[OOC] The Savage And Subservient (SleepingSilence x KatherinWinter)

[SleepingSilence]

Woops. :D

[KatherinWinter]

Did you mean yo post this in the IC?

[SleepingSilence]

@KatherinWinter In the correct spot now. Sorry. :P

[SleepingSilence]

@KatherinWinter Posted before bed. ^-^ I don't take typo's that seriously, I don't mean to offend anyone when I point them out. So I'll ask if you wanted me to. If so, I can. Feel free to point out if I make mistakes/ask me for clarification on anything I write.

Look forward to the story we create. :3

[KatherinWinter]

I usually catch mistakes but if I make one let me know. I can't grow and improve if I don't know I'm doing something wrong. If something is unclear feel free to ask questions. I tend to forget details.

[SleepingSilence]

@KatherinWinter
I'm certain these mistake were from the process of writing up something quickly. (ironically while first typing this, I typed 'quickyl'. :P) Just something google chrome is good for, since it auto-corrects those silly mistakes. It just tends to help to run a post through spellcheck. I was going to PM these, but since it's already a 1x1, I guess this is sort of private.

Elizabeth had been arrested almost a year ago for a ctime she hadn't committed. The person who framed her had done such a good job that no one had even questioned that she was the responsible party. Because she wasn't the type to stand up for herself she had ended up a slave in order to pay off her debt to society. She hadn'the fought or defended herself. She had known she couldn't win against the person who framef her so she had given up.

*ctime
(crime)

*framef
(framed)

*hadn'the
(hadn't)

[KatherinWinter]

I am not entirely sure why Bastian acted so crazy. is he always so confusing?

[SleepingSilence]

@KatherinWinter If you ask, he'll explain his motivation. (I do have an explanation, in mind.) He's not crazy, but impulsiveness will have you do such things. :P

[SleepingSilence]

@KatherinWinter Posted. Sorry it took so long, for such a short post. Worked on a big CS, and had my roommate make me do things. So quite tired, and it's past 2 am. I'm brain dead, and going to sleep. XD

Hopefully this is worded well. But I just wanted to say, I can greatly appreciate those who can go with the flow. I like that you used that NPC character in the post. Too many people are worried about that stuff. ^3^

[KatherinWinter]

As long as the character doesn't have a name or will be a major part of the RP I will use NPCs. But I won't use side characters if they're long term.

[SleepingSilence]

@KatherinWinter
You don't need to rush. I'm fine if you take a bit longer to read through/use a program to help edit your posts.

And I only bring it up now, because without looking at the keyboard, I genuinely wouldn't be able to tell what one of those words were suppose to be.

Errors

Even though she was nearly a genius, being smart had nothing to do with Liz not trying to run. She didnt try to escape because she was too afraid. Not only of what her owner would do if he caught her, wbixh she had no diubt he would because he had many advantages over her, but of everything. She had never been on her own. Plus the whole slave mark she had bern give so that everyone would know what she was.

*didn't (i don't usually care about correcting these, but just for the sake of wishing to improve.)
*which ?
*doubt
*been given

Liz did her best to keep up with her owner. But the beastkind had longer legs than she did and was in much better condition than she was. She was exhausted by the time he stopped. She was surprised to then he let the horse. Animals were good judges of character. Maybe her owner wasn't that bad.

*She was surprised to learn he had a horse? She was surprised that he pet the horse? (I just found this, but I have no idea what this sentence is supposed to mean.)

Previous errors If you wish to fix them. (Aside from the first one)

Every morning she sat in the corner of her cage with her arms wrapped around the legs dreeding the day she was sold. So far she had been overlooked. Which she thought was a good thing. She had heard stories of what happened to young slaves. She didn't dare hope for a good master. She wasn't that lucky. At best she would spend her rest of her life in the cage. She was used to being invisible. The way she saw it things could be worse so why stir the pot?.

*Dreading

Liz nodded mostly because she didn't know what else to do. It wasn't as if she had a choice. She had never had a choice. That was a dream that she had given up when she was arrested for a crime that she didn't commit. She followed the beast. She kept her eyes down. The crowd scared her almost as her new owner did. In a way she was thankful for the crowds reaction to her new owner. She didn't know what to expect. She knew next to nothing about the beastkin. She had heard rumors but she knew that those were not the most reliable source of information.

