Teknonick

Fourth Dimension

That is a pretty great example of how to write a bio! Oh Oh! Do me next, read me!

@Unraveller

So that means nothing? NOTHING!? Noooooooo! Fine, don't write your app. :(. *Searches for Ban-Hammer* Oh wait, Lavul had it last. I'm going to go get it from him real quick.... *Skips to the other RP*

Fourth Dimension

I put little white lies over at the other forums. You should be able to tell them apart though. You're eyes are going to melt for just about 20 minutes then until I get back.

@RawrgnatheBloodfridge

WHAT!? YOU DID!? Oh sheesh. I hope I've already picked them out when you posted them. Darnit.

Fourth Dimension

Tek, you haven't ever seen the advanced section of the website then. I'm still stuck in school with my phone. Once I get back home though, expect my life's story told. No lies no holds barred.

@RawrgnatheBloodfridge

Well yeah, duh. I'm pretty sure they write 10x what I just wrote. Which is why I'll never go there because it's too much. As for the lies... you can't trick me! I already know part of your life from elsewhere, so if they conflict... I will know.... *Glues eyes to screen until bio appears*

Yes, I am confused.

@Unraveller

I wonder what your app will be like. BTW, your picture is somewhat similar to what I look like as well. No as much facial hair though. And my hair is much curlier, so it isn't as long. Though it would be if straightened.

Fourth Dimension

That is a pretty great example of how to write a bio! Oh Oh! Do me next, read me!

@Unraveller

Nice picture. WAIT, MATTHEW!? No, that's not you. Almost though, what the heck!? You... aren't wearing a wig, or had your face changed recently... did you? And you don't have a younger brother named Josh? If you do, wtf man! xD I confuse you. And I just realized... F-! My bio is another Jolion Bio. :P. I literally has made my character Jolion's Bio SO big, that I've had to separate it from everyone else's applications, because it's so massive it reaches the limit of the post. I'm surprised it all fits in one post as it is! Dear gods I'm nuts sometimes. I do NOT expect character apps to EVER be as big as mine! I get out of control sometimes.

Fourth Dimension

Oh wow, nice application! Where did you get the character idea from? Har har har! It's cool your entire family is into anime so much, it's always good to have something your whole family can relate to. (BTW, I'm not a Bronie, so... meh. xD. I don't hate 'em though! Just don't care for 'em. Tis all. Oh, and what's wrong with Barbie? Nah, I'm fine with that one. But, only if you make custom furniture out of toothpicks and stuff. Oh, and Schtroumpfs! This might be why they thought I was gay... oh well.) I can tell at the end you started to feel awkward, so you kind of cut it short, and started jumbling up your thoughts. Understandable, especially due to the content. You are fourteen, which is something I expected from your writing skills, knowledge, and general character biographies. Now, going into 'GM' mode, let's see how much of this I can pick out from an RP App Perspective. You left out your last name, and 4d power... but duh, for obvious reasons. Your Appearance is much better, though doesn't specify clothing. Again, understandable because real humans don't wear single outfits for their entire lives. I think your bio is much MUCH better than your characters, even though I think it might be smaller! It has actual content, and helps me connect with the character more, despite those things would be useless to mention in an RP scenario (EDIT: I meant in THIS RP scenario.) But, the way you wrote it, and the things you've mentioned has defined your character to a point I would say accepted. Of course, my OCD is acting up with the list in the middle of your bio (Though, it's better than one giant paragraph, as I see it has accidentally helped create two), and the overuse of smiley faces and tons and tons of periods. Plus, the very ending does actually get pretty jumbled up and hard to follow, but for reasons I earlier above are understandable. I think you may have learned a bit from this experiment, as well as I. Your app right there is your absolute limits, which means if that's not acceptable, your characters would never be. But, I believe it is acceptable in my eyes, which means you are capable of writing a character we will all enjoy and be fine with accepting! Here is my app below!

Nicky

Username: Teknonick | Character Name: Nicholas "Nicky" Connor Bragg | Character Age: 1/1/1996 (Midnight 100%!), 19 years old | Character Gender: Male Appearance: 5'10"-5'11" inches tall, at an unhealthy 100-110 pounds. I have naturally brown curly hair, which has been kept long and tangled for most of my life. It has been dyed black in the past, though it has faded since the last dye. My eyes are dark-hazel, changing to several dark colors, though they haven't always been. I have a small mustache growing in, like peach fuzz, and two or three hairs on my chin. I have dark spots on my face, though there are not a lot, and they are not very dark. My arms are slightly longer than usual, and my torso is slightly long as well. I have a sunken chest, which look's like someone punched my with a fist made of iron. I have absolutely no muscles to call my own. I'm of American heritage, with very pale skin. I tend to literally pull out whatever I feel is comfortable out of the drawers and my closet to wear. If I'm going out of the house, I might specifically pick jeans, and a good looking shirt. Fourth Dimensional Power: Um... I... don't have a 4d power... but I do have other powers. I probably shouldn't mention them though. I don't want to freak anyone out, ya know?

