<Snipped quote by j8cob> According to the wiki:<Snipped quote> So is it possible he can just bash his way through? Because I had even set it up IC <Snipped quote by Blue Demon> If so, I'll withdraw my objection.
Nah, you bring up a good point. I'll fix that in like an hour.
The flare shot through the sky, explosions rocked the small village, and hordes of Red Sage rebels closed in. The plan was going perfectly so far. But it wasn't going perfect enough. As Lady Tametomo and her entourage of recruits marched through the city towards the government compound, a red blur flew past them from behind and careened ahead of the pack. One could discern it was an adult male from the body shape and build, and a big one at that. He wore no red armband but instead was concealed behind a red hoodie. His face was hidden behind a white oni mask, but one could see red hair just underneath the hood. But perhaps the strangest part about the mystery rebel's wardrobe was his lack of shoes, instead navigating with only his bare feet.
As he passed by the Lady Commander, he turned his head to face her. He gave no words or gestures, he instead was making sure she was watching him. He was making sure his boss was paying attention to what he was about to do. "Don't take your eyes off me," he mumbled to himself as he landed on the steps leading up to the ornate government building. Immediately a Confederation soldier approached the masked Katsuko, bringing down a naginata with the intention to decapitate the invader. Instead the red hooded figure reached out and casually grabbed the weapon by the handle, yanking it away from the soldier and discarding it down the stairs lazily. Before the guard could adjust his strategy he was met by Katsuko's left fist, sending him flying to the side and crashing entirely through a nearby storefront. The unnatural strength was calling card. Katsuko Moto had entered the scene.
Without delaying any further he dashed up the stairs, using his momentum to knock over any enemies that got in his way. Some even had the reflexes to dodge or put in a preemptive strike, but Katsuko was just as fast. Those who really tried to stop him were delivered a swift elbow or knee to reward them for their effort. The defeated enemies usually just rolled down the stairs towards the rest of the invading party, but sometimes they were sent flying from a solid, Chakra Enchanced Strength level blow. It seemed like child's play with how quickly and efficiently this man went through his opponents. He reached the top of the stone stairs, having cleared it of almost all opposition for everyone behind him. A smirk formed on his face, one that couldn't be seen but likely could be felt. When he looked forward again, however, there were two more female soldiers blocking his way. One seemed to be in her thirties and wielded an electrified sword. The other was a teenage girl with blue hair and a large metal arm, also brandishing a blade in Katsuko's direction.
The younger girl opened her mouth to speak but Katsuko didn't even let her start. He dashed between the two, faster than either could react. His shoulders connected with the midsection of both girls, sending them backwards and out of the way. Even their swords clattered to the ground, both having dropped their weapons on impact with the beastly taijutsu master. In his headlong charge there was only one obstacle left: the door. But before Katsuko could handle that he ran into some kind of invisible force. Immediately upon contact it became briefly visible. It seems the Confederation wasn't completely inept today, they had their guards place a barrier around the main building. "Oh boy," Katsuko grumbled aloud. He looked over his shoulder at the stairs behind him, waiting briefly for Lady Tametomo and her entourage to arrive. Once they were in view he faced forward again. "Oi, Confederate assholes!" he shouted to the people inside. "Anyone that isn't on the ground when I come in is gonna die! Prepare yourselves!!"
He then took a few steps back, digging into one of his pouches and extracting a small summoning scroll. He quickly opened it and channeled his chakra into its writing, creating a massive cloud of white smoke that quickly blew away in the breeze. In his hands now was a gigantic steel weapon, dwarfing Katsuko in size quite easily. He wielded it tightly with both hands, lowered it to be parallel with the ground, and then deliberately pulled his arms back. One could compare it to a batter in baseball preparing to swing. "The Red Sages are coming in!!" With a mighty swing the monstrous steel club collided with the chakra barrier. A powerful reverberation resounded from the impact and a massive backblast of wind erupted from the impact point. It was so strong, in fact, that those behind Katsuko and were not prepared were lifted off their feet and tossed down the stairs. Katsuko himself recoiled from the attack, his Saihyousen bouncing off the barrier with enough force to slam into the ground and smash the stone tiles into a shower of debris. His expression underneath his mask wasn't one of anger, but instead one of confusion. It's one of the tricky ones. After staggering for a moment the young man regained his balance and settled down, resting the gigantic weapon on his shoulder as he pondered on how to deal with this situation. He would look foolish if he tried to break it again, as clearly his monstrous strength wasn't the right tool for this job. "Find the tags!"
