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Ok! Here is my second character @Lugubrious. Let me know if there's anything I should change or add.



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Looks pretty good, though I have two notes. One is optional, which is mentioning Galeem somewhere in her bio. You could also at the very list hint at the elements we discussed for her in-world backstory, without mentioning specific nouns. The other thing is that Choose to Be Chosen can't be an absolute blanket immunity against mental effects. She is not without Galeem's influence, after all, and if she were to come into contact with an enemy many times stronger than her with mental powers, it's not guaranteed she'll be exempt. This can be handled just by adding 'most' before 'attacks on her mind'.
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@Lugubrious Ok! I made the changes. Re-worded her resistance to pyschic attack and added some in-world bio stuff.

About her pyschic power resistant, I just didn't want to qualify it too much. Her mental power is her defining feature in the game. It's literally how she uses and does everything. Even her gun. But yeah "most", for sure, obviously there's Galeem.

If she's accepted, should I start posting as her soon, like a solo bit, or just wait until she gets almost reached?

Edit: Um, oops, Jesse's first power, Health Elements, was incomplete. I made some kind of mistake, I don't know what. So you'll need to read that again, sorry.
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@Lugubrious Ok! I made the changes. Re-worded her resistance to pyschic attack and added some in-world bio stuff.

About her pyschic power resistant, I just didn't want to qualify it too much. Her mental power is her defining feature in the game. It's literally how she uses and does everything. Even her gun. But yeah "most", for sure, obviously there's Galeem.

If she's accepted, should I start posting as her soon, like a solo bit, or just wait until she gets almost reached?

Edit: Um, oops, Jesse's first power, Health Elements, was incomplete. I made some kind of mistake, I don't know what. So you'll need to read that again, sorry.


I see. Regarding the health restoration, obviously there's no bar, but since you mentioned a bar does that mean that she can get a full heal off any instance of damage done to enemies?
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@Lugubrious If she does a little bit of damage to enemies, she gets a little bit of healing back. It's relative to her own health, not the health of her enemies. So if she steps on a bug or something and totally kills it, she won't get anything back. But in the game if you walk up to a bad guy and he's hitting her with bullets and she's shooting him with bullets, she can kind of match that DPS with her healing per second. And the crystals drop on the ground where the bad guy gets hit, so she has to walk over and get within a few feet in order to get the healing benefits.

Okay let me try to sum it up instead of being dumb. If she shoots a dude with a bullet, the amount of healing dropped will be a little less than the damage of the bullet she fired.
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@Lugubrious If she does a little bit of damage to enemies, she gets a little bit of healing back. It's relative to her own health, not the health of her enemies. So if she steps on a bug or something and totally kills it, she won't get anything back. But in the game if you walk up to a bad guy and he's hitting her with bullets and she's shooting him with bullets, she can kind of match that DPS with her healing per second. And the crystals drop on the ground where the bad guy gets hit, so she has to walk over and get within a few feet in order to get the healing benefits.

Okay let me try to sum it up instead of being dumb. If she shoots a dude with a bullet, the amount of healing dropped will be a little less than the damage of the bullet she fired.


Got it, in that case it's good. Approved!
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@Lugubrious Awesome! Gonna move her over to where Sakura is on the CS tab.
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@Gentlemanvaultboy I'm going to get it done today, no worries.
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@Gentlemanvaultboy It's done and I sent you a PM why.
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Hey! Was wondering if you guys wouldn't mind having a new player?
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@TheDemonHound I'm not speaking for the GM as it isn't my job nor my place, but I'm curious if you did join what character would you have in mind?
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Hey! Was wondering if you guys wouldn't mind having a new player?


I'm always happy for new players! We've certainly got the space, so I'll look forward to what you come up with.
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@Lugubrious
Awesome! I'll get started on my CS and probably have it up tomorrow since it's kind of almost midnight.

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Uh the character I had in mind is actually from a weird indie game called Lobotomy Corporation. If you've seen anything about SCP it has a really similar vibe to that. Not spoiling who I'm making till I make though, hehe.
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Why isn't there a fear button I can push?
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@Gentlemanvaultboy We did good.
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Sorry for the extra late post but I think I finally got her done. Lemme know if I need to change anything.
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Sorry for the extra late post but I think I finally got her done. Lemme know if I need to change anything.


Seems good to me! So you know, your first image is broken. Taking out everything after the .png in the image url will fix it. Go ahead and put her in Characters and I'll PM you about a starting point.
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Alrighty got her in the character tab @Lugubrious!
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I'm a bit stressed out right now, but I'll try to get my post done ASAP.
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