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No. There's no magic in my world.


-Maddie- Does anyone else have your powers?
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My family doesn't have abilities.


-Maddie- Is it like a "curse" or something, like on Anna and Elsa?
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Not really.

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It's a sleepy little area. Not much happens, but everyone is close.


That sounds nice. I actually live in a London, so I can't boast such a state.
-Maddie- Does anyone else there have your powers? Or are you unique? Ooh, I bet it's family related!
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It's just a little wooded area. It's by an ocean, but no ports.


-Maddie- Any trade to be had?
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The fact that there's nothing special there?


-Maddie- So? Why not just say what it's like? What does it look like? How advanced is it? What're its geographical surroundings?
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It's nothing against you guys, but...

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Well, they need someone to help them. Someone that IF danger does find its way to us, could fight it off. That'll be me.
Red: Plus she's the queen!
Dante: *groans* I'm Not A queen.


I see. I suppose that makes sense. How long do you think you'll have to stay, your time?
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Here's what they'll see:

Imagine a near barren wasteland , dotted with burned cities and the ashes of the many creatures that once lived covering the ground. Then, imagine a robotic race of beings there, influenced by the sword shard's evil properties.

Then, a large robotic monster type thing with the shard in its chest comes into view shortly after.

I'm trying to find pics to better describe this.


*you see a near barren wasteland, dotted with burned cities and wide swathes of ashes, where robotic beings roam; a large robotic monster comes into view with what looks like the shard in its chest*
You don't need to describe the history of it. Remember that this is basically from the view of cameras: they record what the five senses can perceive (extremely accurately), but not thoughts. They don't give a narrative; they objectively say what's there. They don't say why; they objectively say what's there. =P So you don't need to say "ashes of dead creatures" because when you look right at the ashes, they just look like ashes. You shouldn't say "influenced by the sword shard's evil properties" because you don't know that when you first look at them.
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There's nothing special about it.

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It's okay.


-Maddie- I'm interested anyway!
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*looks at you.*
Are you done?

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Yeah, heh. Sorry you got dragged into this conversation.

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Exactly! I don't want that to happen to Equestria. Not again.


Or, that Equestria. There are others. But I see where you're coming from, and it makes sense. But do you really need to be there? Away from us?
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She doesn't even go here!


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