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You think that last part of my post was filler. BUT WOE TO THE MAN OR WOMAN WHO THINKS SUCH A DECREPIT THOUGHT. D:< (ignore the misuse of decrepit in that sentence) It's actually kind of important to Erskine's character, at the moment. ;-; And it's a shameless plug for his powers.


Everything goes by uneventful when there's a sour taste in your mouth. From the end of the plane ride to getting in the helicopter, Erskine paid no mind to the environment surrounding him. Things happened and he busied himself with his own mind and that awful taste—a biting iron, like he bit too hard on his tongue. The man who'd chauffeured him, alone of all things, kept to himself for most of the trip. A few things had been uttered, but they verged on simple requests and questions he could answer with a movement of his head. The helicopter drained everything else out and Erskine was left with the subtle waves of the ocean below.

Upon landing, Erskine took one step down the terrace to look back. The thought of going home felt bland on his tongue; a fleeting thought to entertain, though nothing more. And Erskine continued down with his bag clinking along the stone steps of the mansion's tiny hangar. It didn't take long to get settled within, having been escorted until the man gave a quiet nod and flourished a hand toward many of the seats for him to take his place upon. Ignoring the sets of eyes and the faces that came with, Erskine situated himself the furthest from anyone, not having it in him to converse with whoever had already arrived. Waiting was easy, but talking after everything that happened seemed monumental. Everyone lost someone, to whatever came and went—everyone in that particular room no longer had a family to go to, but what they'd lost in comparison, didn't seem much comparatively. But, Erskine never pretended to know what went on in other people's heads when he had far too much concern himself over with his own.

The usually brash individual fell into the soft cushions of the couch with his eyes closed and his body radiating a warmth to combat the AC flowing through the likely pristine air. They never quite did open until the dramatic arrival of their host and would be mentor, or whatever he liked to call himself. A jolt ran through him at the start of another joining their group. In his slumber a few more had arrived and settled in with the others, having taken the hint and straying away from the slumbering Erskine. The sun filtered in from the bay windows, setting beneath the Caribbean water in a spectacular display. It felt weird that this man barged in as he did, now speaking a mile a minute, having caught the attention with such grandeur in his show.

Having missed half of the speech, it took awhile for Erskine to fully catch the gist of the man's message. Likely that he'd been straddled to a circus show like this, however, Erskine couldn't find it in himself to complain. Circus show or not, this literally was his last resort, having nothing to go back to in the U.S. aside from staring down the length of a barrel or waking to a circle of scientists. Of course, if circumstances were better, he'd have been more than willing to join a Kick-Ass recreation, sans Jim Carrey, just for the fact that the idea behind it was exhilarating. Unfortunately, the situation seemed far more dire than anyone in here truly knew, excluding the man who'd just given them a corralling bout of Deus Ex Machina.

After his exit, Erskine took a quick collection of the bodies within the room, frowning at the mention of powers. In a better mood, he'd jump at the offer. Unfortunately, circumstances hadn't favored Erskine and he wasn't about to share much of himself until things looked brighter than what he'd just left in Chicago. Speaking of which: Erskine scooted forward to rummage through his luggage in order to extract a packet of seeds from. Taking a plastic baggy from within one of the front pockets of the suitcase, Erskine made the walk outside in order to gather what dirt he could find within the mansion's own front gardens. Afterward, Erskine found his seat once more, still slightly secluded from the others, to examine the items he'd retrieved.

From the look of it, the bag of seeds looked like a motley crew of random plants—a pot luck of randomness. Picking one might yield a surprising turn out or an epic failure. However, Erskine could tell anyone who asked what seed was what, from the shrubs to flowers to trees. It didn't seem like much to Erskine, though the man appreciated the thought of getting what he bargained for. And, like people, there was always a plant with a personality for the occasion. This one, however, he'd let fate deal with.

