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The sun is just beginning to rise upon the start of human kind- among others- in this world of harsh reality. A small village, nestled within a mountainous valley is stirring. A large platform and a fire pit in the middle of the jumbled together structures. The houses and homes looking raw and built with the mind of winter snows. Small herds of tamed animals hover about still wandering off into the forest to live rather than staying put. Smaller fields look sorry with the little yield they give. But, there is a certain security and prosperity about the village. Leather and furs tan, hunting weapons, and a fisher's tools can be seen in stages of making.

Elsewhere, waking in the dawn, a raven takes wing. The southern seas and oceans are warm and bountiful giving way to small tribes that had dared to claim land and form cities. To self-proclaimed councils and kings clashing against one another. Farms give excess, craftsmen are becoming more prevalent, iron is being forged. Life is easy among plains and forests yielding bounties of their own. and the rivers streaming from far away mountains. But ever as the raven flies the ocean turns to the north. It's waters becoming frigid and cold. There are few such bounties in this land. The North is a place of different hardships. Farming is only beginning to be viable as basins in the mountainsides are carved out. Most tribes still relying on hunting, gathering, and perhaps the ever-so cautious raid upon their southern neighbors. The mountains that keep some secluded against their eastern sea and the great forests within its fingers, grasping the small tribes to its shadow. Turning west, the mountains reach higher. Up there- this bird cannot go. For behind the great spires. A new plain lies- a glacier. The impassable plains of ice.

There is more danger than the North men know. To the east are another group of people. The desert folk are said to be ancient southern folk who were banished into the great plains, high cliffs, and deserts of the east. They come raiding, taking what they wish. The great glacier that carves the mountains protects the North from these folk. None would cross a blinding light, missing food, water, and fire.

This is the world of Dissansel. New in its time, it's not a world of simple labors. For among all it's people walk those with special abilities. Bards, as they are known in the south. Skalds or shamans in the north. They are regarded either as a blessing or a threat. But always with suspicion. They may control the very elements of nature but at a price.

Landing the raven, watches the village. Curious to see if life will unfurl her wings and fly with him. Or if it shall fall into the jaws of destruction once more.

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Starting in the village called Norn and the surrounding valley, then I'll start tossing a spiel of problems at you. You can choose to travel or remain in place or whatever! Let's see what happens
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I've got a fairly big interest in this. I'll start working on a CS! đź’š
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@CosmicVixen Lovely to hear and if you have any questions, just ask away!
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@LadyRunic who is putting the approved CS up? Us or you from the previous thread?
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@Omni5876 I figured I'd leave that to you incase you want to note anything in your CS as the Rp progresses.
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done and done.
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@Blizz I like the general idea, but I have a few problems. First off, I don't mind pictures, but I would like the appearance to be written out and any pictures to be appropriate to the time period. And I can promise you a forty year old woman who is essentially a very old woman and could have a grandchild on the way would not look like that. And you need to fill out the Kin. That's where your character comes from, where they were raised.

As for the magic bit, remember magic is rare and the one you've chosen is going to be frowned upon in general. It's not wise after all to mess with the dead, so be aware of that. Also, I wouldn't call it Seerism. Seers see into the future or the hearts of men. Which you need to add as she does have some foresight- the wolf incident from her childhood. What magic you are using are more along the lines of necromancy to speak to the dead, druidism of sorts for spirits and animals. For her age, her magic absolutely be this developed.

Be aware in this timeframe, paper/parchment is expensive and generally writing is kept to the nobles and those with money to spend in the South. So maps would be made on hides, wood, stone and memory.

Now for your biography. It's good but the people to the West? Do you mean a Northern Tribe in the western part of their territory near the sea? There are the Easterns but I'm not allowing people to play as them at the current point in time. And if she was born in the North, there would be snow. The Northerns live tucked up against a large mountain range, and you would not be wrong to compare them to the Norse folk. Also, where are her parents in all of this? Where are her siblings? The biggest problem I have is the fact the magic that would put a girl who was well into her teen years and could be getting ready to consider a potential husband in another few years to admitting she heard voices and that the tribe would completely believe her without some serious doubts? Let alone considering she might be the cause of the wolf attack! Crows/ravens are seen as thieves of crops and warnings of death. There is a certain respect for them for they are sly and clever creatures, but they are connected to death for a lot of people. I could see some tribes embracing the birds, but I would need some good reasoning.

It's not a bad idea, and I'm rather interested in the character! I would just like to see it more embracing the time period and I'm always around for questions if you would like to ask anything.

@Cyrania A reminder since I've looked over your character sheet again, but please put Northern as your Kin rather than unknown since your character was raised there. The mix of Southern/Northern is rather common on the complicated border between Tribal North and Kingdom South, so I like that. But for all the important things pertaining to kin, she is Northern as she was raised in Norn.

