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Is my CS approved?
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@ineffable Yup! ^_^ Consider the Like button to be my stamp of approval.
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I feel like i'm getting ready to explore the place. ^_^ Surely, my excitement holds few boundaries now!
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Waiting on you guys to finish. ^_^
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With the start of the school year, I don't think I'll be able to stick with Edain. At the very least, hopefully my questions helped w/ world-building!
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I like the pic selection.

The "How you got here" section needs work. She can't have come from another world if she was born here. Please don't feel compelled to give her any weird origins if you don't want them. She can have nothing to do with other worlds whatsoever if you so choose. That section is there in case you felt like giving your character a more interesting introduction to the world (like being summoned, walking through a closet, falling from the sky, arriving by starship, etc.). If she was born here and was never even remotely involved with other points of origin, that's perfectly fine. But as-is, the section looks really weird.

In general, I'd like to see more work put into the character's background and personality, especially the character flaws. The simple, traditional nature of this RP was designed to give greater freedom to make strong characters. Please take advantage of it.

One place I would start is with the character flaw. This is the single most important part of the CS, because it's what you're developing about the character over the course of the whole story. If you're prepared to make a huge deal over Kiera's gullibility, naiveté, and spitefulness, and to let it cost her within an inch of her life, then run with it, but otherwise, consider other possible flaws.

For a healer, a good flaw to consider would be conceitedness. Thinking only of oneself presents interesting and violent conflicts with the humble generosity of the healing profession, and it would make for an incredible story. You don't have to use this flaw, but that's the kind of flaw I want her to have - a fundamental contradiction in her character that will take a whole story to work through.

Some examples of mine: One healer character suffered debilitating PTSD following years of torment - the healer needed healing, in other words. Another healer was racist (the healer refused to heal some people) and had a long fall from grace as a result.

Kiera could work, but find me a good flaw first. ;)


Thanks for telling me that! I'll go ahead and fix the character.
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I am dropping. Sorry
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I am dropping. Sorry


I see. Do you mind providing a little feedback before you go? I'm keen to know whether the reason involves the RP or not.
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Nothing to do with the rp, you are amazing @Thinslayer

I think its an issue on how much time I have right now. I dont want to hold anything up. Wont be as free till like next week. X.x

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Nothing to do with the rp, you are amazing @Thinslayer

I think its an issue on how much time I have right now. I dont want to hold anything up. Wont be as free till like next week. X.x


lol thanks, good to know. It might take until next week to get this RP started, the way things are going... :P
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Don't worry about it. Sometimes the slow rp lasts the longest. ;)
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Do I start posting or....
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@ineffableSure. This'll be a great time to practice my new character intro mechanics. Whenever a new character appears, I'll set up an intro scenario for them to integrate them into the RP. So let's get this started, and whoever's not done with their apps yet will be smoothly introduced.
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So you're introducing me?
(cuz that would be good!)
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Sure! Got any preferences before I write?
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Nope, go ahead
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Must of missed something >.>
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Okay after reading you got me really wanting to remake Transcendent Edword.
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@StormHeart
Still waiting on your app. I have a number of things to take care of over the next couple weeks anyway, so I can afford to wait a bit longer for the submission.

@everyone
I'll be working on everyone's introductions in the meantime, though it'll be a bit slow because of my aforementioned business. Please PM details about what kinds of things your character would be doing at the start of the RP, like whether you'd want an action, dramatic, or intriguing intro.
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