Parsing through the bag with his eyes closed, Erskine let all but one seed filter through his fingers and stuffed that one inside the baggie of dirt he'd acquired. With a deep breath, Erskine cupped the bag in his hands and watched quiet as one could in his situation—awfully quiet, actually. Burrowed deep within the bag, the seed took root, spreading through the dirt in a pace hundreds of times quicker than normal. Finding the walls of the bag, the seed burst from its husk to sprout the wiry frame of a flower. A pair of fans cupped the bottom of the bulbous flower blooming at the top, a deep purple that faded into a light lavender and eventually white the deeper inside one delved.

And all Erskine could do was frown, as quiet as he ever was, at the iris in his hands.
I'll try and get a post up soon! :o Been busier than I thought I'd be
I don't like constantly dropping a name. But I am not used to working with two characters in the same setting. I know my English teacher would have a fit reading something like that.


A good rule of thumb that I like to use: a pronoun should almost always refer to the subject of the sentence or refer to the most recent character named in the current sentence or sentence prior. Sometimes that requires me to drop a name multiple times throughout the paragraph, but it's usually never more than once per sentence. I use this especially when concerning more than one character. If not, it depends on how I feel.

I'm also talking about the pronoun 'it' when referring to an object. That one can be particularly tricky if you don't clarify what it is you're talking about.
@t2wave I'm not saying don't write! Learning how to write takes a ton of practice, and reading. Please don't feel like I'm saying it was awful, it wasn't. The post was just a bit hard to tell who was being the POV character when. I think the line breaks, or shoot do a collab with me, and I can show you some tricks that I've learned.

When you write a post in one POV it helps to be in an editor of some sort, be it titanpad or a Google document, even if you have to do it back and forth in PMs it can be cleaned up to be in one POV rather than switching. That way you can work out how the whole post fits together with your partner. I normally just give stage directions on what my character is doing, and then let the person who is writing the POV character edit it to be from their character's POV. It doesn't always work, sometimes it looks bad, like in our last post "eyes lit up" sounds awkward and forced, and that's because I wrote that. It isn't in McHaggis' voice so it's clunky.

Believe me working with tight POV is hard, professional writers spend an unbelievable amount of time and energy trying to get it to work right.


I did a lot of collabs with a good friend of mine and he'd always control his character through my character's PoV. It helped tremendously with figuring out what was happening.

It also helps to use name in place of pronouns a lot of the time. Especially when refering to someone for the first time in a paragraph. I find it easier to do so every sentence, so people know who I'm talking about and if there's enough distance within the the sentence, then I might use the name twice if it makes sense. I, however, have no idea if I'm making sense right now.
Emily, the living Torchwood/Doctor Who reference.

And omg a HGTTG reference.
@Sixsmith I was so happy you picked that photo! I too am a New Girl fan and am particularly fond of Schmidt :P


<3 I adore Schmidt, so much. He can be an asshole you just can't wait to punch sometimes, but in the end, there's just no denying that he's so goddamn lovable. Dammit, Schmidt. D:<




Done and done <3


These are all so lovely. D; Why do you do this? WHAT DO YOU GAIN?!

MY SOUL?!

Thank you, regardless. Lewl.


I'm sorry, I couldn't resist. I adore New Girl and I happened upon the picture I used for Wolf and I had to take a moment to debate whether or not I really wanted it that badly.

And then I thought, "Well, the style gives off that perfect flair I envisioned for Wolf Ezra and the opportunity is just staring me in the face." I continued that pro/con argument with myself for about an hour or two.

As you can see, I CAVED.

Don't judge me because I'm so weak willed. ;-;

@ArenaSnow

Sorry, it didn't seem to ping an notification for me.

I don't mind either way. If you'd prefer I edit it a bit to allow for maybe Benvolio to be a second cousin to Romeo, rather than a first, and have Cecilio be Lord Montague's cousin instead?

Again, any way is fine with me.


