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The Elder Scrolls: Oblivion - Crimson Skies

@Lucius Cypher

Okay, myself and @Leos Klien have given your CS a good read. It definitely looks promising, but there are several issues, mainly with his backstory and race.

Firstly, a child's race is decided by his maternal genes, not his paternal. Father's don't really matter, biologically - in the Elder Scrolls Universe, a child will take after their Mother, and the father will be lucky to pass along some characteristics, especially when mixing Men and Mer species. Your character would be an Imperial with an Imperial Mother. However, even if you were to swap the species of his parents, he wouldn't look as you've described. Half-Breeds aren't really a thing in the Elder Scrolls Universe, because again, a lot of what the Father gives is lost (unless it's something like a brunette Nord giving his child his hair colour while his Nord wife is blond). For example, the Gray Prince: Agronak gro-Malog. He looks like a regular Orc, beyond his paler skin - which is a result of his father's vampiric nature, not his human race. So this will need to be changed, as with his appearance; I'm not against making a runt of an Orsimer, as they likely do exist - he'd have all other characteristics of his race though, and certainly wouldn't be confused as anything else.

However, if you are making a runty Orc, 6'3" is a typically large height for an Orc. He'd have to be much shorter to be considered lesser or weaker by other's of his race.

Secondly, a lot of his backstory hinges on his Mother. His stronghold is massacred and he rescued because of his mother, staying in Cloud Ruler Temple because of his mother being a Blade, getting out of a jail sentence because of his mother. The problem there is that his Mother's backstory doesn't work out. Being in service to the Blades is generally a non-retiring job - you stay till you can't fight, whether that's brought with old age, or more likely, death. It stands to reason that one of their number wouldn't be permitted to leave, get married, have a kid, and then be allowed a safe haven when shit hits the fan. If she was in the Blades once, and then fell so madly in love that she left, then that's fine. But she wouldn't be welcomed back. An explanation of why she was at the Stronghold in the first place would be nice too.

Thirdly, his acceptance into the Arcane University. I can tell you right now he wouldn't be admitted, regardless of "Imperial Recommendations". The Guild of Mages is a completely separate entity from the government and guards, and they will not allow anyone inside the University only they have recommendations from each Guild; the purpose of each Recommendation is to prove the individual has an expert grasp of each school of magic, which is necessary for acceptance; they definitely wouldn't take a complete novice either.

Fourthly, the last sentence. "So he went on an adventure." A very vague statement, especially in regards to how he will meet up with our group. Why is he on the road to Kvatch? Surely he had some place in mind to find more research on Levitation magic? On that note, we have found a problem with Levitation magic; no scroll. It's too convenient for his mother to just happen to have one handy, and it would be incredibly foolish of her to give it to him in the very place it was made illegal. Even when you fix his backstory to not including the Arcane University, it's still too convenient. So no Scroll of Levitation. And add something on the end to say how and why he happened across our group coming out of the gate.

Okay, so that's all for the backstory. There are just a few other things to add or change.

• 'Tis spelled "Atronach", for your Birthsign.
• He's missing a Class name. Feel free to take one from the game or make up your own; the pre-made name does not have to align with the skills attached to it from the game.
• About skills: He's able to have much more than that. Also, for someone who spent 7 years with the Imperial Legion, I'd expect to see some skill with weapons, not just archery. As he has a blade, he'll need One-Handed Blade as a skill, or he'll just be ridiculously clumsy with it. They get pretty decent weapons education in the Legion, So he'll have more skills. Stuff like athletics, acrobatics, blunt, you know, round him out to what a guard would be.
• You've also listed a Destruction spell in his spells section, but it isn't listed as a skill. Please correct this.
• Self-Immolation, Fenrick's Doorjam, Tinur's Hoptoad, Slowfall and Fire Shield do not appear as usable spells in Oblivion. As we are using only spells used in that specific time, they need to be removed.
• Your Crossbow: Where did you get it? They're not common, especially not in Cyrodiil. Especially ones "improved" as this one has. It also wouldn't be cheap if one showed up on the market either.
• Another point about your crossbow: "Can be fired one-handed" and "better penetration power" should not be in the same sentence together. If your crossbow is a regular one, then shooting it one-handed will turn any Master Marksman into a novice in terms of aiming. You cannot aim such a heavy, complicated piece of weaponry effectively with one hand - nor would you be able to reload it with one hand. On the other hand, if this crossbow has been made to be much lighter, and therefore, easier to aim with just one hand, then it certainly would lose a large amount of power and not have better penetration power.
• An amulet enchanted with "Muffling". I can't see any follower of Malacath having this particular enchantment. Being silent and sneaky would be cowardice in Malacath's eyes, so his followers would avoid such enchantments. Either change the enchantment to something believable, or remove it.

