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I actually used the contest as sort of an excuse to make something quickly like that! srry xD (I wanted to make Sangue touch people's heads for some reason)


I'm gonna be honest, it was kinda creepy.
@Guess Who
Did you play like a really violent game of Grand Theft Auto before you wrote that?

Also you're obviously not going to win because you killed the Judge's character, nice work dumb ass.
I'm waiting on Agent Sonne and the captain to sign the papers to allow Avelina onto the ship. Has anyone seen our beloved GM in a while?
Sapphire Rode - Physical Education

Sapphire expected a lecture from the teacher. If she'd been stronger Agesander wouldn't even have known she was injured. She'd have to work on that. Her ankle was still throbbing as well but thankfully that was a much smaller injury and at this point all but healed by her aura. Sapphire understood the bird analogy well enough but what Agesander didn't mention was that the type of birds that condoned that type of behavior were birds of prey, warriors. They put the rest of the flock above there own injuries to ensure their survival even if it meant death. And besides the bird that slowed to heal was left behind.

Sapphire watched as everyone else started in on the exercises that the Professor had asked of them. Victor with his robotic arm no doubt capable of hundreds of push ups and was displaying that fact openly. Ivan took off at breakneck speed around the track. Ultimately his velocity was unsustainable but clearly he wanted to make sure everyone else in the gym class knew that he was the man. Sapphire rolled her eyes unimpressed. It seemed to contradict his earlier remark about not going full out in Combat Class in order to keep his tactics a secret but then again she'd been pretty sure that he was just covering for his lack in combat experience.

Sapphire picked her water bottle up off the ground where she'd left it and took a hefty swig which was more than a little uncomfortable as her abdominal muscles contracted when she swallowed causing her rib to twinge with pain. With her thirst quenched Sapphire screwed the cap back on her water bottle and looked at the Professor. "I take it your not going to let me participate in those exercises?" she asked him without much hope on her face.
Yes, but they don't matter. I didn't make their characters.
MULTI_MEDIA_MAN


There was more with Oswald, a whole ethical debate on whether Sapphire had the right to restore the world and change everyone's lives in such a meaningful way. Had to cut it out for length.
I sort of make most everyone else jerks didn't I?
The first draft was closer to four times the limit but I did the slice and dice to it without doing to much damage to the central story. Best I could do without making it a boring read.

In school I always lost marks on creative writing assignments because they were too far beyond the limit.
Please note that for the sake of this story some character’s histories have been rewritten or in some cases completely made up.

I apologize for the extreme length of the story compared to the limit we were give but I already cut out Combat Class, a scene about Sapphire's family in the new world, Oswald and Merlin of the new world questioning if Sapphire has the right to restore her world and a massive fight with the First Grimm. I can't cut it down anymore without damaging the story.

"Hey what's this?" *Pulls lever*

'Welcome to Duloc what a perfect town, now we have some rules let us lay them down.'

"Whoa, let's do it again."
"And you," he said, leveling a finger at her, "will see me in my laboratory as soon as possible. Those lackwits who grafted Shattertech onto you may have had plenty of toys, but they don't know the first thing about halfling anatomy. They've completely failed to account for your kind's atrophied serratus posterior superior muscle, which I would wager is why you feel incredible pain whenever you utilize those impressive wings of yours, correct? Yes, yes, and of course I'll need to examine whatever lamentable hatchet job they performed on your obturator nerve. Or in terms even you can understand" -- and here he paused to puff out his chest -- "I need to see where your fleshy bits meet your non-fleshy bits."
BartlebyWhale


Firstly, man that guy's a dough.

Secondly the stuff about the serratus posterior superior muscle makes sense in context but isn't the obturator nerve in your hip and descending down you thigh?
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