Mirai Yumiya
Mirai and Aneko had traveled to this festival of their own free will. Or at least it was at the suggestion of Aneko, as Mirai wasn't particularly enthusiastic about farming or the like. Apparently her servant had come from a long line of wheat farmers or something, so that explained her investment in the silly event. While the blue-haired teen found nothing interesting throughout the day she was still dragged along by Aneko. It made her wonder why she was going along, considering she was technically in-charge of Aneko and not the other way around. The day's festivities, however, came to a screeching halt with the red light in the sky.
The first few explosions were all it took for the girls to realize the situation. "It's the Red Sages," Aneko stated, grabbing Mirai by her (right) wrist and dragging her along. It was a completely unnecessary action, as the younger girl would've followed without physical assistance, but Mirai didn't say anything about it. "What do we do? Are we going to the General?" "Yeah, that's our priority right now. They must've come for him." It was a brief trip to the main building of the government compound, where already a sizeable portion of shinobi had gathered. The two young women took their battle stations, at the back of the formation as per Mirai's usual. But within minutes the enemies had already managed to make their way into the compound.
She could hear the screams and sounds of battle below, but only when she finally saw the red did she truly understand her situation. Mirai and Aneko were the last two guards outside the building, all the rest were inside. And the man with the demon mask and the red jacket appeared at the top of the stairs. The two girls drew their weapons, Aneko using her lightning ninjutsu to electrify her blade, and took defensive stances. There was an awkward silence for a moment as the man looked backwards towards his comrades, but the moment he looked forward Mirai decided to say something. "Sto-" She felt a sudden, heavy impact at her side, just below the ribs. The blow sent her flying sideways, causing her to land on her side and roll several times before coming to a stop laying face-down on the ground. So fast, she thought, before using her metal arm to pick herself up. Looking over to where she was she immediately saw that Aneko had suffered a similar fate and was sent the opposite direction. Their swords lay on the ground where they had been knocked away from. And now more rebels were appearing as the red man prepared some kind of attack to get into the building. This is bad. They just brushed us aside. We don't stand a chance out here! Mirai gulped back some fear, but didn't yet get to her feet. She was worried that it would draw attention back to her. She didn't want to die here. She didn't even want to be here in the first place. We can't do this on our own. We're gonna fail. We're gonna die...
“Sacrifice yourself to do one good thing, or live on to do many? Think about it.”
Standing at about 5'11" and weighing in at 150~lb, Nori is tall, lean shinobi, with an air of thoughtful relaxation about him. His bluish-black hair is trimmed slightly shorter than in the picture above, keeping the bangs out of his eyes, and the length in the back about halfway down the neck. His skin is rather pale, with sharp grey eyes, and slightly pointed teeth reminiscent of the Seven Ninja Swordsman of the Mist.
Attire-wise; in battle, he forgoes a flak jacket, instead settling for a chain mesh under a loose, sleeveless blue shirt, black shin-length pants, standard issue black sandals, arm-guards, and his dark blue scarf tucked into the back of his shirt; a worn Kirigakure plate is attached to the end of this.
Out of battle, his attire is much more modern; while he still sticks to wearing blue out of habit, he often dresses in semi-casual suit jackets, button-up shirts, slacks, and sneakers, varying to weather and situation as necessary. The only consistency is the dark-blue scarf, kept with him regardless of occasion.
Personnel files. Access only by security personnel with a C3 clearance.
