[OOC] Dragonball: Warriors of Time

[Dirty Dan]

Pretty sure that's gonna get a big flat 'no', but regardless, let's not dick measure. I see it happen a lot in Free, and sometimes in Casual. It's a bit cringy.

[The Slenderman]

I'll nerf the transformation types and his base to maybe higher than Goku( Straight after Raditz Saga, which was 344 or something.. correct me if i'm wrong )

[Ben]

I'll nerf the transformation types and his base to maybe higher than Goku( Straight after Raditz Saga, which was 344 or something.. correct me if i'm wrong )

@The Slenderman

The Goku who fought Raditz was in the mid 500s, he was in the 300s 5 years earlier at the 23rd budokai.

[Dirty Dan]

We can only have, at the maximum, five techniques. Transformations count as techniques, and I'm sure that, over-all, the GM wouldn't even want us to be able to transform at the start of the role-play.

Buuut, I'll let him handle it. I wouldn't wanna GM when I'm not a GM.

[Eklispe]

Interested in this. Going to be traveling so can't put my CS in very quick but I plan on making a Frieza Race character. Just finished playing Xenoverse with one. XD

[Bright_Ops]

Winter

Name: Winter
Gender: Male
Age: 23
Race: Frost Demon (Frieza Clan/Race)

Appearance:

Moves:
Death Beam
Death Slicer
Ki Blast Cannon
Meteor Crash
Unrelenting Barrage

Personality: Those who speak to Winter will quickly find that something seems... wrong about him. He is somewhat cold to the goings on of others but he isn't stand offish or even unfriendly. He just seems more focused on what is going on inside of his head then he is of the world around him. Those that can see into matters of the heart or can read emotions through the motions of the body who see Winter fight or train will quickly uncover at least part of the puzzle; There is a lot of pain in his heart and it is fueling an inferno of hatred within his soul, but what happened and who that hatred is aimed at is unknown. If someone doesn't reach out and connect with him before it is too late, there is no telling what dark path Winter may find himself following.

History: Winter was the youngest of three boys growing up, the youngest child of the noble House Winter and thus raised to hold himself to a high standard in order to maintain the family's image. While House Winter had never been able to raise itself to a position of king of their people, they were an older family that were as respected for their wisdom and wise council as they were praised as fighters.

When would be King Cold launched his coup to seize control of the crown, he first tried to bury House Winter with a detachment of his men and tried to use numbers to make up for the difference in skill. Despite the element of surprise and greater numbers Cold's forces were slaughtered with little harm to House Winter. When his own troops failed, Cold sent in waves of alien mercenaries to try instead. While at first the battle clearly favored House Winter, the raising of the moon caused several of the mercenaries to transform into giant monkeys before rampaging through their holdings with an huge power boost. Despite the overwhelming power of the aliens, House Winter managed to cut them down... but with great cost.

When Cold, after slaughtering the ruling royal family and claiming the crown for himself, arrived at House Winter's holdings, there was only a token amount of clan members left alive and standing, battered and beaten but still fighting. Once Cold joined the fight, there was simply no stopping him as he cut down one member of House Winter after another until only Winter and his brothers were left. Charging the so called 'King' together, Winter was the first to reach him and attack only to be knocked aside and into a wall. Buried in rubble, he watched helplessly as his brothers were cut down before him before he himself vanished in a bright light.

[Lofi]

@The Slenderman That character is stupid strong, and you didn't even bother to follow the rules of the character sheet template I provided. You didn't use the one I provided either. It makes it easier on everyone involved if your character sheet follows the same format as everyone else's.

Skim through everyone's character sheets. They each have a power that is around the same tier. Make your new character sheet on their level, and please use the template I provided in the original post.

We can only have, at the maximum, five techniques. Transformations count as techniques, and I'm sure that, over-all, the GM wouldn't even want us to be able to transform at the start of the role-play.

@Dirty Dan

Yes, I failed to mention that transformations counted as techniques, because in Xenoverse they are. But I don't expect everybody to have played that game, and I tried to make this RP straightforward as possible for those who haven't played. And yeah, transformations will have to be talked about with me. I view them as a thing that's kind of crucial to the plot. An "aah" moment if you will. I don't like the idea of people starting of with them, even Kaiokens will taken into consideration before they're performed. Transformations increase power, and I'd prefer to keep things fair. So transformations will only be for the good of the story.

@Bright_Ops Winter is accepted. And I like his backstory a ton. :)

[Bright_Ops]

@Lofi

I hope mine meets your standards. The way I see it, Winter wasn't a bad fighter on his own, but there were members of his clan that were much stronger then he was and united the clan was fairly formidable.

[The Slenderman]

How about i just tweak and cut while maintaining your CS guidelines and just take away the transformations and leave the Ki attacks (i think) then put a power level (PL = 287) included in his information. If you would allow that.

[Lofi]

How about i just tweak and cut while maintaining your CS guidelines and just take away the transformations and leave the Ki attacks (i think) then put a power level (PL = 287) included in his information. If you would allow that.

