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@Ratattack

I believe that this character isn't going to fit in with Skybreak. While little matters besides results in this organization, the Overseer cannot draw any benefits to having this member added to the squad. You are more than welcome to rework the character or create a new one but this one will not work, sorry.
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Ahh so i need to fix the benefits ok thank you ;)
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Less just about the benefits and more that this guy is blatantly a criminal who's in this for glory rather than saving the world. It's even more unstable than an already accepted character so the Overseer sees it as a liability more than a benefit.
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@Cryptek

Suggestion to work on proof reading your post! There were points where I had to reread thing several times to get what was intended.

I don't know if English isn't your first language, but if you have a friend you can help proofread your work - or even use our own roleplay members to assist you - then I recommend you do so.

I hate having to exclude someone but if this sort of thing is persistent it can introduce problems in the flow of the roleplay :(

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It seems to me that Culicid would be better suited to division Dreadnought in The Art of War. If you can convince me that he'll be good in stealth-focused operations then I'll be more than happy to accept him!

The only thing I would change, is the items of the requisition. The UHF (United Front of Humanity) wouldn't specially make Xic'Si based items. They would just hand over Terran weaponry which would work just fine due to similar anatomies.

Besides those two points, this CS looks good to go! Give it a little fix and port it over
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Edited and maybe good to go now, my dude! :D
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Looks good! If you like you can choose whether you would like to wait to admit the character for Art of War in the Dreadnought division...

Or sign up for the Art of Deception in the Battlemage division! Inform me through Discord and move your character to the tab!
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DUE TO RECENT DISCOVERIES OF A PLAYER META-GAMING, THE ROLEPLAY HAS BEEN FORCED TO REVERT BACK TO A FORMER STATE. AS SUCH IT CAN NOW BE RECONSIDERED AT STARTING AND WE ARE IN NEED OF NEW PLAYERS!
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