@AngelofOctober, yes, of course. I don't object to a ton of backstory. I just have to wait for retirement to read it all (very definitely teasing).
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@Devcon1, We're on a train, so slightly before that?
@Neo Is Delight it's fine. I could have made it a little clearer.
@Neo Is Delight it's fine. I could have made it a little clearer.
@Neo Is Delight, I'm not complaining about it, I remarked on it. I don't expect anyone to change their characters and I wouldn't ask you or anyone else to. The remark was supposed to be the same tone as "huh, a lot of characters thus far have odd bending styles" or "a lot of characters thus far have had a lot of effort put in to make them unique".
@AngelofOctober@Neo Is Delight That was all very tongue-in-cheek. I'm aware what a loli is and don't think for a second I don't love the characters we're getting. I've been impressed. It was just a note than we have a lot of characters (so far) younger than Rosai, who's in the middle of the age range. I apologise if you think I was insulting your creativity.
@pandapolio I'll get to you later.
@AngelofOctober, I'm an editor for a newspaper. I more often than not have to cut articles down to the core, relevant parts. There's a fine line between "relevant background" and "interesting background". In your case, you have a firebender who lives on a farm and sells wares in Ba Sing Se. That he sells and makes jewelry is relevant (why is he on the train to Ba Sing Se?). That he makes the jewelry by melting rocks he finds lying around is interesting but not relevant.
Broad strokes takes it down to the minimum. Even with your two more points, you have six lines of data, rather than a short story's worth. That's what broad strokes are. You asked, I gave, but your character is fine as is.
Also, none of what you wrote is "showing" the audience. The dialogue is, but as an editor I would have cut it out. I am not telling you you're wrong. You do the showing in the IC, if it becomes necessary. Flashbacks are your friend.
@pandapolio I'll get to you later.
@AngelofOctober, I'm an editor for a newspaper. I more often than not have to cut articles down to the core, relevant parts. There's a fine line between "relevant background" and "interesting background". In your case, you have a firebender who lives on a farm and sells wares in Ba Sing Se. That he sells and makes jewelry is relevant (why is he on the train to Ba Sing Se?). That he makes the jewelry by melting rocks he finds lying around is interesting but not relevant.
Broad strokes takes it down to the minimum. Even with your two more points, you have six lines of data, rather than a short story's worth. That's what broad strokes are. You asked, I gave, but your character is fine as is.
Also, none of what you wrote is "showing" the audience. The dialogue is, but as an editor I would have cut it out. I am not telling you you're wrong. You do the showing in the IC, if it becomes necessary. Flashbacks are your friend.
@AngelofOctober, you asked what broad strokes were, and there they are. I didn't include Rosai's failure to learn how to swim, the time she pinned a boy from another tribe in a fair fight and thereby discovered why her mother told her boys couldn't control themselves, or how she drank cactus juice, tied two sticks to her head and ended up declaring herself Queen of the Jackalopes
It's good you have all of that. It's plenty of ammunition for the plot.
It's good you have all of that. It's plenty of ammunition for the plot.
@Neo Is Delight *looks at you, then drops head to desk* Not going to say there's no precedent for bending toddlers, but the tone of the RPG is young adults getting thrown together. I suppose you could have a character who's short and older than they look.
@AngelofOctober:
• Born in Republic City, parents died, ran away.
• Adopted by Earth Kingdom couple, inherited the farm
• Has a prize-winning pig-cow.
Broad strokes. Don't go changing it. I appreciate the depth and effort you put in. That's just an example of broad strokes.
Is it just me, or is everyone aiming for the youngest possible age? Would we be dealing with preteens if I had opened up the age range a little more?
• Born in Republic City, parents died, ran away.
• Adopted by Earth Kingdom couple, inherited the farm
• Has a prize-winning pig-cow.
Broad strokes. Don't go changing it. I appreciate the depth and effort you put in. That's just an example of broad strokes.
Is it just me, or is everyone aiming for the youngest possible age? Would we be dealing with preteens if I had opened up the age range a little more?
@AngelofOctober, would have expected more broad strokes and less dialogue, but that's fairly comprehensive. I guess we're getting a family reunion during the time we're in Republic City.
I'm looking forward to having all the characters in one place so I can read them all and plan dastardly plots...
@Gisk I like it. Rosai and Zhay should interact well. And we have an airbending teacher, so there's the opportunity for him to learn alongside her and get... Close... 
I did have the mental image of Rosai using her slipstreaming trick she uses to run faster while riding a motorbike.
I did have the mental image of Rosai using her slipstreaming trick she uses to run faster while riding a motorbike.
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