@The Slenderman

Nobody else put a power level, because I didn't ask for that. I'm against power levels because they became meaningless after the Frieza Saga, anyway. And that was the whole idea behind it as well. They're a flawed idea because the Z-Fighters can hide their ki and fool the scouters. It all really comes down to technique anyway.

But I'm rambling. Anyway, if you do those things, as well as nix the power level, I'll consider your CS.

[Mr_pink]

uh, Slenderman I'm pretty sure only accepted CSes are supposed to go in the character tab..

[Lofi]

Slenderman, could you please delete your character from the character tab until and if your character is accepted?

Edit: And now that I look, he needs to have a real personality as well. That just seems like laziness there.

Edit2: After consideration, I am going to reject your CS, Slenderman.

[Mr_pink]

I'm considering having Satchi being unable to fly at the start of the RP, seeing as she wont have met anyone who would have been able to teach her how to in her life.

[The Slenderman]

@Lofi do you mind if i make another

[Lofi]

@Lofi do you mind if i make another

@The Slenderman

I do mind. Saying that your character has no personality is extremely Gary-Stuish and makes me have little to no faith in your ability to roleplay in this RP. I am sorry.

[MonsieurShade]

@The Slenderman If I may interject here, the issue with your character as I see it is that your character submission seems as though you strove to make Gula the absolute cream of the crop, almost as if you were striving to make him the de facto leader by way of being unbeatable by the others. This would ultimately mean that the plot would be railroaded to focus around your characters feats rather than the actions of the group as a whole. Now, this isn't always a cardinal sin and can be done tastefully if you do it right and ensure everyone has their time to shine, however you also went and made your character some sort of "I will destroy the world and everyone on it" type in what is otherwise a rag tag team of warriors with backgrounds that, while not all tame, aren't all that dramatic either.

Pink's character Satchi is someone who started out following in her father's footsteps and ended up achieving greatness of her own, Dan's character Xalam's is a somewhat rough and tumble sort who's story is reminiscent of both Piccolo jr's and future Trunks': A warrior who started out with a bad hand dealt to him looking to spare a home not truly his own the atrocities of his own home by growing stronger, Chev's Vekon is just someone looking to survive so he can become strong enough to find a way to escape the hostile land he's trapped in, Spriggs' Sinthe is someone who's had greatness more or less forced onto him due to a prophetic belief, and due to his upbringing believes this himself and is actively pursuing the completion of this prophecy, my character Dimitri is essentially a rank and file soldier from a totalitarian world who occasionally struggles with what little of his humanity remains as he's sent to dispatch his predecessors, and Op's Winter is a noble from a powerful family who attempted to resist a coup despite being met with overwhelming odds.

All of these characters can fit into one troupe or another. All of them can be related to in at least one way and can reasonably be made to work with one another with the right incentive. Your character starts off with a decent background, however it takes an abrupt turn when Gula goes from "i'm cool with all of this" to "kill all humans because of the ineptitude of police officers in one incident". Mind you, his saiyan programming should've had him trying to kill everyone on earth from the day he landed, however you chose to have him inexplicably ignore it, which honestly shouldn't be possible considering that it's a subconcious thing that is countered with a sharp blow to the head during infancy (a la Goku). I'm really not trying to be an asshole here, but it just comes off as unnecessarily convoluted.

[Ben]

Coffey

Name: Coffey

Gender: Male

Age: 20

Race: Human

Appearance: Coffey
But without the earrings I guess...

Moves:

• Automatic Defense: Automatic Defense is a contiuous spell that continues in the background as Coffey fights, the spell can only be active for a few seconds at a time and must cooldown for as long as it was active but while it is active, will automatically teleport Coffey out of the path of fast moving objects that approach him. This spell is necessary for him to fight Ki users who are often faster than he can even react to.
• Lightning Rain: Coffey summons a massive magical lightning bolt from above, far more powerful than any real lightning; this spell's large AoE is useful for hitting enemies whom he cannot track
• Magic Beam: Coffey fires a low power blast of magic; doesn't have any major advantages other than being easy to use
• Conjury: Coffey can conjure simple objects (like clothes) out of nothing

Personality: Coffey is friendly and curtious to a fault; he is not particularly selfless or generous but I'll be damned if he isn't polite. He's kind in word, spirit, and demenour at almost all times, even when anger or aggression is thrown his way. Coffey is however, not particularly heroic, his kindness is entirely genuine but it does not go beyond civility; he has no intentions of sharing when he doesn't have to, and will not lay his neck on the line for others without something in return.

History

Coffey's late great grandfather had been a great magical craftsman who had many times been called apon by Korin and even Kami (though he had never seen Kami in the flesh) and was actually the very man who created the Power Pole, among other instruments of grandeur. He was a notorious recluse, however, and his name was largely swept under the rug of time with many forgetting his involvement in the creation of these items.

Born just outside of East City, Coffey had an interest in magic from a young age. He had been inspired by his great grandfather's work; he learned the basics of magic from old books that his family had inherited from his great grandfather (many of which he had written). Of course, magic isn't a widely known art, and so he was sheltered from most of society for a large part of his life, later moving to Papaya island where he was even more excluded from society.