The Elder Scrolls: Oblivion - Crimson Skies

I too am open for collabs, for either of my characters.

Also, you guys are lucky the threat was cabbages. Next time it'll be marrows. *shudder*

The Elder Scrolls: Fruits of Contention - Chapter 1 (Completed)

Huzzah! Now Rhasha won't feel bad and probably have a crisis of faith. Saving Daelin it is!

The Real World: Welcome to Miami

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A smile couldn't help but to grow on Garrett's face as the smell of bacon hit him. Goddamn, the pig was a wondrous beast. Every part of it tasted good - but rather than delve into some strange or unusual part of swine, Garrett was making do with some smoked back bacon; specially bought because he couldn't stomach the shitty belly fat the yank's considered to make a decent breakfast. Well, he could stomach it - but not when creating the basic, yet perfect bacon sarnie.

As the rashers of bacon popped and sizzled in the frying pan, Garrett took some eggs out of the fridge in case anyone else was in the mood for a good old unhealthy fry-up. If they were vegetarian... well, that's why God invented cereal. Turning now to the bread, Garrett swayed to the music blaring from his tinny, cheap speakers; Daft Punk were great. He could enjoy their music, and this specific song didn't have much in the way of lyrics for him to butcher. Not that he minded his terrible singing voice, but the others might... still, his wailing could make for some entertainment around here. Other than drinking nights, this place had been deader than that Amish village he visited once. Not one fight, fling or fuck-up from the people in the house. If he were more of a dick he'd try to start some trouble, but honestly, he didn't care enough to do so. Caleb might.

Hearing more people stirring throughout the house; voices filtering in from the living area, Garrett began taking plates out; only just catching his bacon in time to flip it over before burning it to buggery. Wincing as the spitting fat hit his bare skin, Garrett glanced up as one of the girls entered the kitchen, electing to eat... Cheerios. What a sad day for her taste buds.

"Morning." Was all he offered up, not expecting much in the way of conversation from Evelyn - however, he wasn't going to ignore her, despite her boring-ness around the house and despicable breakfast choices. With all pork products now cooked and smelling fine, Garrett threw a couple of rashers on buttered and ketchup-ed bread before cracking a few eggs into the still spitting pan, fat hitting his bare skin again. Garrett did notice Evelyn was dressed, which he considered an odd thing to do this early in the morning when not leaving the house. He looked like he'd just rolled out of bed (Which he had, right before starting on breakfast); rumpled hair, pyjama bottoms, and a bare chest sporting nothing but a tea-towel thrown over his shoulder.

"I've got bacon and eggs here guys, come and get it before we run out!" After hearing more people come downstairs, Garrett hollered into the living room, turning off the gas when the eggs were done and leaving them and the bacon to whoever got there first; not before taking a couple for himself. He was just glad the frying pans were big enough to accommodate for his appetite... and other people too, he guessed.

Taking a seat in the kitchen while he devoured his several sandwiches, Garrett hoped that something was actually happening today. Either the Producers were sitting with their thumbs up their asses, or half of the house was made to do boring shit while the others did something outrageous to get the viewings in. Maybe if he complained in the Confessional room for long enough they'd arrange a home invasion or fire or something.

The Elder Scrolls: Oblivion - Crimson Skies

@Lucius Cypher

We've got room for anything as long as it's up to standard! But an Orc would be cool if you want to make one, as there isn't one in the group as of yet.

The Real World: Welcome to Miami

@HushedWhispers

By the way, Addison and Garrett haven't been added to the housemate list yet in the IC. Also, Garrett's not on the RS sheet either - just letting you know! (:

The Real World: Welcome to Miami

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Mass Effect: Underworld

@MrDidact@BlackSam3091

I actually went for Sentinel first because I thought there was a lack of Biotics - being an Infiltrator will work much better for my character, I think.

Mass Effect: Underworld

My character in the works is a Sentinel, but will rely more on tech and weaponry than her Biotics. I could change her to Infiltrator, if the GM's would prefer?

Mass Effect: Underworld

Goddamn, I'm offline for five minutes and this place has already blown up.

I won't be able to get a character out now as it's quite late and I need to sleep. I'm going to reserve a spot, but it was my understanding that this would be audition based, not first come first served?

@BlackSam3091