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Review of Mideo

As always, we don’t delve into the parts we consider good. Anything we don’t cover, is in our eyes good enough.

Formatting:
Move bold tag on Master in Public records to before the master’s name.
On the wherever you use a dash (-) to separate a skill, associate or such, try to make sure of two things:
  • That the text before the dash is in bold
  • that there is a space both in front of and after the dash.


This will make it easier for others to read it.

Appearance:
Since horns grow in at puberty, does this mean you plan to have Mideo undego that soonish ICly?

Talents:
Her talent for Plant Surge is known to the masters of H’Ratth, yes?
If so, they are likely to have sent out word to get someone to help train her.

Same goes for the Psychometry, which they will most definitely have arranged someone to train her in well enough to be able to control it most of the time. Given that this one was discovered early, such training is likely to have been going on for some time.
Being able to decide not to use it is an early step of training for psychometry that the H’Ratth Council would have seen as mandatory for her before assigning her to a master.

Since her master is not skilled with either of these, it is likely that she will occasionally be training with other senior Jedi (knights or masters) who have the skills to help her learn more about these.

Non-Force skills:
Survival. The range of biomes available across republic space is immense. Given her age, she likely has not delved much into the nuances of more than a few, with very basic knowledge of most others only.
We suggest picking two or three biomes that she has deeper knowledge of here. Given that H’Ratth is a jungle world, that is likely one. For roleplaying purposes, we suggest picking one or two others, so that she is not too limited.

Acrobatics. With the Force as her ally, her denser body type would not have had quite as great a challenge, though of course she would have a different type of nimbleness about it than those with much leaner frames. Most likely, the strength and weight of the bones will increase in a balanced fashion as her strength increases, rather than one going much faster. (the latter would be a poor survival trait for a species)

Failures:
Do you have no failures? Perhaps some unfortunate experience with Psychometry?

Addendum: We like her.
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Formatting:
I'll make these changes as soon as I have time

Appearance:
Yup! I plan to have her go through that ICly as some character flavor and an indicator for the passage of time as she grows up!

Talents:
Great feedback here and that all makes sense, I think I purposefully lowballed how skilled she was because I wasn't sure what the appropriate level of training and control she'd have access to for either of them is.

Non-Force skills:
Both of these are also sensible, I think I'll be going with Jungle, Desert and Arctic.

The bone structure thing also makes sense.

Failures:
For failures she was s'posed to have touched either a dead body or some medical materials during a healing class and gotten rather traumatized, it also ties into why she was so resistant to learning any healing skills and her failure to learn anything beyond the very basics of first aid would also be listed.

Addendum: We like her.
Yay!
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With our commentary taken care of, we can give our stamp of approval.
Only needs a second one now.
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She reminds me a bit of Avatar Korra, even if it's a different franchise. This is a good thing.

Approved. Have fun.
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