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Oh because i thought @Landain was playing Phineas? But i could always just have Sergio leave the bar or join in on the fist fight.


Is it this line causing the confusion?

Finney might not have noticed the invitation from the man at the pool table, but one of the thugs did. "Why don't you mind your own damn business, mister," he said to Sergio.


The thug is the one speaking, not Finney. I wasn't trying to take over Landain's character. Or was it something else? I'll try to reword it slightly to be clearer.
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@Kelewen

Thanks sorry bud.
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No worries. I'd much rather sort out confusion and unclear wording here before it snowballs!

I tweaked it just slightly in the IC thread to hopefully make it less ambiguous who was speaking.
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Psst....@Eviledd1984 if your character leaves the scene, it's gonna make it tough to get hired for the transport job. ;)
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Shit sorry i forgot, let me change my post then.
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Sorry about the fuck up, i hope my post is good to go.
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@EvilEdd1984 I am roleplaying both Phineas Eugene O’Connell (Nickname: Finney) and William “Billy” Kingsley. A link to my character sheets is here if you would like to read them. Whether Finney is a book worm or not, may be known by EvilEdd1984, but is not known by Sergio Westwood yet. If you read the CS you will see Finney spent a week on the trail before arriving at the Saloon. I hadn’t written anything about shaving, so we can assume he has at least a week’s growth and is still dusty and dirty from the trail. So far, Sergio has seen him play cards. He isn’t writing or reading a book during the card game. This little bit of metagaming is something Sergio will learn after a conversation. No one truly knows much about the others yet; only what was said in conversation during the game.

After a week on the road, Finney made it to Sweetwater, having adjusted to life on the road. The sacrifice of being dirty, he committed to himself in New England was nothing compared to the sacrifice of food he endured at the beginning of his journey. Fortunately at the saloon, he was able to purchase a meal and a beer. Phineas was a happy man.


So what is the 1984 reference in your user ID?
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@Kelewen When I wrote the bit about Billy throwing a one two at the cowboy, I wrote Left cross and right upper cut. I spent seven years training in Krav Maga. I am right handed. I would have thrown a left jab and a right cross or a cross and a hook. I just kind of got into the moment there and wrote it that way not knowing where anyone was sitting; except Finney. I do love your map by the way. That helps out a lot.
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Oh okay, so let me edit my post so that he just wants Finn out of the fight. And the 1984 part of my name is a reference to the book 1984 by George Orwell.
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@Kelewen When I wrote the bit about Billy throwing a one two at the cowboy, I wrote Left cross and right upper cut. I spent seven years training in Krav Maga. I am right handed. I would have thrown a left jab and a right cross or a cross and a hook. I just kind of got into the moment there and wrote it that way not knowing where anyone was sitting; except Finney. I do love your map by the way. That helps out a lot.


My only martial arts training is in foil fencing, so forgive me if I'm being slow on the fisticuffs terminology... but are you trying to tell me I've narrated something that didn't make sense in my reply?

Glad the map is helpful! :)
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...but are you trying to tell me I've narrated something that didn't make sense in my reply?
No, not at all. rambling, I guess.

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Phew.

If I do narrate something too unbelievable, I don't mind a little correction. It'll only make my combat writing better.

I know there's a couple topics that I'm personally very familiar with that make me just cringe when I read someone else getting the very basics wrong. I'd like to avoid being the cringe-worthy writer if I can!
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I like maps. Call me a Cartophile if you will. Here is Kelewen's map, showing where everyone is based on what has been written already.


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I got the impression Mistihkoman was sitting next to Mr Logan. I put Finney on the other side of Logan since I had him run to the end of the bar near the door. I put Billy closest to the table of four behind them since he started the fight when he stood up. I also placed Sergio on the other side of the room from Finney; not even close, since he was playing pool at the pool table.
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Would you like me to edit my post again so Sergio? I had him walk over towards where Finney was. But I can edit it in case I fucked everything up.
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I got the impression Mistihkoman was sitting next to Mr Logan.


I actually never said, and originally figured Mistihkoman was across the table from Logan. But hey I don't mind if he was sitting right beside Logan instead. Don't matter to me either way.
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I like maps. Call me a Cartophile if you will. Here is Kelewen's map, showing where everyone is based on what has been written already.


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I got the impression Mistihkoman was sitting next to Mr Logan. I put Finney on the other side of Logan since I had him run to the end of the bar near the door. I put Billy closest to the table of four behind them since he started the fight when he stood up. I also placed Sergio on the other side of the room from Finney; not even close, since he was playing pool at the pool table.


Seems reasonable... we can assume Taylor is (was) in that empty chair and that Mary, before she stepped away, was in another chair in that little gap. :)

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I'm having waaaaaaaaaaaaaay to much fun with Mistihkoman.
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He's a little scary! In the best ways, of course.

I'm gonna give Landain another day or two to reply before I make another GM post.
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Is it my turn? pardon me. I will post today.
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Seems reasonable... we can assume Taylor is (was) in that empty chair and that Mary, before she stepped away, was in another chair in that little gap. :)

It seems there should have been six chairs instead of five.

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