I will be putting the finishing touches on the first post and have it up tomorrow. I will also post a warning that while I'm more than willing to answer questions in whatever detail you need, actual posts from me are rare on the weekend due to my work. My apologies for that.
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I’ll work on the appearance, I just liked the picture lol

I wasn’t really sure what to call her magic so that’s the one I went with, Necromancy and Druidism seem a little far apart, which is why I didn’t pick those two names, though I can work with that. She doesn’t always get to choose what they do, sometimes she doesn’t want them to talk to her, but they do anyway

The paper thing went over my head and that makes sense actually yikes

The part about her being from a western tribe was to convey how she has travelled a great distance through her years, and has seen a lot, but I can change that to a more northwestern location with some snow if that would be preferred

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@Blizz Which works well and I dont mind the name but people will get confused as Seers do different things. As for the West bit... Again, I ask what West? She can travel the North as much as she likes, but North West would be along the coast or in the Sea as that is what is west of the Northerners as they are a culture that goes viking. So they are richer than their kin who stay inland and they would be far more leery of a girl speaking in tongues with the dead.
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@LadyRunic I see, I’ll change it so she only traveled through the north and didn’t venture to places like the sea or the east or south and this is the next place in the north she’s appeared at
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@Blizz A bit of clarification. The East and the people there are off-limit, and it would be very hard to get to them. They are blocked from the mountain passes by a glacier and the Southern Kingdoms who are openly hostile with them. They are openly known as hostile so it would be a generally bad idea to go there. However, your character could well have traveled to the Southern Kingdoms and such, but her magic would make people shy away from her as it's not 'natural'. Their view of magic is dimmer and more rigid. She could have also easily gone west as much as she could which is where the most prosperous Northern villages, they have access to the sea which allows them more trade and access to go raiding. I hope this helps.

All this considers also how she is living while doing this traveling? How is she getting food and a place to sleep? Plus not being attacked by bandits, thieves or anything of the sort? She has no skills to help her hunt, start a fire, fish or defend herself? A beauty such as her would be attacked on the road and propositioned many a time spooky powers or no, and there are some who would not take no for an answer. Just something I noticed and I'm bringing up to make you aware you have only the basic ability to defend and provide for yourself.

A typo I presume, you have her age at thirty six and still she left her village at twenty and it's been two decades later.

Also, please pay close attention to the time period, not only that but your character has been travelling in the sun, unless she's been doing all her travelling by night, she would have had some tan and after forty years of life she would not be living with no blemishes. This is a very rough world and she would have scars from encounters with wild animals, people, accidents over the course of twenty years on the road. Your character is a traveller, the only way she could stay unblemished was by being the wife of a powerful chieftan or jarl. The picture has no real influence on your character in the slightest. She hardly looks past her twenties and certainly does not look relevant to the time period.

Also, I while what you have is similar to Necromancy/Druidism there is no real name for them yet. Magic is in it's infancy so to speak. And please keep in mind what I said about books. Especially with the background you chose. She's most likely never seen a book and certainly has no real need to learn to read other than the Northern runes.
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@LadyRunic

Understood, I apologize for the amount of problems with the character, I’ll redo them again shortly
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@Blizz Don't apologize! You are entering a new world and each world operates differently. I'm just bringing up questions I have, such as the skills and how the world operates and being tough about it. It's stuff to think about and when you are in the heat of the situation I don't want you to get upset because you missed something vital.
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@Omni5876 [@@Cyrania] And a starter post is up! Feel free to put yourselves where you wish.

And a note to Cyrania, I took the liberty to make your character's father the local wiseman and healer if that is alright? A settlement really wouldn't need more than two and since he trained you, he wouldn't necessarily have needed to take another apprentice. Just tell me if it's not and I can change it.
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No that's perfectly alright. I was expecting that.

Excited to see this getting started!

I'll do my post tomorrow when I'm more awake.
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Posted. If you need me to write more, I can try to expand on it.
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I was not sure how much control over the NPCs we would have so I still left it open ended what the village sentries would do when they noticed me.
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@CyraniaA good rule of thumb is the more you write the more I can write in turn about your situation and feel free to take initiative. If your character sits around and expects things to just happen all the time by the Gm's plot then it won't work. As I said, this Rp is character driven. I just run the world, and since I'm online at least once everyday I'm more than willing to answer any questions or give any replies that are needed. On a more personal level, I dislike short replies when larger ones can be made. Larger replies give me, as the Gm, a good idea about what you intend or think which can help my posts in turn.

@Omni5876Works well, though you have a few slightly off words which I assume are typos? Submission where I think you meant suspicion? Still, lovely post! I should have a reply tonight or tomorrow.
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I have changed things

- Replaced her reference with something that resembles her more
- Completely redid her appearance section
- Worked on her skills a bit

I think I have the issues ironed out, but if there’s still a problem I missed or created now, lemme know
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