【Full Name】 Nori Hisakawa
【Alias】 The Listener; The Drowning Spear; Scarfy lol
【Affiliation】 Red Sages
【Age】 23
【Sex】 Male
【Sexuality】 Bisexual it's not gay in a three-way
【Birthplace】 Kirigakure Rest in Pepperoni
【Bloodline】 Hisakawa
【Rank】 Chūnin
Psych. report. Medical secrecy applies.
【Personality】 Nori is an analytical type. Even in casual conversations, he will take long periods of time to listen thoroughly to what the other(s) have to say before replying, replying only when he has found something worthwhile to say in response. He's often relaxing to be around because of this trait; you'll almost never be interrupted or ignored, and especially those needing to blow off some steam will drift to him.
The responses are where that line becomes less clear-cut. His honesty in his responses, and the depth he might go to analyze a statement, can lead to starting an argument that never needed to happen, or worsening an existing one. Not everyone likes hearing the truth. He doesn't seem to regret these situations, since the problem wasn't his fault in the first place. Some people think he's arrogant because of this aloofness, and they wouldn't be wrong. He'll become frustrated if people challenge his analysis, and even moreso if he happens to have made a mistake in his interpretation of the situation in the first place. nerd
Being such a good listener though, sometimes he has trouble starting conversations, or holding them. He doesn't really have the social drive to keep up small talk for very long, and he also dislikes having to talk about himself. It takes work for him to honestly feel like opening up to anyone, and he grows extremely uncomfortable talking about himself or his past. Which leads to a conflict of interests; if he can talk to you about your problems, why can't he talk to you about his own? my bad, he's extra nerd
【History】 Nori is the only son of his parents, a non-shinobi father and a hunter-nin mother, in the unsteady Kirigakure village. With the years preceding the era of peace from the Hamajō Confederation, his mother was hardly ever home for the boy, constantly performing missions, be they for the village, or against its defectors. No questions asked has always been the terms of the Hidden Mist though, and so he simply smiled and nodded when his father constantly praised her mother as a hero, regardless of how dirty her job was. Even when she did return though, she never doted on him, unlike how he saw other mothers do with their children. She simply enjoyed the brief tranquility that would come between her missions as much as possible, and Nori accepted the exhaustion that came with his mother, the "hero."
As he grew into his Academy years, he himself trained diligently in the Academy, to become a "great hero" like his scarcely seen mother, and succeeded; he was quiet, talented, and most importantly, obedient. What he also learned however, is how to be an outcast; children in times of war are never settled, and they found every reason to question why his father wasn't a shinobi, and tease that maybe his mother wouldn't come back this time. He simply let them speak and continued his training; his father did everything he could as a parent, and his mother was a hero. He didn't have the nerve to question them early on, and didn't care once he understood later. Even after learning of just what the job of hunter-nin entailed, well, it was just another grisly duty, and he would be more than willing to follow his mother's footsteps in that role.
And then, during his graduating year at the Academy, the war hit a terrifying peak for Kirigakure--the destruction of the village. People scattered. Most died. Nori and his family were of the lucky ones; they managed to get out before the devastation, finding themselves heading north across the water to the Land of Lightning, and the new Kumo Province. For a long time, neither of them knew where his mother was. His father took up the task of farming, struggling to get by in the lackluster area. Nori didn't know what to do. He had been following in his mother's footsteps, but how could he join a military that let their home be destroyed and separated him from his "hero?"
His decision would be solidified several years later, after the Hamajō Confederation had settled in. After the destruction of Kirigakure, his mother had been lost. She didn't know what had happened to her family. She thought them likely dead, herself being another lucky one, sent over to the Land of Fire on her most recent task. The loss of home, the loss of family...she ended up with some of the scattered armies, and eventually decided that she would fight against the power that couldn't protect her anymore; she joined the would-be Red Sages, and eventually got herself killed for it. Family connections were made. The Confederation came to his father's farm, looking for intel on the Red Sages. Neither of them knew anything about what had happened after Kirigakure, and after some extremely stern interrogation, decided that refugees fled to Kumo wouldn't know what happened to a traitor last seen near Konoha.