"Four cops dead and ten seriously injured in terrorist attack on Chicago's very own Water Tower Place along the Magnificent Michigan Avenue. Reports coming in saying that no civilians were harmed in the various explosions that rocked the fourth floor of the building. How this middle aged woman went unhindered through security is still being investigated. Many allegations and evidence found at the blast sight point to religious extremism as the culprits M.O. The name of said individual is currently being disclosed by local authorities."

A camera, likely situated upon a roaming news copter, panned in to Chicago streets to identify the billow of black smoke rising from the blown out windows of the fourth floor. The damage itself looked to be collateral, more of a controlled blast than one likely to cause mass devastation. It was a statement—a calling out.

It was martyrdom at its finest.

The sudden cut to Michigan Avenue's closed off streets felt jarring and panicked, a look shared by the man currently staring the microphone directed just below him down. Something caught his attention and his head jerked upward. He swallowed and nodded, leaning forward to shield the mic from the wind. The reporter shuffled in closer, the camera catching her frustration clean. Her lips moved as she repeated the question, though the microphone inched further away from her. A nod was all he gave.

"She yelled something in some kind of language," he said, refusing to look the camera in the eye, "I couldn't understand it; it was weird, guttural. And then she just... exploded in this white light."

With the microphone lifted, the reporter spoke clearer, "Did you see any explosives on her? Was she wearing some kind of vest or—"

"No, she was in a business suit. Tight pantsuits and fitted jacket. An explosion like that, that close, it just... vaporized her and the four men around her. It was loud but it wasn't—it only reached so far," the man explained, rubbing his eyes in confusion, "One moment she was shouting and the next there was this loud bang. Then she and anyone close enough just—they were just eradicated. It was controlled, though. You can see the circle in there. Anyone standing close enough to feel the heat got severely burned, but nothing fatal. If they weren't standing in that circle, they weren't killed. Everything else was just charred. A lot of smoke. A lot of black soot. A lot of second degree burns. What kind of C-4 does that?"

"I'm sorry, we're gonna have to cut to—"

"Thank you Jane. We just got a report coming in that it was in fact a pack of C-4 strapped to her person. Apparently out of the many on there, only one functioned, which would explain why it'd been so small—"


Quiet as it came, the sound from the speakers fizzed out and the TV snapped shut. A rough growl ripped from Erskine's throat that came prior to the sudden flinging of the remote against the nearest wall. Common occurrence for Erskine Hyde after a bout of frustration. Many people often find themselves at an impasse in situations akin to Erskine's and usually, they quit after the inevitable failures that follow the years of searching. If anything but the powers he had had been inherited from his mother, it was the indomitable stubbornness that ached through the genes of every Hyde and McCullough that roamed the streets of Cairndow, Scotland.

On cue, his current adoptive mother knocked her way inside the small room, bathing the dark in the fluorescent light of the hallway. The room itself smelled of fresh cut grass and daffodils, with potted plants lining the many shelves along the walls. Erskine hadn't garnered much in terms of knick-knacks, unless people called plants mementos. Just above his twin sized bed lay only one track and field trophy, tangled in vines and the thorns of a tiny rose bush. Of course, having all these plants, Erskine had claimed the room with the most windows his and his parents lovingly obliged. Not many people could boast a well teemed garden in their own bedroom. Erskine prided himself in claiming such a title.

"Running through these video tapes one after another won't get you anywhere," Jin Hao mumbled, bending low to pick up the pieces of the remote, "Your mother didn't die for you to just sit watching people explain the sham of her death on repeat."

Shuffling himself up, Erskine furrowed his brows and shot his adoptive mother a frown. "I'm just a kid," his accent fell heavy with sleep whilst he talked and Erskine couldn't resist the yawn that broke a pause in his words, "What else can I do. There must have been some reason she died for this. For what?"

