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Night of the Marked






In the beginning, there was Day, and there was Night. The ancient men prospered under the light of the sun, and cowered beneath the pale moon. They dared not venture into the Night, for the darkness was fear and fear brought death. The creatures of the night hated the day, and mankind. They sought the blood of humans for their feasts, and dark rituals, and all manner of vile purposes. Under the pale moon they were stronger, faster, and more impervious. With their nightcraft they weaved terrible curses and alluring enchantments to ensnare their prey. Men could do naught but shudder in fear...

Until, during the Day, men found fire. Fire was light, and light was life, and hope, and courage. With fire men faced the Night, and drove it back. With fire men forged steel to do battle. And with steel men chopped wood and chiseled stone, to build great walls and keep the Night at bay.

Yet the pale moon rises, and the Night draws closer once more. They seek out their victims and place upon them a brand, a disgusting stigma upon the flesh. The Marked fear even their own shadows; for the dark forces flock to them no matter where they run.

But hope is not lost. If the Marked slays that which branded him, he will be free. Until the sun sets once more, and the Day begins to fade...










This RP is a Dark Low-Fantasy inspired by Berserk, the Souls franchise, and dark fairy tales. There are two principal ideas. First, how will players overcome supernatural odds without magic or other superhuman abilities? Secondly, what can players create when the story is up to them, rather than the GM? Every player in this RP will be Marked by the creatures of the Night. The players choose what marked them and why. Then it's up to the characters to deal with these monstrosities when they come to make good on their marks. I control the random creatures--those not involved with player backstories--attracted by the Mark, and work with players on the storylines to run things smoothly. As long as it's reasonable, fair, and most of all interesting, anyone can introduce plot threads.

Please post your Character Sheet Submission in this section. When it's approved you can move it to the Character tab. If you have any questions, feel free to ask! If you would like to add locations to the map, lore, or other things, just let me know and we can discuss it.


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Out of curiosity, what is the reward for defeating our monsters? Do we gain a power of what which we have overcome?
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Aaaaaye, are we allowed to post our CS straight to the CS tab, or shall we repost them here for further screening?
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Out of curiosity, what is the reward for defeating our monsters? Do we gain a power of what which we have overcome?


I honestly hadn't considered it. Given that one of the original concepts was seeing how players would overcome supernatural forces without any special powers of their own, and that players will probably either work together or at least cross paths with each other, I don't really think granting power-ups would work out--whoever defeated their enemy first would have an advantage that would make overcoming their next party member's obstacle easier, and in the end it would also undermine that concept.

If you have other ideas I'm certainly willing to hear them out, though, because I agree that having a reward of some sort might be worthwhile.
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Aaaaaye, are we allowed to post our CS straight to the CS tab, or shall we repost them here for further screening?


I've already seen yours in the Interest Check, and I noticed the changes you made earlier. You can go ahead and put him in the character section.
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Awesome. Also as for getting any prizes for defeating whoever marked you, I think the best prize would simply not being marked by a different nightkin (I'd assume that nightkins can't brand someone whose already marked). Very rare, but it can also serve as a status symbol here. Sort of like a sure sign of a real badass that he or she was able to survive and ultimately overcome whoever marked them. Of course that's assuming that Nightkin can't simply just mark more than one person, or would bother going after other, unmarked individuals for reasons likely only known to them.

But then again perhaps it's our lack of knowledge on these shadow creatures is what makes us so fearful of them. What we do "know" doesn't guarantee what would really happen. A succubus may very well prey on Malkai's friends instead of himself in order to make him forcefully confront the demon, or even distance himself and chose isolation. A vampire may be nothing more than a classy cannibal; sucking blood, weak to silver, none of that is real and it's just a romantic view of an otherwise brutal and cruel death. Perhaps the nightkin don't even truly exist, and it's all just a delusion built by our fear and paranoia in order to justify things beyond our understanding. A sort of spiritual satisfaction to the cruelties in our life.

At least that's how Malkai might justify it. In truth he's just too scared and uncertain to know if everything that's happening to him is something magical beyond his grasp, or perhaps it's actually just a warped reality justifying his incompetence. I'm sure everyone here is crazy enough to come to their own conclusions.
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I'll try to have a CS up tonight,if not definitely tomorrow.
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i am allowed to make up regions outside of the setting right? like a country my character would be from.
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can i have a half elf character? he wont be superhuman in anyway just for flavor text really.
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i am allowed to make up regions outside of the setting right? like a country my character would be from.


Yes, as long as it fits the same general theme of the world. After reading your character submission, though, has Praetan been destroyed entirely? If so, in my opinion I think it might be more fitting to shrink it down from a country to perhaps a single city or town. There's not much point to adding lore for an entire country if it's no longer around and thus doesn't have much bearing on anything, from my point of view. I'm open to discussion about it though.

