ship for the night not caring where it would take him.

Or you could say he was made on Elfteria. Or was chilling there before for whatever reason before the RP started.

Either way, if it's plausible I don't think anyone really minds.

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IIRC the only energies are AIM, Mana, and Spirit Energy.

Also, I personally cannot fathom aliens in a world where several universes have collided. I'd think if we had the science to give people superpowers, then we'd definitely have the science to conquer space (maybe even WITH the superpowers) and find things. It wouldn't quite be a matter of 'Zylar's Race is unknown', more like 'Zylar's Race is known, so is their name, population, society, etc', since I'd assume the planet made out of many dimensions would be able to find the alien planet first.

A custom demon or a hybrid, I can see, but not aliens, no. Or at least, not an alien in the traditional sense.

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HellHoundWoof said
Appearance: He is tall and muscular though he does not work out it is merely worked into his physiology, he has long dark hair that he pushes back behind his head. He has greenish gray eyes and a small scar over his right eye. He has a tattoo of 1624 on his right forearm which is what he will introduce himself as.

I prefer pictures but that's a nitpicky thing

Name: Project 1624

Alias: None

Race: Clone of an elf and human hybrid.

Nationality: Lyranian.
Lyranias isn't the continent to be spitting out clones, IIRC. Pitover or Island Nation would be better. Unless this is where his 'original' came from

Occupation: He has no occupation and is currently seeking clues as to who he is.

Age: 21
There is a thing here I was going to mention here, but I forgot over the song change.

Oh right, so is this his legit age or his biological age? Since I'd assume a clone would have accelerated aging to be useful quicker rather than having to wait X amount of years.

Gender: Male

Specialty / Skill: He is good at cooking though he does not know how, he is also gifted with instant combat reflexes however he loses sight of his goals in combat other than to neutralize his opponent.

So how instant is instant?

Personality: He is commonly a shy person but can be flirtatious at times. If provoked he will likely be hostile or conflict with whomever stands in his way. He prefers to avoid contact with other people as he suspects people to shun him and or harm him.

>Shy and avoids contact with other people
>Flirtatious

I cannot see that combination working out, at all. Also, this seems a bit on the short side.

Ability: He is prone to act as though in combat which gives him instant reflexes if attacked or if he hears a sound he does not recognize as familiar. However he cannot always control it and will likely harm someone if they were to accidentally trip and or wake him in his sleep. His bones are near unbreakable as well as increased strength and stamina due to his enhanced physiology.

Well he must hate amusement parks and horror movies

Others: He does not like being given orders and commonly seeks to avoid situations where he is not in control. He seeks the man he is cloned after and generally anyone who'm can help him survive and find out more about himself. Not knowing his true name he does not give any name and if he is comfortable enough will tell his story.

So THERE'S where the rest of the Personality went. Though I feel you could mesh the personality traits together better.

Also, he doesn't sound like a very good Super Soldier, I can see why they left him what with the insubordinate personality.

I hope my usual review style still works. Is the Bold formatting there?

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Well, I'm doing both, but yours is probably gonna be quicker, so I'm doin' it first.

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Oh, it ain't your fault. I just found several fanmixes of songs that I want to sift through to find stuffs to download later.

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OKAY. YOU KNOW WHAT? SCREW SLEEP. TIME TO REVIEW A CS!

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Lexzah said
Alright I will bump into Ren, where is he currently?

The cafe. You know the one.

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Well, I'm online and the CoGM, apparently, but I don't think I have authority to Deny/Accept CSs.

Plus, if we're being honest here, I'm REALLY nitpicky. Dunno if you'd even want me to critique you. And it's ~12:30AM, and I'm particularly irritable when I don't sleep enough, if you need more fuel for the flame.

Will lives across the world from me, so I'd say he's busy since it's roughy 2:30PM where he is.