"Traitor." That was the term that had solidified his decision. There had to be a reason; she had been a hunter-nin. Her duty: to track down rogue shinobi, the traitors. She had to know the consequences of becoming the hunted, so the reason for her supposed defection had to have some meaning behind it. He thought it over, and decided to continue her fight. His father never questioned it; he was a grown man now, and his decision was his own. He would join the Red Sages, and fight the real traitors. I actually really like this history. Good work.
【Family ties】 Nori grew up in a single-father middle-class household, with his mother visiting only once every several months during her time of service after she got herself off of maternity leave. He has no siblings. After the destruction of Kirigakure, he lived in near-poverty with his single father, and never saw his mother again.
Naozumi Hisakawa | Father | 50, Kumogakure, farmer. Suffers depression from the loss of his wife. Under surveillance following disappearance of chunin son. Former spouse classified as traitor.
Koyori Hisakawa | Mother | 44, Deceased. Hunter-nin. Classified as traitor for assisting criminals against the Hamajō Confederation.
【Dreams and fears】 Nori's dreams are to . Whether that means he will be a shinobi of the Hamajō Confederation or the Red Sages is yet to be determined. Looks like you deleted a few things here. Should probably clean this up, but I don't care much about this section because history and personality already exist.
Combat reports. Gathered from evaluation reports after missions.
【Fighting style】 Nori focuses around genjutsu-based combat, looking to manipulate his opponents into a corner with various Water-style ninjutsu and weaponry--most notably being a naginata--before locking them down with genjutsu and going in to finish the job.
【N/A】 Bloodline limit name: N/A Description: User possesses no known kekkei genkai. You can just delete this section to cut down on size and make it look nicer.
【Custom made techniques】 Aquatic Bone Suffering Rank:B Range:Dependent Description: This jutsu causes all water created from a previous Water Release ninjutsu to have an extreme numbing effect to any skin in contact with it, extremely hindering the sense of touch, and in turn, making it more difficult to control the dampened areas. While the effect is immediate and intense though, it's reliant on how wet the opponent is; if they've been successfully dodging techniques, or happen to be in heavy armor, they likely won't be affected significantly. Likewise, managing to sufficiently dry themselves will remove the effect, and as with all genjutsu, if they are aware it's the illusion of loss of sensation, then they can mentally force themselves to overcome it if possible. The strength of the technique is its subtlety and range, the weakness being its ease of avoidance.
Jutsu name: Water Release: Seashell Current Discord Rank:B Range:Mid to long-range Description: An audio genjutsu, in which the user releases a quick jet of water from their mouth onto anything nearby. Those hearing any noise the jet of water creates, such as its impact, will begin hearing only the noise they heard the genjutsu create, be it a splash on another body of water, against a tree, etc., essentially cutting off their ability to hear. In combination with the Hiding in Mist Technique, it can be crippling to have one of your other means of locating your opponent crippled. The strength of the genjutsu lies in it's simplicity of execution and subtlety. The weaknesses lie in the lack of physical hindrance; the opponent is not incapacitated in any other way, and it can be avoided by not hearing the initial noise, and the technique can be overcome with sufficient time/chakra control. Jutsu name:Kingdom of the Eastern Seas Rank:A Range:Short Description:The user clasps their hand at an opponent's throat or forehead while casting the genjutsu, after which, the victim will be under the illusion of being dragged to the bottom of the ocean floor; painful, crushing water pressure, asphyxiation, no light, and no sound. These effects persist until the caster of the genjutsu releases their hand from the opponent, or loses the ability to channel the chakra. The weakness of the technique lies in its extremely close range, especially so with the need to grasp something as usually well-protected as a head or neck. The strength lies in the fast effects and sheer intensity of the genjutsu, crippling all senses at once, incapacitating most in short order. Nevermind, you did have an A rank. Oh well. Nothing wrong with it though.
