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Yep! Last position left is The Leader.
Nice to meet you/Welcome to The Guild! I PM'd you with a few things to go over, but Zasha's sheet's pretty good as is.
Bumping here to point out that we still need two more characters, preferably at least one male (3/4 of our current cast is female)

The two empty slots are The Leader (Self-Explanatory) and The Lancer (The funny guy/edgier sidekick/second in command).
The Heart is taken. That being said, she's decidedly not that artsy, so you could take one of the available slots (Leader or Lancer) and make them an arty character.

Glad to see some interest, bumping here to point out that we still need two more characters, preferably at least one male (3/4 of our current cast is female)
Still room for two more, actually! We're still looking for a Lancer and a Leader.
I PM'd you Renny, hopefully we can figure something out.

As for the rest of you lurkers, we've still got two spots open, so get 'em while they're hot.
Kudos for completing the interview this time around, Andy. That being said, it needs some work before I can accept it.

Andy's personality seems to be one giant middle finger, and his only hobby is parkour. It also strikes me as odd that he's a professional parkourist at the age of 17, but I'll give you a prodigy pass there. However, balancing having a social life with school, being a professional athlete, and a cat burglar is too much to suspend disbelief.

Anyway, more than half of his sheet is taken by one-liners, so I can't really critique anything there but length. Once he's more fleshed out and real, I can accept him, but until then, homeboy needs a lot of work.
So I've finished mines too. I'm not too sure about the dialogue but I tried T_T lol
It was really hard for me to envision and get into that leader-mentality. Than I thought to myself, why not have the skeleton there but have him develop into it.


A few things before he can be accepted, although I like what you have so far.

First and foremost, the sheet's pretty formal, and because of the stiff, formal tone, we don't find much out about Ethan. From the sheet we know Ethan is a track runner who plays cards. If it were written less formally, maybe there'd be more to find out about him?

I like that you're instilling a feeling of "Confident Prep", and that works for a leader, but I want to know more. Clay is a bully who thinks descriptive-ity is a word, but he's also clearly very insecure and is a fan of traditional geek culture in secret. Keira has a perfect SAT score and works at a museum, but she's also hyperactive and communicates through pictures of cats on the internet. He fits the preppy leader role well, but I'd like to see him fleshed out more. Maybe he hates the smell of smoke because his mom's expenses are gambling, and she'd bring him to casinos! Maybe track is important to him because he's got one leg! Maybe everybody thinks he likes track, but he prefers taxidermy! Stuff like that would be neat. Flesh him out, make him a little more three-dimensional, and we'll be all good. I want to know more about his personality, maybe some of his backstory, et cetera.
I. I used to spend all my time on Know Your Meme.
I'd say bump it back a little, since we're starting at the beginning of the school year. Other than that, I'll be waiting for the PM.

My body is ready.
My only criticism is that 19 is pretty old to be a junior, 16-17 would be about right. I enjoy her snarkiness immensely, and will tell you now that Clay will smell the motor oil and probably propose to her by page 3 or 4 of the IC. Once you fix the age, take her sheet down to the Characters tab because YOU. ARE. ACCEPTEEEEEED.

Also, the relationships tab is a thing I should mention. Everyone knows each other (or at least of each other), as they've all decided to walk home from the mall together, as the group did in the original series. If you wanna discuss any pre-existing Kim-Clay relations, feel free to PM me. If not, Clay is the resident bully/redneck asshole of the school, so that should be a safe guess for his relations with most of his fellow students.
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