Bio:

Starting with my birth, I was a New Years Baby. I came out, literally on the stroke of midnight. On the exact second. Though, I was breach, because I decided during one of my mother's baths I wanted to flip myself upside down and get stuck. Yep, even before birth I was a very funny baby. It turned out, that since I was a breach birth, I wasn't 'technically' a New Years Baby, since they could have planned it. But the truth was, no one was even paying attention to the time, because of all the stress going on. It just happens a doctor turned and saw the seconds hand strike midnight, along with the others, at the exact time they pulled me out. Everyone cheered at first, until they found out another hospital claimed their baby (Several minutes AFTER me, AND they planned for a New Years Baby, but had no 'medical' help...) as the New Years Baby, and received thousands of dollars worth of baby stuff. I lived in Maryland, a State within the United States of America, for some of my early years. I was the second born, with an older brother born of another father. He was several years older than I... probably five, or six... I'm not exactly sure.... He had gone through school for a few years, but ended up being bullied. He was taken out of school, which is when my mom started to home school. When I started, I did all the simple stuff. Sit down, cut up magazines, glue them back together, and complain. My reward for completing the extremely hard work was to go and play with my older brother. My older brother played all sorts of games, mainly on the brand new Nintendo 64. I absolutely adored the game Zelda, but I couldn't play it due to my age. I had to convince my older brother to play the game for me, so I could watch and tell him what to do. "Hit that chicken! Now run! No, why did you let yourself get killed!?" it was fun. But, my older brother has his darker side. He's very manipulative, and would always want something in return. "I'll play Zelda... if you make me a sandwich first. Then, we will go down and I pick a sports game you don't like, but I do. Then, I might think about playing the game you want." was usually what would happen. Or possibly I play three games he likes, then I get one game I like. Or he would flip a coin to decide things... and he would not flip it if was his side, or flip it was my side. So, he always won in those situations. Despite my hatred for him always tricking me, I still loved playing him, and loved how he could 'just do stuff' that made no sense. "How can you click the buttons faster than once every second!? I can't even hold the controller!" We moved to Virginia in 2,000, a year that made it very easy for us to all remember. This is the house I live in now, which I didn't want to move to at first... but I have now come to love and adore! I was slightly older, though I was still doing similar homework. Those first few years after we moved was when my older brother would do the whole "I play one of our game, for three of mine" stuff, not so much before. Plus, this is when I started to learn how to use a computer! Though, we had a few rules in the house about them. I can't do anything on the internet without my older brother looking over me, which he was very good at. He didn't abuse that power, as I thought he might have. Also, I couldn't play any mature rated games (Except for blood and violence stuff. We don't care about that.) I also found out we could 'unlock' curse words with age! One you hit ten, you get ONE curse word which is pre-picked for you. At ten, you get hell. You can't abuse it though, and you can't say it around non-family/not-immediate-family. You also can't use it online either, or use it against people. At eleven, it's damn. Twelve is crap. Then, when you're thirteen you start to get two curse words! Once you're eighteen, you get the F word everyone knows about, as well as everything else in the book. But, you have to still use them maturely. I for one didn't like cursing. My older brother even tried to get me to say words I wasn't supposed to when no one else was around. Even though I knew he wouldn't tell on me, I just knew, I still didn't want to. Not because I would get in trouble, but because it was wrong. Mom and dad said so! Isn't that enough? Once my older brother turned eighteen, he moved out after using a few bad choice words around a certain important figure head. He claimed he was leaving anyway, and was going to stay with his biological father anyway. Since then, I've been maturing, and taking care of myself more. I still wasn't allowed on the internet for awhile... but eventually I did, as I was old enough, and pretty much had to since I couldn't have anyone watch over me anymore. Ever since then, I have matured greatly. I was a complete child back then, crying over everything, and being upset all the time, and getting grounded. I think I've only been grounded... at ABSOLUTE MAX three times since my brother has left. Before then I was grounded every other week or so... mainly because of the game issues. Before my brother moved out, I had a younger brother. He was so young... and annoying! But awesome. We loved him very much, and I just couldn't wait to be the better brother my older brother