For clarity, I'm just going to add the correction that it's Fahrenheit 451, not Fahrenheit 411. The latter leads you to some movie so I thought I'd comment and correct to make sure VI ends up in the right place (and to ditto the recommendation. And to throw Neil Gaiman's Fragile Things in there too - it's the book that made me realise not all literature is classic/old.)
Both reviewers for Act One pretty much hit the same notes, notes are fair. She never lacked agency at any point *within the actual story*, with the exception of harmless flashbacks, and that sounds like a killer. Two stretchy arguments if I may -- One, the Tony/Taina arrangement of mutual exploitation might count -- but it's definitely a stretch, so I'm not worrying about it. Two and even stretchier -- the instigating events, and by extension everything that happens ever, only happens because of what Leon did to her brain. But again -- stretchiest stretch of all stretches. Meh. I'm disappointed -- really wanted to pass!!!! But ah well.
I cut a subplot for time that would've absolutely maybe cleared the challenge. In it, Taina would remember a past monologue from Leon explaining how everything is Reager Corps' fault. Later she'd have a different dream and discover that Pryce -- the kindly Reager dude who helped the company -- was involved in her past, though she'd be unclear about his exact role. Then either she or Tony would go murder Pryce, only to later discover that Leon was essentially lying, Pryce's involvement was innocent, and her certainty about his guilt was a product of the old Reager drive/conditioning stuff or whatever. Didn't have time to walk down that path, and story-wise I wanted to focus on the company characters anyway, so Pryce just sorta vanished from the story altogether. I wanna get him back in it...... meh. Sounds like by choosing to act, even as a product of bad or incomplete information, that might've disqualified it anyway.
Well in any case, congratulations to literally everybody else! Thoroughly enjoyed reading each piece.
So I think I thought of a better way to make the FTL/time-travel more hard-sci-fi-ish. Wouldn't change this story at all, because Bunsen -- the guy who 'figured it out' and explained it -- doesn't know any better, but going forwards, would it be theoretically more plausible/accurate if the evil guys were jumping near black holes and jumping back, a la Interstellar? And just skipping time deliberately that way? Also if there are any neuroscience or psych angles I SHOULD be thinking about -- other than 'the word you're looking for is PTSD' -- I'm all ears.
I need to read more contemporary literature. I've been doing a lot of history books and old-school literature for the last year and they are starting to run a bit stale. Running across a bit of a "Where to start" problem though.
It helps if you're not all-heavy-all-the-time reading. Throw in some garbage fiction too. I listen to commercial shit on tape when I drive, and I read the heavy stuff on paper. So if I get sick of one I've got the other. ANYWAY -- modern lit is like super-varied. Kurt Vonnegut is crazy good, and also just crazy -- sometimes described as a mad scientist, which fits, and his books share absurd elements from an insane universe that somehow makes more sense than ours? It's weirdly genius, and probably evil. Uh, who else.... Well Cormac, obviously, but that's the heaviest of all heavy things. I mean "Child of God" was a character study of a serial-rapist-turned-murderer-turned-necrophile, and somehow that doesn't really capture the depravity of it all. If I had to put it into words, I think he makes you understand things that later on you probably wish you didn't -- and he does it with maybe the best prose in the history of writing. You just wanna make sure you can lay hands on a dictionary before you even get started, because you'll be needing one. Then there's always your more conventional/older/classic-er stuff, like Farenheit 411, which isn't strictly-speaking MODERN but just kinda timeless. If I could talk you into one book (and you haven't read it yet), Farenheit 411. Fucking brilliant. Then, I mean, reward your brain for smartsing, and feed it some Michael Chrichton or something.
Sorry that ain’t very merry to say, why is this game so scary to play? Well let me think, cause every day my balls are getting too hairy to shave Pause a minute, I’m stressin’ the game if I go to hell, then heaven’s to blame I don’t mean to come off crazy but you motherfuckers seem to think that I’m hella deranged