Here is one. You mention this will have some sort of implants and stuff. Reading your post you seem to have an idea of the stuff you want us to have/not have and the general level of them. So like anything more you can say about that?
Ah, you write never as newer. It took me a moment to realise it.
Why have you decided to do that?
And the italics for talking, is that a style choice? Usually people use italics for thoughts, so it took me a bit to get used to the curisive sentences being spoken words.
Overall though, I like this story. It's mysterious.
Maybe this is just me being a stickler for details, but how did she learn the kaio-ken? Did this hermit teacher know King Kai?
I should probably mention that Ovaan can't sense Ki. I mean... why would he? It's not exactly something the Freeza Force was known for. So uh... that's gonna be a thing we'll have to deal with early on. xD
Yeah I was starting to notice that. Everyone thirsty for super saiyan ladies. They are beauty, they are grace, they will melt your fucking face.
Can't wait for the shoe shopping arc.