wasn't to me. As he got older, I didn't notice he was able to speak. Or suddenly playing games. Or at the point where he's actually on the internet on his own, and looking things up! I feel very proud of him, and have noticed the changes in him that he is experiencing differently than I had. I've figured out I am very good at reading people. In person, and through the internet even. I have thought about my entire life many times, and have thought of 'what if' scenarios thousands of times, figuring I would be better then... or worse then... but, in the end, I've decided what has happened throughout my life has made me a very kind and gentle person. Only recently have I become more aggressive and self sufficient. I do realize this, and actually get angry at myself for being the way I am. I've figured I am more angry (It's only slight. I'm just not as nice as I'd like to be. I'm more of a 75% than the 90% I used to be.) mainly because I'm more independent... as it is an outcome. If I'm 100% sweet and innocent, I simply wouldn't function at all. So, I've come to reason with myself it is a must in my personality to change as it has, otherwise I simply wouldn't survive in the world. In the last year or so, I have graduated home-school, through an official process which actually allows me to show it to people and say "HA! I'm not as dumb as I looked!" even though I didn't have to do a test for it. Hehe. Since I've graduated, I've had nothing but free time. That wasn't working out so well, so my parents decided I needed to either start working, or volunteer. I did neither. They noticed I loved playing a game called Garry's Mod, and specifically playing around with helicopters and airplanes, so they decided I liked airplanes! The truth is, I have an addiction with gaming, and I will never truly like anything as much as gaming and role playing... but, flying has turned out to be a close second! I've done pretty well... and proven I actually can do it. I've taken the tests and passed, I've started taking actual flight lessons outside of a classroom (In the air, as opposed to in a book), I've driven to the airport by myself... and now, I'm making actual pilot decisions. I check the weather on my own. I make flight plans to where we fly. I go through the checklist, and ensure we're safe for flight. I talk through the radios. I do all of that on my own, as is a huge milestone in my life, as I have never had do to anything like this before. It is still hard, and it is still draining... but, it works. I've almost finished with my first license, with my next step being to move on. My end goal is to become an airliner pilot. I've looked up something called "ATP" which is a 'school' for rapid teaching from either ground zero, or Private Pilot, to Airliner. They even give you a job when you graduate so you can build up hours, and gather income, until you can become an airliner! The problem is... it's EXTREMELY expensive, and my family isn't sure about it. It's still not decided whether I will go or not. At some point I'm still going to have to go to college, as almost no airliner will accept me otherwise, as it's a competition to prove who should be hired. On top of my recent achievements... is I've met someone. I'm an EXTREMELY awkward person, which has made it impossible for me to ask ANYONE out. My family has thought I as gay for a long time because of such issues. They don't care about that, actually, but they thought I was lying to them for all my life since I couldn't ever explain why I never asked any girls out. This person I've met was part of the same course I went through to get graduated, but was seeing someone else at the time. I kind of liked her during that point... and felt awkward around her, because I knew she had a boyfriend at that point. But, at some point, her boyfriend figured the two of them just didn't work. My mom and her mom ended up pushing me closer to her, because I was (As they thought) less awkward than her, and needed to help stand between her and her ex-boyfriend. She's actually diagnosed with being more awkward than me... but I've never seen it. I've always thought of her as being a much stronger person than I am. We ended up getting pushed together... until the point where I actually asked her out. We never called it being girlfriend and boyfriend... we just said "I really like hanging out with you." and left it at that. Though, in my mind, I'm sure it's more than that. As with my 'magical powers... OooOoOoOh' I believe she thinks the same thing as well. But, since we're both so awkward... neither of us has been able to ask it. It's moving slowly at the moment, which is how I like it. Sadly with my career in mind, I can't push much faster with our relationship, even if we wanted to. But, I don't want to just dump her and say "Sorry... but my career is too important. BYEO!" and then jump out the window and explode into a million tiny pieces. I can't just do that. But, if I ever feel like I'm not good for her for any reason, I will cut the relationship, simply because I want the best for her, and I can't be selfish to hold her to me and drag her down. I hope it doesn't ever come close to something like that, but it's a possibility.