【Weaponry, tools and objects.】 Weapon, tool or object name:Customized Naginata Description:A 5 foot long bright grey naginata, with the bottom half able to collapse into the top to make it a more efficient weapon at extremely close range, as well as the tsuba consisting of a hardened rubber disk, to insulate electricity coming through the blade, knowing that his exclusive use of water techniques makes him quite vulnerable to an electric discharge. The coloration is exclusively for blending in with the Hiding in Mist Technique, to make the weapon harder to see.
Nothing really wrong here. A few whoopsies like spacing, but not enough to particularly bother me. I accept him.
Alright, ladies and gentleman, I added our Great President of the Hamajo Confederation to my post in the characters tab. Read at your own discretion. You might be blinded by the sheer astounding quality of which you will all be in awe.
In other news I'm an asshole and gonna post in the IC soon.
don't use this picture, get a better one “Time to kick some ass!” neverheardthatbefore
【Full Name】 Jenso Honoryuken 【Alias】 Jenso 【Affiliation】 Undecided This is getting popular... 【Age】 22 【Sex】 Male 【Sexuality】 Heterosexual 【Birthplace】 Sunagakure 【Bloodline】 His father was a well -trained Taijutsu warrior who had trained him in the art of Flame Taijutsu. Not really the section to put this.
Psych. report. Medical secrecy applies.
【Personality】 He's a kind, cheerful,confident person who doesn't back away from a fight. He tries to avoid fights if possible, prefering to use his words rather than his fists. This naivety often puts him in danger though, making him a ripe target for aggressive ninja to strike down without immediate resistance. Luckily his reflexes, both physically and socially, are like lightning. The moment a sitation goes grey, he’ll snap into a state of determination that can easily overshadow any sense of mercy or reasoning he had prior. Jenso will try to protect those he cares about no matter what, often putting himself at risk and sometimes in severe danger for the good over others. Jenso is kind to most, as long as their ideologues don’t conflict with his sense of justice. As understanding as he is, Jenso is adamant about his beliefs, and will often disregard courtesy to defend what he believes in. This resonates strongly when The Hamajō Confederation becomes an immediate topic, and he can become rather heated when speaking of their global conquest. The same sense of justice arises when people audibly refute the Red mages and their agenda, though he is smart enough to keep his opinions concealed... For the most part. So he supports the Red Sages. Should not that under affiliation.
Jenso values training above much else, putting an intense amount of effort into sustaining his father’s Nin/Taijutsu style with all the heart he can muster. One might consider him a lovabale, but dense protagonist and honestly, that’s not too far from the truth. But if he wasn’t there to fight for what’s right, or at least, what’s kick ass, then who would be? cliche_typecast.exe
【History】 Jenso grew up in Sunagakure with very little wealth to his family’s name. Despite this, his father managed to support him after his mother died giving birth, taking on more missions despite his old age to pay for food, housing, and other expenses. Even though he worked day-in and day-out as a powerful shinobi, Hideno had more than enough spirit to spare when spending time with his son, whether it was training in the hot sun for hours at a time, or sharing a familiar meal by the fireplace.
At the very young age of 7, Jenso displayed unusual affinity with fire natured chakra, and was able to perfectly mold flames to his liking despite how hopeless he was with most other jutsu, including but not limited to shadow clones and the popular body replacement technique. Even his father, the creator of the flame Taijutsu style, was astounded by just how proficient he’d become with manipulating fire natured chakra at such a young age. It allowed him to focus on teaching Jenso the art of Taijutsu, which he’d needed far more guidence in mastering.