As for your character, most of it looks fine, but I have a few questions about the Lich. Usually, a Lich is an undead wizard, and in most settings they're presented as very powerful creatures. But many of those settings, especially D&D and WoW and others like them, are considered to be High Fantasy or Heroic/Epic Fantasy, where Magic is much more powerful and much more present throughout the setting. While the Nightkin have magic, it's more along the lines of vague and misunderstood powers, things that people fear but often don't truly understand. It's not the same kind of in-your-face, "I cast Meteor!" kind of stuff. So would you mind terribly if I ask you to tone it down some? After all, if a Lich has an army of undead large and powerful enough to destroy an entire nation, that's not really something a band of adventurers would ever have any hope against in a gritty setting like this one (another reason I suggested to reduce Praetan from a country to a town). And if they're capable of shooting lightning from their fingertips or causing earthquakes and such with their magic, that's even more difficult to deal with in my opinion than something like a Vampire or Troll who simply has more physical strength or speed or size than most humans could match.

Just as a suggestion, maybe the Lich is less like a wizard and more like a clergyman of sorts for the dark forces? Rather than following his orders because he holds mass mind control powers over them, perhaps other monsters are led by him in a similar way that a priest is a leader figure within a village? Maybe whatever magic he does can't be used very often, because it requires large numbers of sacrifices and extended rituals?

The last thing I ask is just a simple editorial look over. Your capitalization and sentence structure needs work in several places, please review it and make adjustments where needed.

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Sorry, I'm pretty firmly against having half-blood characters unless you can give me a really convincing explanation. If it's just for flavor text, to me that seems even less necessary, because in the end it doesn't impact the character's narrative or how others will perceive them beyond a superficial sense. I'm still willing to discuss it if you'd like, though.

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Like we discussed in the PM, as long as IT is just a charisma thing, this looks fine to me. Go ahead and put it in the CT.
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@Zeroth no thats fine, i have a human character who would be better fit for this Rp anyway.
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@Zeroth Yes. Just like we talked about. I tried to define it a bit better here and even put in the bit about it not working on everyone to "ground it" a bit more. Makes it a bit more believable and realistic.

@Dynamo Frokane You seriously chose the name jockstrap?
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@Dynamo Frokane

Interesting name choice aside, there are just a few issues I'd like to address:

Your personality section doesn't have any flaws or any negative aspects of his personality traits. If you could include something like that and how it plays into why certain things have happened to him or because of him, I feel that would greatly improve the character.

In your backstory, while I'm fine with the creation of lore, you've created a good chunk of it without much set-up or discussion beforehand. Could I get some more information on some of these places, maybe through PM? They don't seem very consistent, since Isa Lomita sounds like a Latin name, Port Quinlan seems...Celtic or Gaelic, maybe, Kimura sounds Japanese, and Asala could possibly be Arabic or something else eastern. Are all of these part of the same place? Different countries? There's a lot going on here, and while I don't mind possibly adding some of it, it's just a lot to take in at once and makes your backstory a bit confusing.

Finally, your character doesn't seem to have had any kind of run in with creatures of the Night, or even make any acknowledgement of them. The biggest part of this RP will be about the players--the Marked--overcoming the monsters--the Nightkin--who gave them that Mark in the first place. I highly suggest including some form of interaction with the Night, or at least discussing a plan that would allow the character to get involved even if you choose not to play as a Marked person.
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I should have my gal up in a moment! Just need to do things!
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I'd like to express interest in this.

Question, cuz I saw how you reacted to the half-elf question. Do we have to have a human character or are other fantasy races a thing? I have no qualm about making a human character, it doesn't change the idea I got in my head, but I would like to know what limitations I have when making a character.
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Question, cuz I saw how you reacted to the half-elf question. Do we have to have a human character or are other fantasy races a thing? I have no qualm about making a human character, it doesn't change the idea I got in my head, but I would like to know what limitations I have when making a character.


Not that I know the mind of the gm or anything... I believe that the reasoning behind the half-blood thing is that it could be used to give that character a decisive edge against the Nightkin that the other characters (all human) doesn't have. The point of the RP is to see how people at the bottom fights against those above them. As such, playing a "fantasy race" would level the playing field somewhat. Please note that the gm doesn't even want us to humanise the humanoid Nightkin.

With that said, I think that a strong case for playing another race might change the gm's mind.
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I'd like to express interest in this.

Question, cuz I saw how you reacted to the half-elf question. Do we have to have a human character or are other fantasy races a thing? I have no qualm about making a human character, it doesn't change the idea I got in my head, but I would like to know what limitations I have when making a character.


The thing about fantasy races in this setting is that they aren't the Tolkien-esque form of themselves, but the darker medieval forms. Elves, for instance, might be tall and beautiful, but they look upon humanity with disdain, steal children to use as slaves or entertainment or food, lure maidens into magic circles that cause them to dance until they drop dead from exhaustion, and all other manner of evil things. Dwarves aren't swarthy drunken fellows with a penchant for battleaxes, they're vicious, horrendously ugly and squat creatures whose greed for gold and gems knows no bounds. So on and so forth across the gamut of fantasy races. All creatures of the Night are, universally, tied to and corrupted by evil natures and supernatural forces. What's more, humanity in this setting is still very familiar with the ideas of witch hunts, and anyone thought to be associated with the Night in an "inappropriate" way would likely find themselves the subject of much persecution, if not execution.
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