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Well I'll look forward to it then! For now I will just wait and finish reading all the old posts!
I can always just wait until there is a better point for me to step in.

I'll have her start with no abstraction and it can awaken later, I feel that'd be better than trying to place her into the camping trip. Unless you think otherwise
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To hopefully make the detaching more clear along with her love for her brother I went back and just did some minor editing to a few parts. I'll bold and make them in color so you can see what I changed easier.

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Thank you! :)
Now how should I go about jumping in to the middle of this when everyone else already has relations built up and interactions going?
@Surtr Inc Angel very much cared that her brother died. Just grief is different for everyone and referring back to the fact that her father prevented her from seeing her brother, '. It became so much she couldn't even visit her own brother in the hospital, something she would come to resent her father for.' That's where her anger stemmed from. Detachment wise I can see how you may not think it fits but I was going for a different take on detachment. She's detaching herself from everything she has known and is keeping herself detached from other people as she doesn't want to get hurt by them.
Okay, I've made a character that I think is unique and I hope she works! Let me know if there is anything I can improve on or change!


@Surtr Inc I fixed everything that you wanted fixed, hopefully she is better now. Sorry about before.
@Surtr Inc I totally get all those issues. I was a bit iffy about the backstory but I thought it would fit with her abstraction but I will rewrite it and also fix the fact that it doesn't show her connection to farmer hill. I thought I had that but I must of completely blanked out. Also I just forgot to fix the part where i said she was there her whole life.
Okay, I've made a character that I think is unique and I hope she works! Let me know if there is anything I can improve on or change!
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