*beastkind. ;P

Liz didn't know what to think of her new owner. He said nothing to her as he drug her through the streets. She had the feeling that if they hadn't moved he would have simply plowed them over. Luckily people moved out of his way. She stumbled slightly when he stopped suddenly in front of a vender. This one was one of the few beastkind venders. She did her best not listen while they were talking. It was none of her business what they did.

*vendor/vendors

She assumed that they were going to be traveling sinced he told her to get something she could carry. She had traveled a lot since she had been sentenced. But she had a feeling this would be different. She she could only hope that she could satisfy the beast. The thought of disappointing him terrified her. He would be harder on her then her father and the slavers. "I am ready to go." She didn't want to keep him too long. She knew that he had a job to do.

*since

[KatherinWinter]

Sorry autocorrect and I aren't friends. Since I tend to make the same mistakes it tends learn to ignore my mistakes instead of foxing them. I'll try to be more careful. Most of my post are on my phone because I have access to it the most.

[SleepingSilence]

@KatherinWinter *fixing. Jk, just found it funny/ironic given the subject. xP

But I get it, I tend to be extra careful on my phone because my speech to text is a disaster. I appreciate it taking it in stride.

[KatherinWinter]

Is this "She's still fearful after what happened. Maybe understanding my motivations would be in both our best interests before going further.' a thought?

[SleepingSilence]

@KatherinWinter Yep. Italicized words is shorthand for thought.

[KatherinWinter]

I couldn't tell if it was italic or not.

[SleepingSilence]

@KatherinWinterFair enough. I'm okay with any questions, I want us to both be on the same page. :3

[KatherinWinter]

I am sorry for the delay. Wasn't feeling well this weekend. I don't understand your post. In the begin it is like he is telling her that the only way to survive is to be subservient. But then he says he saw a spark in her as if she was capable of being more.

[SleepingSilence]

@KatherinWinter Okay, thanks for getting back to me. Sorry to hear about that, hopefully you've recovered.

He is simply talking to her about several things.

Explaining.

1a. The Kingdom's Motto

"They say only two types of people survive in this world. The savage and the subservient...You either dominate all below you with an iron fist or you eat out of the palm of your owner's hand. Those that do neither, will die quickly. That ruthless belief permeates throughout these lands..."

1b. His disdain toward the motto.

He sounded bitter. Clearly talking to her, despite looking in a different direction, having a slight scowl on his face.

2. Explaining why he stormed the stage and how it unfolded, saying you were the only slave on stage that he saw potential in.

"I observed everyone on that stage and I saw nothing but emptiness in every prisoner's eye. A chain of cold, defeated souls, hollow shells of their former selves. They couldn't help themselves, let alone be useful to me. But you were different, whether you believe it or not. I saw the spark of desire in your eye. I couldn't let anyone acquire you..."

"I knew I didn't have the wealth nobility threw around and decided to charge upon the stage and hope my father's old necklace would spook them into conceding with my bid."

3. Explaining his disdain for slavery.

"So, forgive my erratic behavior and my exploitation. I want you to fully understand, that under most circumstances I find the act of slavery abhorrent,"

4. Explaining that he is using her, to get into locations he can't. (Being beastkind.) to find his kidnapped children and is promising freedom after the fact.

"but I've become a desperate man. My son and daughter...they were kidnapped and I haven't seen or heard from them since. I need someone that can go through places I can't access, someone to help me get them back...I'll give you my word, once I track down the ones who kidnapped my children, retrieve them both and bring them safety back home. I will grant you freedom."

The 'seems creepy line' is another thought. :P I guess the dark blue makes it harder to see the changed/italicized text. Oops.

Hopefully more clear? :)

[KatherinWinter]

I am feeling better thanks.
1a. The Kingdom's Motto

Why does he think he needs to tell her the motto?

1b. His disdain toward the motto.

That I got

2. Explaining why he stormed the stage and how it unfolded, saying you were the only slave on stage that he saw potential in.

But potential for what? Becoming more? Surviving? Understanding?

3. Explaining his disdain for slavery.

I got this but Liz won't.

4. Explaining that he is using her, to get into locations he can't. (Being beastkind.) to find his kidnapped children and is promising freedom after the fact.

I understood why he needed her. But not why he offered her freedom.