@Vicier! Thank you for working with me on your CS and now that it has been posted I can say that Jean is accepted and has taken up spot number 3! Thank you!
@Pie Flavor A few things I noticed right away.
First off, I would ask you use a different face claim. Not only can we not even see his face, but the modern-day camera and baseball cap really throw off the time period that I have set this roleplay up for. Also, if you are using that picture for a banner you still need to have a picture in the appearance section.
Secondly, under personality traits you mention that he is open to being a 'trans' if asked about it. Since this is the 1940's you need to keep in mind that this particular subject was avoided like the plague as well as the subject of LBGT (which wasn't officially formed until waaaaay later, by the way). If there was anything that American's hated more than the Germans and Japanese at this time, it was people who were sexually different. Anyone who openly admitted being gay, straight, bi, transgender... anything like that, you were more than likely hunted down and beaten or even worse, killed.
Thirdly, the fact that a 10-year-old girl 'suddenly' changes into a boy (I'm assuming there were people around when this happened since it was his birthday?) I can not accept that no one noticed, especially his family. 10 years old he would still be living at home, so that sort of thing just doesn't go unnoticed, not to mention with school registration (since you stated that they still went to school) would have to have been redone by his parents in which they would have had to treat him like an entirely new person, like 'the new kid' and probably fabricate a story about how the girl he was before (what was her name?) died or was sent away or something. You have him moving around a bit after that, which makes the transition easier but at the very least his parents would have taken notice.
Fourthly, I understand him learning to fight because of getting picked on and whatever, but how is his cuts and scrapes healing faster? Is that part of his mutant gene or just something his body does? I'm a bit lost on that.
And one last thing, you haven't mentioned at all how the war affected him and/or his family. Kind of a big thing going on during all of this haha.
@Darling Cyanide Wow, really nice CS here I love the amount of detail you went into with the war and all that. Also, you made it clear that you have chosen Erik that was the one that has recruited her, great! Less questions for me. I do have one question though just out of my own curiosity... is Charlotte gay? lol Your 'other' section has me a mite bit confused :p Accepted! And she has taken up spot number 4!
Aaaand Mr_Pink has dropped out because of something that I wrote plainly in the CS section? (Does no one read anymore?) Best of luck to you Pink! Thanks for letting me know!
@Avanhelsing Okay, overall the CS looks good but just a few things...
First, you have his personality posted twice and the added little tag of "he doesn't care that he is so young" confuses me since he's 19... which... isn't really all that young...
Secondly, his backstory needs to be fleshed out a LOT more as well as mentioning somewhere how and when the war has affected him (the war has affected everyone, it's just nice to know how) so work on those two things and then let me know when you have updated it.
Cyanide, Wicked Sweet, thank you both for answering his questions for me since I've already done so :) (Again, does no one read? @.@)
Now... off to update the roster! 2 new characters to add!
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