As he grew older, Jenso’s teenage years were often spent training, taking as many missions as he could manage, and making new friends among his fello shinobi. His father had finally brought his own shinobi career to a close, instead opening a dojo to teach his unique style of taijutsu to new pupils, wher e Jenso would often help as a supporting Sensei of sorts. Life was calm, until The Hamajō Confederation overtook the world. Everything proceeded as usual, until Jenso’s father began voicing more and more negative opinions of The Hamajō Confederation in the public eye. This didn’t last for long, as expected. One night, while Jenso was asleep, his father was taken away, and ultimately executed for his beliefs against The Hamajō Confederation. rekt
To this Day, Jenso is not aware of his father’s fate, but he’s pretty sure he knows who’s responsible. He closed his father’s dojo, and decided to carry on flame taijutsu, developing it at his pride and joy, not only for himself, but for his father before him. 【Rank】 Chūnin 【Family ties】 One day, The Hamajō Confederation found where they lived and executed his father and mother. Jenso himself however, managed to escape while his father fought the forces of the The Hamajō Confederation. After seeing all of this happen, he was determined to do his best to protect the innocent and try to make the world a better place.
Name | Relationship to character | Age, living place, profession and additional info You should probably actually fill in this. As in fill this in.
【Dreams and fears】 He tries to fight for a better future, one where peace reigns. Along with his own sense of justice, he also likes to adventure around the world. He will do his best to follow this dream. His biggest fear would be to lose his friends, and will do anything to make sure they're safe. i fight for mah friends #6 Combat reports. Gathered from evaluation reports after missions.
【Fighting style】 Jenso is primarily a taijutsu specialist, with exception mastery over custom fire-based Jutsu that coincide with his physical prowess. His style is sheer offense, which when mixed with his natural strength and insane durability, becomes a deadly force, even for experience shinobi to face against. As a chuunin, I highly doubt that last statement. 【Kekkei genkai, or bloodline limit】 Bloodline limit name: Soul Release Description: The user’s chakra network can excell to astounding levels, directly affecting their strength and speed as they continue to fight. In a very short time, the user’s physical strength can more than quintuple, and continues to increase with each passing minute he remains in combat, up to a very vague limit. On average, spending only 3 minutes in combat will allow the user to reach their full potential, rivaling the strength of the fifth gate release. Unlike the eight gates however, Soul release does not place immense strain on the user’s body. Advanced users are capable of matching the capabilities of the sixth gate release, and it is assumed that soul release could potentially outright invalidate the eight gate release altogether. However, using this technique alongside the eight gates proves to be fatal, even upon unlocking only a single gate. Oh boy, KG out of nowhere...
Strengths: Soul release has the potential to be the most powerful resource for a taijutsu master. In some cases, this Kekkei Genkai puts its user on a completely different level than even the most proficient users of the eight gates release, without any of the strikeback. Due to the excessive chakra flow, Soul Release also makes the user relatively immune to pain, and gives them hightened reflexes. Additionally, their chakra flow makes it extremely difficult for Genjutsu to affect them at all, only making them susceptible to high ranking genjutsu techniques. Weaknesses: Although Soul release does not put an inherent strain on the body or chakra network therein, it cannot be sustained if the user’s chakra reserves run low, and will actually weaken them if they expend too much chakra during a fight. This Kekkei Genkei also makes using the eight gates, one of the most powerful techniques avaiable to taijutsu specialists, impossible, as it will put too much strain on their insanely fast chakra flow. Additionally, due to the lack of pain, the user cannot possibly know if he’d sustained internal injury of any kind. In many cases, Soul release users have unknowingly sent themselves to an early grave by sustaining significant interanl injury and not recieving proper treatment from a medical ninja. Their bodies can practically stop working without warning if they go too far when fighting.
So I'm gonna stop right now and take the time to explain why I'm denying this Kekkei Genkai. It rivals Fifth Gate Release of the Eight Gates and has no practical weaknesses. Claiming that "you can't use it if your chakra is low" is an inherent trait with everything based on chakra. That's as much of a weakness as all cars being unable to drive when they are out of fuel. On top of genjutsu immunity and complete pain tolerance, this is simply ridiculous. Literally no drawbacks or flaws. Just a straight, rather massive, power-up. This isn't acceptable.
