Hank

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Thanks. Let's write.

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Is the colony some kind of prefab system that's entirely covered from the elements outside, or is it more like a series of scattered buildings sitting out in the open?

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Good luck, @Austronaut.

In that case, I suggest we get underway and the others can join up later?

Nice to meet everyone ^.^

Welcome.

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If it helps, both of the commas you just used are unnecessary and incorrectly placed. English generally doesn't require a comma to bisect a sentence until you either start listing things, or (example right now) you use a conjunction (or, but, etc).

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That was one thing being difficult. I was thinking on how to write an Eldar - whom got the boot, out of her Craftworld. Aka literally her home, and afterlife place.

Should he retain her so-called 'I am better, than you' mentality - when those same people, kicked her out; there is some hidden dislike for her fellow Eldar. But not enough to go murder-fuck them. So I thought of maybe combining, some parts of her above-mentality with that of having lived away from her Craftworld, amongst Xenos.

@NecroKnight

So the commas aren't a stylistic choice? This is how you write English in general?

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I'll echo the point on the writing style. The abuse of commas hurts my eyes, frankly. An easier way to get the point across that she's an alien space-elf is to use very formal language and syntax. Avoid words like "stuff" and "thing" and don't use contractions (you are vs you're).

"The Path of the Fallen comes with a psychic mark that warns all of my kin not to approach and to slay me, should I come too close. There is no hiding from my crime among my own kind. I was forced to seek company with... lesser creatures."

For example.

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Can't wait.

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