Fourth Dimension

Alright! Since Ragna's doin' it, I'll do it. I can't be left out! I'm not sure how many character's I've had. I do remember I have a whole Taiyo family tree somewhere, but they've constantly evolved, and been used differently in many different RPs. Let's see... Minaki, Maosu, Old-Man, Lucario, Josia, Josive, Bironica, Leera, Naoto, Jolion, Kassy, Herobrine, Steve, Man-In-Book, Random-Leader-Dude, Liera, Aaron, Liera's Nemesis, Christopher, Eli, Chris/Eli's other Friend. Most of which I've put effort in, other's have slowly evolved over time... other's have disappeared and only remembered at this point. Other's don't even have apps, or haven't been talked about in public. So that's a total of 21 characters. At least 11 of them have actually been 'full characters' with apps. And 5 of them I've used more than 3 times. I tried to add them in order of when they were created... but... it might not be perfect. (Yes Ragna, Christopher is actually mine. :O!) Yay The One! Also, thanks for the heads up about Dragon.

Fairy Tail: This is Our Guild

BTW Slendy, I need to visit your clothing store. sounds like it was invented for me!

When we gonna start?

@Kitty

Hey, you! You joined one of my RPs on the Minecraft Forums, but never returned, didn't you? Or were you part of one of Lugia's RPs?

Fourth Dimension

Tek looks like he put a lot of time and work into doing all that, and the same with our characters and whatever plot he's got going on right now. Its a bit annoying when you put a lot of work into something, but no one else puts the effort in as well. Its like group projects in school. No one likes the kid that puts in the least amount of work and makes excuses all the time. Back when I had 5-6 RPs going on at a time, I quit for a while. I never really understood why, and now I do. I shoveled out characters haphazardly because I liked the idea of that RP. But once I got into them, I felt bored with my characters, because I put no work into them. When you really work on a character, you rp better, you enjoy rping more, and you appreciate your own and other peoples characters that much more

@RawrgnatheBloodfridge

*Nods* Oh yes, and that's another point. It doesn't look like they're very interested in the RP, or are going to stay when they show us apps like that. :( You remember on the HBRP, people will drop in apps, and disappear? That's happened in the past, even if they were accepted! They'd just drop in an app just to mess with us or whatever their evil plans were. Or they were so uninterested anymore that they forgot.

Fourth Dimension

Ok, one.

Hider

Username: The One Character Name: Shela Character Age: 6 Character Gender: Female Appearance:

Hider

Fourth Dimensional Power: Energy Bio and personality: Shela has not mastered her ability, not even close. In fact, she sees herself useless. She is always lonely, and tries not to bother others, as she thinks she will only get in the way. She has no self confidence in herself, and sees the bad side of things all the time. She has never had any friends, and she thinks she never will. Her only friend is her teddy. Although, truth is, she is actually very talented. She has a lot of potential if she actually tried, her only downside is her self confidence, She has never had confidence, she always wanted to be special, to help others, but every time she tried, she just got in the way, and she was pushed and shoved, nobody cared for her, so, why should she care for herself? She always wanted to be useful, but that dream went out the window. Now, she is hopeless, with nobody to trust, with nobody to cry to, with no friends to help her get back on her feet. She is, alone, but, one has to ask, what of her parents? Dead, gone. It was all her fault. Their house was broken into, her parents tried to deal with the threat, but, she was stupid, she stood behind her parents, watching as they defended her, it was all ok, until she rushed out to her mother's aid. That was when she was grabbed, and held hostage. Her parents were forced to lay down their weapons, and when they did, they were killed. Even today, Shela blames herself, for getting involved, getting in the way when she didn't need to. It is why she now never get's in the way of others, why she doesn't bother them, in case she makes it worse, in case things go unplanned, her parents died because of her.

@The One

Okay! Here is my personal pet peeve.... I set up a format, including |'s and specifically saying Bio, not 'and personality'. Just a minor thing. I'm diagnosed with OCD, so... that's mainly why. As for the bio, you still technically only have one paragraph, as you never separated the new addition from the old one. I'll give a pass on little detail about her past, since she is only 6, but I'm still expecting a little tiny bit more.

Two.

Hider

Username: The One Character Name: Mimi Character Age: 13 Character Gender: Female Appearance:

Hider

Fourth Dimensional Power: Sound Bio and Personality: Mimi is a full on child celeb, going on x factor to get fame, she sang to the world, putting on an amazing performance. Mimi is highly excitable, and she loves to make a song out of anything she can think of, especially when there is a crowd. She states the obvious all the time, and does whatever she can to cheer the mood up. Mimi wanted to be the best there was, wanting to sing and become famous, wanting everyone to know her name. That was her dream. To keep that dream alive, she constantly sang to every new person she met, just so they could hear what heaven sounds like. Her parents never supported her carrier, they always told her to give up her dreams, told her that she could not sing. but, she she didn't listen. She was determined to prove them wrong. She took every opportunity to sing and become popular. She took the stage, even if nobody was interested, and still struck the hearts of many with her heavenly voice. She was never interested in cool gear, cubes, or sound thingies never interested her. What she was interested in, was friends, popularity, beauty and care. She wanted to make, not only herself, but others popular. She wanted friends, she wanted everyone to love and praise her. That was the sole reason she went to the convention, to become popular, to make sure nobody was alone, to make sure everyone was beaming with energy.

