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The night before.
When they had to carry stone to the gate, under the order of Thorin...?

If you don't remember, then that's okay.
You can time-skip to the next day, where Bard does turn up.
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No, we don't need to skip it. I think I've found the scene on YT.
The scene you're referring to...was this the scene of the confrontation with Kili and Thorin? Because Thorin goes on to talk about adding stone to the gate.
Is this correct? If so, I can add on to my post, or merely add that in my next one.
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Not exactly, but please use that scene. It would be useful for an emotional arguement to come from Kili towards his delusional uncle. You can add this to your latest post.

Though I was expecting Kili to leave a kiss on her forehead, or cheek, before departing the room *shrugs* :)
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Works for me. :)

I was contemplating that, but I wasn't sure if you'd think it'd be too much. I can easily add that in when I edit my post, which I am working on when I get to my computer.
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It's not that much; it just proves the fact that his godmother is precious, or important, to him :)
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Is that it for your post? Or is there more?
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I cut it there in case you wanted to have someone overhear or intervene, but if not, I can add the rest of the dialog to complete the scene. I wasn't really sure how far you'd wanted me to go.
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No interferences, and no one will intervene :) This is between Kili and Thorin; an opportunity for Kili to work up the courage into talking to his uncle for Saeril :)

How about a "as soon as Kili saw the stone, and was told to do such an order, he expressed disbelief" kind-of scenario? The arguement takes its toll, when Thorin perhaps says something offensive about Saeril, maybe? This probably would make Kili snap, and Fili might step in to prevent further damage :)

You see where I'm going with this? :)
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Ooh, I like that. :) Ok, I'll add on to it right now.
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Thorin might may say things like "What has that she-elf put in your head?", or whatever ;)
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Alright, I've updated it. c:
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One more thing: the battle doesn't happen until later. What they see outside is the nearby desolated kingdom of Dale, that's now full of survivors from Laketown :) The reason Thorin wants the entrance walled up is to prevent trespassers from entering the mountain...and yes, to prevent them from leaving :)
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Ahh ok I was confused by that. I'll change that bit out when I get my laptop.
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Update: I've fixed it.
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There! At the end of your recent post, Dwalin would step in and tell Thorin that Bard was approaching the mountain :) A good moment of interruption and a good time for the brothers to wonder if she knew where the Arkenstone is.
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Want to add that?
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Sure thing. I am having trouble finding the scene so I'm not sure what dialog to put...? Unless you want me to make it up? x.x; Sorry, it's sort of difficult writing for this movie since I remember very little of it.
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No worries; happens to me too :) Allow me to find it for you. It should be here somewhere...
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After that scene, they will be preparing for war, which moves to the next scene. However, of course, Kili will be telling a now-awake Saeril that war is coming. Perhaps he may find a souvenir for her that may be useful, like battle wrist-gauntlets, or a special armor stashed away ;)


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Want me to post as Dwalin instead, as he interferes upon the scene? I just remembered that I normally play as him in the story; not as an NPC :P

Also, I was either planning on having Saeril give the jewels to Thranduil after the big battle, or give them to the ElvenKing at the same time Bilbo gave him and Bard the Arkenstone. I won't show how or when she retrieved them, but we would have to figure that she was clever to take them for a good reason :)
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Ah! Thank you for that. Wow...I'd completely forgotten about both those scenes. Pretty crazy...poor Dwalin.

If you'd like to, that'd be awesome. :) Also, I like that idea. I suppose either way would work, did you have a preference for when she hands them over?
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