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Tai Falkenburg said
Well worth it - Scarlet is turning out to be a fun character to interact with :)


EldritchOne said
Ja, same.


I'm getting the feeling that there might need to be a collab comment in the near future. I can't right now as I'm probably about to head out somewhere, but it'd be a much less awkward read without several characters giving big monologues to do one or two things.
kapuchu said
And began to what? Alright... there are a few things. First is her Blast of Magic thing. I hope you're okay with it just being a medium-to-short range ability? Does really fit with a Valkyrie to have long-range abilities. As for her wings, I have found pictures of Valkyries with wings so I'm letting it pass. The biggest thing, however, is her Shifter appearance. Valkyries were more than just warriors, they were also servants and lovers, meaning that they also had a very feminine side. I feel like your Alice is a bit too... masculine for a Valkyrie, at least in her Shifter Form. I would suggest changing her Valkyrie Body to be more feminine, at least have her face be kinder than usual. Remember that you become a hybrid of that kind of Mythic and her human self, so it goes without saying that she would become more like a proper Valkyrie. So... you don't have to make her any less muscle-y (though you can, if you want). I just ask that her face becomes kinder rather than more scowling. Aside from that... pretty much good to go :)


Alright, so hopefully the couple changes I made will suffice?

I didn't cut down on the muscle, but at least she's not got a hawk face in human form anymore.
kapuchu said
And began to what? Alright... there are a few things. First is her Blast of Magic thing. I hope you're okay with it just being a medium-to-short range ability? Does really fit with a Valkyrie to have long-range abilities. As for her wings, I have found pictures of Valkyries with wings so I'm letting it pass. The biggest thing, however, is her Shifter appearance. Valkyries were more than just warriors, they were also servants and lovers, meaning that they also had a very feminine side. I feel like your Alice is a bit too... masculine for a Valkyrie, at least in her Shifter Form. I would suggest changing her Valkyrie Body to be more feminine, at least have her face be kinder than usual. Remember that you become a hybrid of that kind of Mythic and her human self, so it goes without saying that she would become more like a proper Valkyrie. So... you don't have to make her any less muscle-y (though you can, if you want). I just ask that her face becomes kinder rather than more scowling. Aside from that... pretty much good to go :)


Alright, I'll get to work on fixing those once I'm at my computer.

And iirc, I did list the magic blast being short ranged, with the reasoning being the same as you said- it wouldn't make a whole lot of sense for a long ranged Valkyrie.
kapuchu said
Sure thing guys :) I think we're at max capacity. 8 players at the moment. Additional applicants will be put in a "maybe" spot, so to speak. So, for now, full team. Nice to have you guys ^^ Monochromatic? I'll give your CS a look later. I'm about to head out for a 4 hour train trip to visit my dad. I have my laptop with me so I'll reply later :)


Alrighty, I'll be waitin'
Alright, got it posted finally.

I think my fingers are going to drop off with all the stuff I've written today...
Scarlet didn’t even blink as she was told that she might die in delirium, then shrugged. “Well of course I got the head out with the bolt, how else do you think I was going to cast a detection spell on it?” Squirming around slightly she settled herself on the table, squirming around some more trying to get some slight comfort out of the hard surface.

Well, at least she wasn’t dragging the leg along on a dirt road anymore, got to find those silver linings somewhere.

“I can vouch for there being no poison, unless Clover the Clever’s Enervation Exposure spell has somehow become unreliable in the past few years, but judging by the state of their other weapons and assuming the blood in that leg doesn’t dry abnormally fast that arrowhead was rustier than it had any business doing and not falling apart when it hits something. I’d like not to die of tetanus either, to be frank.” She said as she continued her previous train of thought.

“And while I appreciate the impromptu anesthetic, I’m generally not too fond of southern alcohol. I’ll be fine, I’ve been through worse.” She assured Nocturne, gently pushing away the offered mug.

Have I gone through worse? She wondered, trying to recall points in time where she’d been through worse than a couple ponies playing around in a hole in her leg. Well I suppose there was that one field surgery, nothing quite like watching somepony sew your own leg back together without anesthetic. Though honestly I’m surprised I didn’t pass out from that, painful as it was.

She cleared her throat slightly, “You were asking what I was doing on this road, no?” She asked rhetorically, “Well, truthfully I’ve no damn idea. When I received that wonderful iron and wooden present in my leg, I grabbed my things and teleported. Honestly I’m lucky I didn’t end up halfway in a tree, what with it being a completely blind teleport, but at that point I just needed to get out of there. So I materialized somewhere about a mile or two back that way,” She pointed with a forehoof at the road through a window, “And dragged myself here. Mainly just looking for work, or particularly strong alcohol, some ponies are way too fond of that stuff in high concentrations. You’d think an alicorn would act more dignified or something.”

Scarlet knew she’d screwed up, generally speaking it was a bad idea to just blurt out that you happened to be a follower of an alicorn goddess and were on a quest to find freakishly strong booze for her, or work failing that. She clenched her teeth slightly and braced for the reaction of the ponies adjacent to her, subtly finding her sword should things go south.
Suddenly! Two people pop out and reserve spots!

Let's see where this goes, shall we?

EDIT: Three people suddenly reserving spots!


All right, here it is. It only took me the whole day.
Hopefully this is acceptable!
kapuchu said
I could probably have done better if I cared to put more work into it... But this is pretty much it :P Not much to tell about someone without parents living on the streets.


You still managed to produce a fair amount, I'd say.
kapuchu said
And there ya go! Finally! Only took me three fucking hours to write that background xD


Deus mea, Kapu.

I'm going to go weep in a corner because my backstories always suck.
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