"Well, you aren't going to find that—" the ringing of their apartment buzzer caught Jin off guard and she paused to look through the bedroom doorway. Putting a hand on Erskine's lap to stop him from standing, Jin shuffled from her spot down the apartment's hall. Erskine remained, a frown still stretching his lips; he listened, though, keen and quiet in the creaking of their modern home.

"He's not home," her voice echoed through the kitchen and funneled down to the various rooms that littered their halls "I can leave a message if—no? Yes, I worked with him on the project. I... I don't know what you're talking about. We were being watched 24/7, there's no way either of us could have tampered with the results. I know what you're insinuating, and I will not have that kind of accusation flung at me with baseless evidence."

Silence followed the pause that hung through the white walls of their home. Erskine frowned, listening closely to the padded footsteps of his mother's bare feet. "No, you may not come in. Stay there, I'll gather my things and leave our lawyer a message," her voice grew louder as she paced down the hall. Erskine didn't quite expect the suddenness of her arrival and was even more surprised by the panic stricken in her porcelain features. The silence that hung between them only acted as an irritant to Erskine's own rising panic. Her hand flow to her mouth, pressing her lips to the palm of her hand to stop the sting of tears that threatened to fall. She immediately pointed to the closet door and pressed herself against the door frame. Erskine obliged, pulling out things from within until she nodded erratically at the suitcase.

"I need you to pack quietly. We aren't... we aren't going anywhere yet. I just need you to promise me now that you'll be quiet. As for as we know, I am the only person currently here," she motioned with her hands as she spoke, backing herself into the hallway again, "Please, just stay put. We'll figure this out when your father gets home."

The moment Jin closed the door, Erskine's head snapped to the pile of videos on his desk and the unfolded letter sitting in the trashcan along with the ticket and envelope. No time to spare for clarity and thorough planning, Erskine grabbed all the clothes he could and whatever he deemed necessary for the stay and stuffed them haphazardly into the suitcase. With the ticket and letter in his mouth, Erskine flung open the window directly connected to the fire escape facing the alleyway. Halfway out, a thud caught his attention and Erskine's head whipped up to the door. A grunt followed after and then the loud ring of gunshot snapped him backward to collide with the railing, his hand immediately grasping the bar for leverage.

It took everything in his power to choke the sob and tears down, in order to regain his calm. It took even more to slam the window shut and rush his way down the steps until he could unlatch the ladder that lead all the way down. Five hours to get from where he was situated all the way to Chicago's O'Hare.

'...do not look back.'

Those words burned with the letter.




An hour to spare—his new parents always appreciated punctuality. His thumb lay perfectly over the call button directly to his father's cellphone. That was dumb, though. Something as sentimental would get him killed. Regardless, he was likely long gone and now they had their adopted son on the hit list. He just couldn't help thinking this had to do with the blood samples. Both of the Hao's seemed extremely jittery at having acquired the job as specialists for hire. They seemed almost panicked when he'd come home to tell them about it, as well.

The letter just proved that point further. Erskine just didn't realize what they'd done in an attempt to protect the only thing they thought worth living for. Well, now they could die for it.

Furrowing his brow, Erskine shoved the phone back in his pocket and bit back another threat of tears. He succeeded the numerous times it occurred within the hour and all the way until the 'fasten seat-belt' sign clicked off. And then he let it out in quiet sobs inside the airplane lavatory heading all the way down to Haiti. These thing shouldn't happen to children.

But what was he kidding himself for? He'd lost the chance at being a child the moment his biological mother declared herself a martyr for all superhuman kind. He couldn't resent that. She was making a statement in hopes that maybe her child would follow suit in a less self-sacrificial way. Or maybe to keep him from it all—wipe out the entire line of superpowered Hydes. Who knew. Erskine Hao, Erskine Hyde, it was all the same to the government.

And maybe vomiting his guts after crying himself dry would help settle that undeniable fear in the pit of his stomach. Safe for now but security was just a fantasy.
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