Name: Flame Taijutsu: Flame Dragon Punch Rank: A Range: Short Description: An absolutely devestating technique that invests a large amount of chakra to create concentrated flames around the user’s fist. These flames both increase the sheer power, speed, and of course, heat of the punch. This attack is so powerful, it can easily pierce most defenses, with minimal drawback, aside from its chakra consumption. [Tex agreed this could potentially pierce Silver Release: Solid Mail without much difficulty]
This would have to be a pretty strong punch to make simple flames worthy of A rank. How does covering your hand in fire make you hit harder or faster?
Name: Flame Taijutsu: Meteor Rank: B Range: Long Description: Channels fire around his entire body momentarily before launching himself in any given direction. While midair, his body spins rapidly, gaining momentum until he is within range of a target, at which point he can unfurl into a kick, punch, or decide to outright collide with his target. The technique can be canceled mid-air. This isn't B rank. I'd make it D, maybe C depending on the strength.
Name: Inferno Saw Rank: B Range: Long Description: Forms a spinning blade of intense heat between the palms of his hands, which can then be throw like a large shuriken. This heated spinning blade cuts through most weaponry like butter, and can be controlled momentarily after it’s thrown, dissappearing after a few seconds. For fire, by itself, to cleave through metal weapons like butter it would have to no longer be fire. That's like a plasma torch on steroids. So no, I don't accept this as is. Nerf or remove.
Name: Flame Whip Rank: C Range: Medium Description: Creates a long whip out of condensed chakra that can wrap around objects, and burn them simoltaniously. This whip’s bond is very strong, but its range is limited to about 40 feet. das a long whip, but okay
Name: Flame Anvil Rank: C Range: Short Description: Creates a hammer made of condensed chakra, covered in flames. This hammer can be conjured almost instantly, and has considerable crushing power behind each of its swings. k
Name: Flame Taijutsu: Dragon’s Claws Rank: C Range: Short Description: The basis of all Flame Taijutsu. The user’s fists launch flames with every punch, expending chakra and increasing in heat/velocity with the user’s physical strength and speed. So he punches fireballs and their strength is determined by his punch? Needs a bit better detailing here.
Name: Flame Taijutsu: Dragon’s Roar Rank: C Range: Short Description: The user can release a concussive shockwaves of flame from his fists with each punch. When slamming their fists together, this can create a larger shockwave around their body, strong enough to knock away projectiles, and burn enemies nearby. Requires a considerable amount of chakra to activate constantly. Fire itself can't make shockwaves. Explosions make shockwaves. So it would have to be an explosion of fire on each shockwave, not just the fire itself doing nothing and still attaining that effect.
Name: Flame Taijutsu: Dragon’s Lash Rank: C Range: Medium Description:. Using their feet, a user can create low-hanging waves of fire with their kicks that hug the ground and grow as they travel forwards. These vary in heigh and width depending on the angle and power of each kick. This makes five C-rank techniques, which is 1 too many. Gonna have to pick and choose here and remove one of them.
【Weaponry, tools and objects.】 Weapon, tool or object name: His fists, obviously. Weapon, tool or object type: The type that are attached to his wrists.
Description: That thing you do when you curl your fingers together and tighten your knuckles. A fist. Two fists, actually. lol, this doesn't need to be here. You can just delete the weapon section if he doesn't actually have any weapons.
There are many problems that I have with this sheet. There are numerous grammatical errors and the coding of the sheet is subpar, making it visually unappealing to look at. Likewise there are several things that need to be fixed. I do not approve of it as it stands right now. Fix the coding and make the required changes before I look at it again. I can guarantee Partisan or Savato will agree with my requested changes, so they will likely postpone reviewing until the changes are made.
I reviewed Masato with @Lost in my Mind over Skype, so no fancy blue review will be posted here. I am publicly posting my approval of his sheet now that he has made the requested edits.
Once they're fixed you'll be gucci. Don't post the finished product in the character tab just yet, as you need an acceptance from either Partisan or Savato as well. The whole two approvals thing.
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