In hindsight, moving to Papaya island wasn't the greatest move to get away from society as the World Martial Arts Tournament took place there every 3 years. While his parents would often attempt to stop Coffey from seeing or even knowing about the tournament, Coffey would always find a way to sneak away from his studies and watch the tournament through the wire fences around the venue.

Seeing the intense action of the tournaments held at Papaya Island (both the Budokai Tenkaichi and smaller tournaments held in-between) got him interested in combat, and he began to focus his studies on developing magic that would be valuable in fights, especially magic designed to counter the advantages of superhuman physical bodies like those of tournament finalists.

Just tell me what I need to change.

[Spriggs27]

@The Slenderman If I may interject here, the issue with your character as I see it is that your character submission seems as though you strove to make Gula the absolute cream of the crop, almost as if you were striving to make him the de facto leader by way of being unbeatable by the others. This would ultimately mean that the plot would be railroaded to focus around your characters feats rather than the actions of the group as a whole. Now, this isn't always a cardinal sin and can be done tastefully if you do it right and ensure everyone has their time to shine, however you also went and made your character some sort of "I will destroy the world and everyone on it" type in what is otherwise a rag tag team of warriors with backgrounds that, while not all tame, aren't all that dramatic either.

Pink's character Satchi is someone who started out following in her father's footsteps and ended up achieving greatness of her own, Dan's character Xalam's is a somewhat rough and tumble sort who's story is reminiscent of both Piccolo jr's and future Trunks': A warrior who started out with a bad hand dealt to him looking to spare a home not truly his own the atrocities of his own home by growing stronger, Chev's Vekon is just someone looking to survive so he can become strong enough to find a way to escape the hostile land he's trapped in, Spriggs' Sinthe is someone who's had greatness more or less forced onto him due to a prophetic belief, and due to his upbringing believes this himself and is actively pursuing the completion of this prophecy, my character Dimitri is essentially a rank and file soldier from a totalitarian world who occasionally struggles with what little of his humanity remains as he's sent to dispatch his predecessors, and Op's Winter is a noble from a powerful family who attempted to resist a coup despite being met with overwhelming odds.

All of these characters can fit into one troupe or another. All of them can be related to in at least one way and can reasonably be made to work with one another with the right incentive. Your character starts off with a decent background, however it takes an abrupt turn when Gula goes from "i'm cool with all of this" to "kill all humans because of the ineptitude of police officers in one incident". Mind you, his saiyan programming should've had him trying to kill everyone on earth from the day he landed, however you chose to have him inexplicably ignore it, which honestly shouldn't be possible considering that it's a subconcious thing that is countered with a sharp blow to the head during infancy (a la Goku). I'm really not trying to be an asshole here, but it just comes off as unnecessarily convoluted.

@MonsieurShade

Well said Shade.

[Lofi]

@BenNah, Ben. You're good. That's a good CS. Accepted.

And with Ben's CS being accepted, we have one last spot open. I'll try to get an IC post written up which I'll post tomorrow. Thank you everyone for being patient with me.

[Chev]

@The Slenderman If I may interject here, the issue with your character as I see it is that your character submission seems as though you strove to make Gula the absolute cream of the crop, almost as if you were striving to make him the de facto leader by way of being unbeatable by the others. This would ultimately mean that the plot would be railroaded to focus around your characters feats rather than the actions of the group as a whole. Now, this isn't always a cardinal sin and can be done tastefully if you do it right and ensure everyone has their time to shine, however you also went and made your character some sort of "I will destroy the world and everyone on it" type in what is otherwise a rag tag team of warriors with backgrounds that, while not all tame, aren't all that dramatic either.

Pink's character Satchi is someone who started out following in her father's footsteps and ended up achieving greatness of her own, Dan's character Xalam's is a somewhat rough and tumble sort who's story is reminiscent of both Piccolo jr's and future Trunks': A warrior who started out with a bad hand dealt to him looking to spare a home not truly his own the atrocities of his own home by growing stronger, Chev's Vekon is just someone looking to survive so he can become strong enough to find a way to escape the hostile land he's trapped in, Spriggs' Sinthe is someone who's had greatness more or less forced onto him due to a prophetic belief, and due to his upbringing believes this himself and is actively pursuing the completion of this prophecy, my character Dimitri is essentially a rank and file soldier from a totalitarian world who occasionally struggles with what little of his humanity remains as he's sent to dispatch his predecessors, and Op's Winter is a noble from a powerful family who attempted to resist a coup despite being met with overwhelming odds.

All of these characters can fit into one troupe or another. All of them can be related to in at least one way and can reasonably be made to work with one another with the right incentive. Your character starts off with a decent background, however it takes an abrupt turn when Gula goes from "i'm cool with all of this" to "kill all humans because of the ineptitude of police officers in one incident". Mind you, his saiyan programming should've had him trying to kill everyone on earth from the day he landed, however you chose to have him inexplicably ignore it, which honestly shouldn't be possible considering that it's a subconcious thing that is countered with a sharp blow to the head during infancy (a la Goku). I'm really not trying to be an asshole here, but it just comes off as unnecessarily convoluted.

@MonsieurShade

Well put, But you should know Vekon has another goal besides the one you described.