Orior

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@BCTheEntity Bwah. Please don't think im a giant bitch. >< Im really not trying to be. :[

:| To be honest, he is more over powered. To the point I kinda want to ask if youre trolling me. :/ You have two abilities which are claimed to kill people instantly; that's OP. I feel the need to say that no matter what your character is doing, they will not be a master. I edited the OP to say that our characters will be weak; I know this happened after you applied, but I did make you aware of that.

If you use mana, it is a magic style (that's what magic is in this setting; using mana), no matter how little; so the style you describe is both a fighting and magic style, which is fine, it just increases the cost.

I would like you to look at my character's spells. He can't really do much, and he's supposed to be the most powerful person in the party. These abilities are cool and adaquet for a monk of considerable power, so its not like youre off base or anything, its just... your character isn't a bad ass. :/ ( Kragen isn't either, even though he makes himself out to be in his story and has renown, his character is still powered fine, and ripe for an ass beating by monster~.) Your abilities imply that he is a master of his art; to do so, you'd need to put more SP into it. 1 SP just buys you the style; how could he have all these techniques and be a beginner in the skill? That's the point of the SP system, for me.

The ability you mentioned has some interesting points. Where does the 30% number come from? The fact that it affects three things, speed, strength, and damage resistance and it costs 3 SP is good; however, it is the scale at which you are trying to use 1 SP that I'm having issue with. Tripling your strength for a time for 1 SP, sure, but being able to do it instantly and passively is not ok for that cost. I think some of the problem might be because you're going from an anime character... which, tend to be... grandiose, with their fighting ability. >>

@KimiyosisEach upgrade is 1 SP.

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@WulfgarShot you a PM

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@Baconator Thanks for letting me know! That's fine.

@Kimiyosis Your character will start with 6 SP (its in one of the paragraphs in that section somewherez).

@WulfgarHmm, I'm at work right now so I can't really go over this with you right now but; you get free things depending on your class. If you're a mage, which I believe you are, you get a magic style and a spell for free. When did you copy the CS? I've recently changed it to explain some things, like last night recently.

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@Kimiyosis
I'd imagine that would be a struggle your character will face; it's used to being nomadic and not needing supplies, but now it can't forage enough to do so, it would have to adapt. Your character might just not travel for extended distances in their animal for, or maybe youll find an unconventional way to carry things around as her animal form.
@WulfgarAsk any questions you need!

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@Inertia Thanks for letting me know!

@BCTheEntity Ah, ok. That sounds interesting; cant wait for the finished product.

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@Baconator Hell yeah. Rad.

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@WeepingLiberty Stockholm syndrome at its very finest. <3

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@Baconator
WOO! IS HE SOMEWHAT INSPIRED BY PWENT!?!!?
I really the beginnings of this! The only current issue I have is your weapons. Yes, you get two for free, so that's fine, they are just too powerful to be bought with 1 SP. Also, the one named "Durin;" if it couold only be dismantled by a god, it is godly in power, and i cant allow that. Not saying you cant upgrade it to be unbreakable, it would just take more than 1 SP. You used the SP system just fine expect for that, though. Maybe just tone the weapons done and then its golden.

@BCTheEntity I like the start of the character, I just don't understand how/why there would only be two practitioners of a martial art. Maybe elaborate on it some more? But it sounds cool.
Yeah, they whored him out to hell and back. :/

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I was thinking that the tracking might be a bit too OP too.
Alright, I'll fix it up, but for the next 24 hours I won't be able to be active here, so expect it to be ready in like 26 hours.

@AllIsOne

Awesome, thank you~! Just because you mentioned it, I'm working tonight and tomorrow, so I'll only be on sporadically as well.

@Orior
I'll go over points as I come to them.
Formatting: I was not aware that there was a set character sheet at all. I didn't see any links or anything to it, so... that'd be my fault, I suppose. I can modify him to fit that character sheet, if you could make the link and/or the sheet itself more obviously present apparently you already did that, so we'll see how that works out.
OPness: Yeah, that one's my bad. To be honest, I'm somewhat used to playing in settings where versatility doesn't directly correspond to power, and I guess I got carried away. That being said, if you could recommend suitable replacement spells for those, I would greatly appreciate it.
Character development: To be fair, how a character develops can have nothing to do with how strong they are. For instance, Superman's story is for all intents and purposes one of character development, with any strength enhancement being incidental to this. Then again, a great many people despise Superman for how powerful he is at all, so who am I to judge? But again, I'd greatly appreciate it if you could recommend suitable replacements for those spells, and I'll most likely modify Voel's biography to match. Then again, I could just go straight in on that Kenshiro idea...
Semantic issues: I'd like to know what these are. I'd rather get rid of them sooner rather than later, and I'm sure future signees would appreciate the fixes too.

EDIT: In fact, screw it, I'm going all-in on this Kenshirexpy idea. I evidently don't expect him to ever develop ludicrous insta-kill moves of that sort, but all things considered, I think I'm close enough to that sort of character anyway that a slight change won't be too difficult.

@BCTheEntity

You aren't the only one to wonder where the CS is, so I'm going to make the link more noticeable in the OP.
I can give you some replacements no problem, and I'll make them work as best I can to your back story, give you a couple different to choose from and PM you.
I HATE superman for that exact reason - development is in no means based on the physical aspect, but what's the point and where's the fun of playing someone who can't be challenged? I've also never really seen much development of superman at all, but I haven't read all the comics so I digress. That was why I was kinda apoloegtic when I said it, because I didn't make it clear in the OP so that was my fault.
The semantics weren't important and I fixed them in OP; it was really just that a magic style is supposed to be an explanation, but I hadn't even included it before in the CS.

...I-Is that the same as that Guts guy, or is he different? I was going to try and not have to make you change your background, although by all means you can.

Oh ok! Hold on, reviewing the last two CSes.

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They could collab a duel post, it might be faster that way.