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okay, i changed it a bit
Appearance: A Siberian cat with a glossy, white-as-snow coat. Her coat has a small patch of peach and grey on her face. Her ears are the same, her tail fading to a dark gray.
A very elegant and sleek cat, Mistrunner has a sort of debonair edge to her. She's always surprising her comrades - and her prey - that gives her a reputation as a 'cat burglar' . If she wanted to, she could sit still for hours and watch and keep track of prey. Mistrunner, as a kit, was very jumpy and got startled at even the slightest rustle of a leaf. Mistrunner became more crafty and shrewd as she aged up. She has grown to have a understanding of the macrocosm (as far as cats can learn), and while very knowledgeable, she has very foolish lies that even the most slow-witted could guess. Biography: ?? Apprentice: None Mate?: None. Kits?: None.
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oops i didn't do appearance
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@gummiecandies Better, but it still needs a lot of work. You don't need to make it all one big paragraph to make it look longer/more detailed, you just need to fill out all fields of the sheet in order to make it acceptable. Take my character, Mottledpaw, for instance. You can find her under MistClan cats. I have one paragraph for personality, two for biography, which is more or less the minimum of what I expect from RPers. Your sheet should be as filled out as hers.
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okay, i changed it a bit
Appearance: A Siberian cat with a glossy, white-as-snow coat. Her coat has a small patch of peach and grey on her face. Her ears are the same, her tail fading to a dark gray.
A very elegant and sleek cat, Mistrunner has a sort of debonair edge to her. She's always surprising her comrades - and her prey - that gives her a reputation as a 'cat burglar' . If she wanted to, she could sit still for hours and watch and keep track of prey. Mistrunner, as a kit, was very jumpy and got startled at even the slightest rustle of a leaf. Mistrunner became more crafty and shrewd as she aged up. She has grown to have a understanding of the macrocosm (as far as cats can learn), and while very knowledgeable, she has very foolish lies that even the most slow-witted could guess. Biography: ?? Apprentice: None Mate?: None. Kits?: None.


Would need quite a lot of work. There are somethings I noticed that seem to conflict with the Warriors thing, such as an understanding of the macrocosm which seems a tad excessive, however I'm willing to sit down and help you out if you want a good bit of help. I will suggest that if you find yourself struggling a tad with Casual RP to start out on Free Roleplay forums as they are a lot more new user friendly too. Just tag me or message me if you would like some help on stuff! I'm all for helping new people
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okay
i think i fixed it
Name:
Mistrunner

Age:
26 moons

Gender:
Female

Clan:
Mistclan

Rank:
Warrior

Appearance:
A Siberian cat with a glossy, white-as-snow coat. Her coat has a small patch of peach and grey on her face. Her ears are the same, her tail fading to a dark gray.

Personality:
A very elegant and sleek cat, Mistrunner has a sort of debonair edge to her. She's always surprising her comrades - and her prey - that gives her a reputation as a 'cat burglar' . If she wanted to, she could sit still for hours and watch and keep track of prey.
Biography:
Mistrunner was born with 2 other brothers. Mistrunner, as a kit, was very jumpy and got startled at even the slightest rustle of a leaf. Even more, she ignored almost every sign that enemies were near. Mistrunner became more crafty and shrewd as she aged up. Some would say that Mistrunner's apprenticeship was very doubted. Many more even thought she wouldn't survive to even see 17 moons. Mistrunner became more crafty and shrewd as she aged up. She has grown to have a understanding of the Clans, and while very knowledgeable, she has very foolish lies that even the most slow-witted could guess.
Apprentice?: None.

Mate?:None.

Kits?:None.
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okay
i think i fixed it
Name:
Mistrunner

Age:
26 moons

Gender:
Female

Clan:
Mistclan

Rank:
Warrior

Appearance:
A Siberian cat with a glossy, white-as-snow coat. Her coat has a small patch of peach and grey on her face. Her ears are the same, her tail fading to a dark gray.

Personality:
A very elegant and sleek cat, Mistrunner has a sort of debonair edge to her. She's always surprising her comrades - and her prey - that gives her a reputation as a 'cat burglar' . If she wanted to, she could sit still for hours and watch and keep track of prey.
Biography:
Mistrunner was born with 2 other brothers. Mistrunner, as a kit, was very jumpy and got startled at even the slightest rustle of a leaf. Even more, she ignored almost every sign that enemies were near. Mistrunner became more crafty and shrewd as she aged up. Some would say that Mistrunner's apprenticeship was very doubted. Many more even thought she wouldn't survive to even see 17 moons. Mistrunner became more crafty and shrewd as she aged up. She has grown to have a understanding of the macrocosm (as far as cats can learn), and while very knowledgeable, she has very foolish lies that even the most slow-witted could guess.
Apprentice?: None.

Mate?:None.

Kits?:None.


Eyy that looks much better, though the Macrocosm bit is still probably going to be debatable, but I'd leave that to the GM to decide
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@gummiecandies It's actually much better, good job! Make sure to add your picture at the top. And I would prefer you not add the macrocosm part, but that's the only jarring part. ^^
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@LetMeDoStuff can u help me? lol
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@gummiecandies I gave a critique to your sheet already, it seems pretty good except for that one thing I commented on. After you remove it you may put your character in the character tab and join the discord.
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@LetMeDoStuff can u help me? lol


Would have to be more specific on that one, but Ambra already said there's just one thing that needs changing. I'd have a look at that and see how you feel. If you aren't sure just tell me what you're not specifically sure on. I'll try not to rewrite the character as it is yours but we'll have to make concessions on it to let them fit into the lore
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uhh
i cant get discord
idk why
and the website don't show up either
Name:
Mistrunner

Age:
26 moons

Gender:
Female

Clan:
Mistclan

Rank:
Warrior

Appearance:
A Siberian cat with a glossy, white-as-snow coat. Her coat has a small patch of peach and grey on her face. Her ears are the same, her tail fading to a dark gray.

Personality:
A very elegant and sleek cat, Mistrunner has a sort of debonair edge to her. She's always surprising her comrades - and her prey - that gives her a reputation as a 'cat burglar' . If she wanted to, she could sit still for hours and watch and keep track of prey.
Biography:
Mistrunner was born with 2 other brothers. Mistrunner, as a kit, was very jumpy and got startled at even the slightest rustle of a leaf. Even more, she ignored almost every sign that enemies were near. Mistrunner became more crafty and shrewd as she aged up. Some would say that Mistrunner's apprenticeship was very doubted. Many more even thought she wouldn't survive to even see 17 moons. Mistrunner became more crafty and shrewd as she aged up. She has grown to have a understanding of the Clans, and while very knowledgeable, she has very foolish lies that even the most slow-witted could guess.
Apprentice?: None.

Mate?:None.

Kits?:None
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whats the name of it
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@gummiecandies Here's the invite link

Make sure to post your character in the character tab~
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how do i post it?
can i edit the already existing ones? or do i post it myself??
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@gummiecandies You post it yourself.
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@savannahssu Sorry for pinging you again but are you still around? You haven't really been active on the discord.
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@Ambra Yeah I'm still here. I've been really stressed and desperately trying to find a job. I also have just been reading other people's posts and following the story. Was there anything important happening on the Discord?
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@savannahssu Oh im sorry. I hope you get a job soon. :)
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