@The One

Hell Mimi! I see you're now actually a female, that's good. Same thing with the whole formatting. My head starts to hurt because of my OCD... I'm sorry. She also doesn't have a lot of content in her bio, as it's mostly just explaining how awesome she is at singing and how much she just absolutely loves it. Then, with the new addition to the bio, suddenly starts talking about her parents. I'd like to know how did she get into singing, if her parents were against it? Didn't they try and stop her and simply say "No, you can't go. We are your parents, and don't give you permission"? If she did it against her parents wishes, as I think you said, I'd like to know how. Also, nothing in her application would tie her connection in with the convention. Why would she be interested in that? That doesn't have to be mentioned in the app, I'd just like to know a reason. Okay! I have a 'quest' I'd like you to do for me, if you're willing. It's not required, and I won't hold you to it if you don't feel like it, or feel uncomfortable, but I'd like you to try. I would like you to write a very specific character: You. Go grab the official format I posted, and try to fill in as many details about yourself as you're willing to release. If you don't want your name, or your age, or what you look like posted, just leave it blank. Don't fill in fake information, just instead don't put it there. This little test is so I can get to know you a little bit better... as right now, I'm having a hard time judging who you are. As I've explained recently, you can't help judging people. I'd like to make sure I can understand who you are, and through this test I will be able to better understand your problems with writing this. If it turns out you write your age is... say... 8... then, um, I'll know exactly why then. If you end up mentioning in your appearance that you're missing half of your fingers... yeah, that might be the reason. Plus, it's fun! If you don't want to do this, I perfectly understand! If you want, I would be more than willing to do it myself, and put up my own character up. (Keep in mind these characters aren't going in the RP, it's just a test.) Please no one quote her self-app if she makes one, unless she says you can. She might want to delete it after we've read it for privacy reasons, or simply not wanting a full auto-biography out there in the world. I'd also like to ask DragonKingUk to do the same please. As for your character, denied because of Unraveller's reasons. I'd like to point out a few things. Both of my characters, are 100% my own. Some backstory might be cliche, but that's unavoidable because there's several billion people on our world, and SOME parts are bound to mix up. Both of Ragna's characters are also his own. Not copied from anywhere but his own brain. Unraveller's is also, surprise, his own. As you've probably seen me say in the OOC, I think he may have been inspired by his avatar... but from the looks of it, it's probably generic. Plus, his character IS a cliche muscleman, with a few twists and turns that ends up putting him in a new category. What's important? It's not a character from some show. If we accept clones from shows and such, imagine this as a TV series... it would NEVER happen. "Oh wow, this RP looks so cool, I'd like to contact them and turn it into a series! Oh wait... most of those characters are clones from shows... we'd get in trouble if we did that... nevermind." and then what? :( Not that that would happen, just a "what if" stupid remark I made up. Plus, for all we know we might have people reading this RP, as opposed to attending it. It's happened before! All of my RPs have had stalkers in them that find it very interesting to read, like a book. When you add in characters from other shows, you forget what you're reading, and it's just not the same anymore... plus, it's cheating. As for Tyson, simply denied because he has no content other than a picture and a hawk. Please add more to him. I'd also like to throw out some statistics I just computed for the heck of it. I have posted 499 posts in 122 days. That's an average of 04.09+ per day. Unraveller has posted 144 posts in 5 days. That's an average of 28.80 per day! The One has posted 980 posts in 382 days. That's an average of 02.56+ per day. Dragon has posted 270 posts in 381 days. That's an average of 00.70+ per day. That's a hell of a lot of numbers there, but I'm sure it means something. Unraveller, how is that possible? Me, that's understandable. A lot of my posts have been OOC, and IC, so I think that's balanced. The One... you've got a ton of posts, but you've been here for over a year. Same with Dragon... except... for the posting part. We're looking for quality here, not quantity. I've always said I like lots of characters... but when it's a factory line, forget it. Especially when your characters have worse personalities than NPCs. By the way, Ragna and I are LITERALLY from an RP where we have given apps to our NPCs, and they're massive! Plus, they also all have statistics, and item lists, and tons of other stuff just to make it more complicated.

Fourth Dimension

Well, no flight today. Stupid weather. Where were we?